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Raji ko asha hai ke aap sab log uske prayas ko pasand kroge.

Update1Intro Surbhi heroine ๐Ÿ‘‡

20211217-162337
.. Mera naam Surbhi hai, umar 20 yr, fair colored, figure 34 30 36,aur me Punjab ke ek big city ke college me B tech ki student hu.Meri family me mere Pita Vikas age 40 yr,unki health bahut achhi hai,fair complexion,aur height 5'-10" hai.

Mere mummy Sushma๐Ÿ‘‡ age 39, good height, figure 36 32 38,bahut sunder, fair colored, apni age se kum hi lagti hai,bahut jachti hai.
Sushma ๐Ÿ‘‡ Surbhi ki mumy


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Ek meri bua Preeti hai ,age 30 years hai ye bhi bahut beautiful aur fair
Preeti. ๐Ÿ‘‡

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colored hai, figure 34 30 36.Ye mere Dada ji ke dost ki beti hai.Inko inke husband ne jo ke nashe karta hai, chhod rakha hai.

Inke pitaji ki death ho chuki hai,aur inke ghar ka gujara mushkil se chal ta hai.

Inki mummy ke kehne par,papa ne inko ghar me rakh liya tha,ye soch kar ke ghar ki nigarani rakh legi aur ghar ka kam kar liya karegi.

Lekin ab ye hamare sath family member ki tarah hi rehti hai..

Hamari family kafi rich hai,papa ke kapdo ke kai showroom hai.
Me Activa se college jati hu.College me meri ek bahut achhi friend hai.
Uska naam Pammi hai.Pammi mere sath B tech me hi padhayi kar rahi hai.
Iske papa Pankaj mere papa ke dost hi hai,aur iske mummy ka naam Sheetal hai. Sheetal aunty bhi bahut beautiful hai,inki age 41 yr, figure 36 32 38,bahut
Sheetal ๐Ÿ‘‡ Pammi di mummy


20211223-083852
zabardast look hai inki,lekin inko bachedani ka cancer ho gaya tha,jis karn inko bachedani ko nikal wana pad gya tha.Aur ab ye sexual intercourse nahi kar sakti.
Pammi vesse bahut beautiful aur sexy hai,iski figure 36 30 38
Pammi ๐Ÿ‘‡

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hai,fair colored hai.Iski badi Gand aur boobs per boys bahut gande comments karte hai, boys to mujh par bhi bahut dirty comments karte hai, lekin hum dono kisi ko ghas nahi dalte.

Ek bar galti se meri ek book , Pammi apne sath le gyi thi,to me apni book lene uske ghar chali gayi.

Ghar ja kar mene dekha, main gate khula hua tha, mujhe ander se kuchh awaje sunai di.Mene drawing room me jhak kar dekha to Pammi apne papa ki godh me nagan ho kar unke lund par bethi thi.Uske papa bhi naked hi the.Pammi bahut maze se Apni chut apne papa ke lund par rub kar rahi thi,aur uske papa uske boobs daba rahe the.

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.Kamre me se bahut kamuk awaje a rahi thi hiii cccccรงccccc uffffff eeeee pankajjjjj rajeeee,pa do ab apna loda meri chut me,ah bahut maza a raha hai Pankaj,ahhh ufff.Uske papa uthe aur unhone apna 9"lamba aur 2" inch wide loda Pammi ke mouth ke pass kar diya.Pammi ne

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lund ko suck karna shuru kar diya,aur kehne lagi raje dal do ab apna sanp apni beti cum lugai ke fudde me.
Uske papa ne fauran apna loda Pammi ke fudde ke chhed par lagaya aur ek hi dhakke me uski chut me dal diya aur

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dhakke lagane laga . Pammi bhi apni gand ko upar utha utha kar,maze se apne papa se chudwane lagi.20 mint baad uske papa ne apne big lund se maal nikal kar

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Pammi ki chut me bhar diya.

Me bhi unki chudai dekh kar bahut hot ho gyi thi,aur meri chut bhi wet ho gyi thi.Lekin me chup chap bina kisi se kuchh kahe,deep breathing karti hui apne ghar laut ayi.

Friends kindly like, reply nd comments jarur karna ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™
Raji will wait

To be continued
 
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Friends me apni new story start krne ja rahi hu aur aap sabke sehyog ki kamna karti hu.Pehle mene ye kahani kisi aur site par likhi thi lekin ab kuchh changes ke sath me yahn likh rahi hu.Raji ko asha hai ke aap sab log uske prayas ko pasand kroge.
Update 1 Surbhi heroine ๐Ÿ‘‡

