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Intzaar rahega...

Ye to mai regular padh raha hu... Iske baad uspe bhi thoda dhyaan dijiye...

Starting to achi hai par ye birju naam ka character kuch doubtful hai kyunki kahani incest category me rakhi hai aapne to koshish kariye k birju bas dekh kar tadpata hi rahe....

G haa par waha aapne complete nahi ki ab tak...

Kya ye story yaha complete hogi???

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Mere khyaal se ab aapko veer ka character bhi thoda develop karna chahiye jaise uske pita k paas kaafi knowledge thi tantra vidya ki to veer ko bhi koi trainer milna chahiye yaa kuch super powers kyunki inke dushmano ki ginti kaafi hai ...

Ok par intzaar ka fall metha hona chahiye...

Kafi achaa likh rahi hai aap par mujhe lagta hai agar aap veer aur reeta pe thoda jyada focus kare sashumi ko chod kar to story jyada erotic ho sakti hai jaise k reeta ko bina pata chale k veer uska beta hai uska veer ki taraf sexuly attract hona is se kuch bahot hi hot update likhi jaa sakti hai...