20211217-162337
.. Mera naam Surbhi hai, umar 20 yr, fair colored, figure 34 30 36,aur me Punjab ke ek big city ke college me B tech ki student hu, meri family me mere Pita Vikas age 40 yr,unki health bahut achhi hai,fair complexion,aur height 5'-10" hai;mere mummy Sushma age 39, good height,9 figure 36 32 38,bahut sunder, fair colored, apni age se kum hi lagti hai,bahut jachti hai; ek mere bua Preeti ji hai,age 30
Sushma ๐Ÿ‘‡ Surbhi ki mumy


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years hai ye bhi bahut beautiful aur fair
Preeti. ๐Ÿ‘‡

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colored hai, figure 34 30 36,ye mere Dada ji ke dost ki beti hai,inko inke husband ne jo ke nashe karta hai, chhod rakha hai,inke pitaji ki death ho chuki hai,aur inke ghar ka gujara mushkil se chal ta hai,inki mummy ke kehne par,papa ne inko ghar me rakh liya tha,ye soch kar ke ghar ki nigarani rakh legi aur ghar ka kam kar liya karegi.Lekin ab ye hamare sath family member ki tarah hi rehti hai.. Hamari family kafi rich hai,papa ke kapdo ke kai showroom hai.
Me Activa se college jati hu.College me meri ek bahut achhi friend hai.Uska naam Pammi hai.Pammi mere sath B tech me hi padhayi kar rahi hai.Iske papa Pankaj mere papa ke dost hi hai,aur iske mummy Sheetal. Sheetal aunty bhi bahut beautiful hai,inki age 41 yr, figure 36 32 38,bahut
Sheetal ๐Ÿ‘‡ Pammi di mumy


20211223-083852
zabardast look hai inki,lekin inko bachedani ka cancer ho gaya tha,jis karn inko bachedani ko nikal wana pad gya tha, aur ab ye sexual intercourse nahi kar sakti. Pammi vesse bahut beautiful aur sexy hai,iski figure 36 30 38
Pammi ๐Ÿ‘‡

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hai,fair colored hai,iski badi Gand aur boobs per boys bahut gande comments karte hai, boys to mujh par bhi bahut dirty comments karte hai, lekin hum dono kisi ko ghas nahi dalte.

Ek bar galti se meri ek book , Pammi apne sath le gyi thi,to me apni book lene uske ghar chali gayi.
Ghar ja kar mene dekha, main gate khula hua tha, mujhe ander se kuchh awaje sunai di.Mene drawing room me jhak kar dekha to Pammi apne papa ki goad me nagan ho kar unke lund par bethi thi, uske papa bhi naked hi the.Pammi bahut maze se Apni chut apne papa ke lund par rub kar rahi thi,aur uske papa uske boobs daba rahe the.

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.Kamre me se bahut kamuk awaje a rahi thi hiii cccccรงccccc uffffff eeeee pankajjjjj rajeeee,pa do ab apna loda meri chut me,ah bahut maza a raha hai Pankaj,ahhh ufff.Uske papa uthe aur unhone apna 9"lamba aur 2" inch wide loda Pammi ke mouth ke pass kar diya.Pammi ne

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lund ko suck karna shuru kar diya,aur kehne lagi raje dal do ab apna sanp apni beti cum lugai ke fudde me.
Uske papa ne fauran apna loda Pammi ke fudde ke chhed par lagaya aur ek hi dhakke me uski chut me dal diya aur

close-up-18323
dhakke lagane laga . Pammi bhi apni gand ko upar utha utha kar,maze se apne papa se chudwane lagi.20 mint baad uske papa ne apne big lund se maal nikal kar

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Pammi ki chut me bhar diya.Me bhi unki chudai dekh kar bahut hot ho gyi thi,aur meri chut bhi wet ho gyi thi.Lekin me chup chap bina kisi se kuchh kahe,deep breathing karti hui apne ghar laut ayi.
Friends kindly like, reply nd comments jarur karna ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™
Raji will wait
To be continued
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Friends me apni new story start krne ja rahi hu aur aap sabke sehyog ki kamna karti hu.Pehle mene ye kahani kisi aur site par likhi thi lekin ab kuchh changes ke sath me yahn likh rahi hu.Raji ko asha hai ke aap sab log uske prayas ko pasand kroge.
Update 1 Surbhi heroine ๐Ÿ‘‡

20211217-162337
.. Mera naam Surbhi hai, umar 20 yr, fair colored, figure 34 30 36,aur me Punjab ke ek big city ke college me B tech ki student hu, meri family me mere Pita Vikas age 40 yr,unki health bahut achhi hai,fair complexion,aur height 5'-10" hai;mere mummy Sushma age 39, good height, figure 36 32 38,bahut sunder, fair colored, apni age se kum hi lagti hai,bahut jachti hai; ek mere bua Preeti ji hai,age 30
Sushma ๐Ÿ‘‡ Surbhi ki mumy


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years hai ye bhi bahut beautiful aur fair
Preeti. ๐Ÿ‘‡

292288039-1054822731840644-4337064098048733037-n
colored hai, figure 34 30 36,ye mere Dada ji ke dost ki beti hai,inko inke husband ne jo ke nashe karta hai, chhod rakha hai,inke pitaji ki death ho chuki hai,aur inke ghar ka gujara mushkil se chal ta hai,inki mummy ke kehne par,papa ne inko ghar me rakh liya tha,ye soch kar ke ghar ki nigarani rakh legi aur ghar ka kam kar liya karegi.Lekin ab ye hamare sath family member ki tarah hi rehti hai.. Hamari family kafi rich hai,papa ke kapdo ke kai showroom hai.
Me Activa se college jati hu.College me meri ek bahut achhi friend hai.Uska naam Pammi hai.Pammi mere sath B tech me hi padhayi kar rahi hai.Iske papa Pankaj mere papa ke dost hi hai,aur iske mummy Sheetal. Sheetal aunty bhi bahut beautiful hai,inki age 41 yr, figure 36 32 38,bahut
Sheetal ๐Ÿ‘‡ Pammi di mumy


20211223-083852
zabardast look hai inki,lekin inko bachedani ka cancer ho gaya tha,jis karn inko bachedani ko nikal wana pad gya tha, aur ab ye sexual intercourse nahi kar sakti. Pammi vesse bahut beautiful aur sexy hai,iski figure 36 30 38
Pammi ๐Ÿ‘‡

f802adc3d082820b9a23662380f439a0
hai,fair colored hai,iski badi Gand aur boobs per boys bahut gande comments karte hai, boys to mujh par bhi bahut dirty comments karte hai, lekin hum dono kisi ko ghas nahi dalte.

Ek bar galti se meri ek book , Pammi apne sath le gyi thi,to me apni book lene uske ghar chali gayi.
Ghar ja kar mene dekha, main gate khula hua tha, mujhe ander se kuchh awaje sunai di.Mene drawing room me jhak kar dekha to Pammi apne papa ki goad me nagan ho kar unke lund par bethi thi, uske papa bhi naked hi the.Pammi bahut maze se Apni chut apne papa ke lund par rub kar rahi thi,aur uske papa uske boobs daba rahe the.

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.Kamre me se bahut kamuk awaje a rahi thi hiii cccccรงccccc uffffff eeeee pankajjjjj rajeeee,pa do ab apna loda meri chut me,ah bahut maza a raha hai Pankaj,ahhh ufff.Uske papa uthe aur unhone apna 9"lamba aur 2" inch wide loda Pammi ke mouth ke pass kar diya.Pammi ne

tumblr-1a1c5c1ea3fd87468073521893701fb2-8126fc9f-500
lund ko suck karna shuru kar diya,aur kehne lagi raje dal do ab apna sanp apni beti cum lugai ke fudde me.
Uske papa ne fauran apna loda Pammi ke fudde ke chhed par lagaya aur ek hi dhakke me uski chut me dal diya aur

close-up-18323
dhakke lagane laga . Pammi bhi apni gand ko upar utha utha kar,maze se apne papa se chudwane lagi.20 mint baad uske papa ne apne big lund se maal nikal kar

tumblr-ntpllku-CQx1uzgdfbo1-500
Pammi ki chut me bhar diya.Me bhi unki chudai dekh kar bahut hot ho gyi thi,aur meri chut bhi wet ho gyi thi.Lekin me chup chap bina kisi se kuchh kahe,deep breathing karti hui apne ghar laut ayi.
Friends kindly like, reply nd comments jarur karna ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™
Raji will wait
To be continued
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Friends me apni new story start krne ja rahi hu aur aap sabke sehyog ki kamna karti hu.
:congrats: sissy, let's show the :girlpower:
Pehle mene ye kahani kisi aur site par likhi thi lekin ab kuchh changes ke sath me yahn likh rahi hu.Raji ko asha hai ke aap sab log uske prayas ko pasand kroge.
:yes4: , :chilling2:
Update 1 Surbhi heroine ๐Ÿ‘‡

20211217-162337
.. Mera naam Surbhi hai, umar 20 yr, fair colored, figure 34 30 36,aur me Punjab ke ek big city ke college me B tech ki student hu,
๐Ÿ˜ณ, surbhi ye pose jayada expose toh nahin kar raha :sarma:
meri family me mere Pita Vikas age 40 yr,unki health bahut achhi hai,fair complexion,aur height 5'-10"
Ohh toh uncle health conscious hain :flex:
hai;mere mummy Sushma age 39, good height,9 figure 36 32 38,bahut sunder, fair colored, apni age se kum hi lagti hai,bahut jachti hai; ek mere bua Preeti ji hai,age 30
Sushma ๐Ÿ‘‡ Surbhi ki mumy


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๐Ÿ˜ณ Aunty, wow kya maintain kya hain aapne.
years hai ye bhi bahut beautiful aur fair
Preeti. ๐Ÿ‘‡

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colored hai, figure 34 30 36,ye mere Dada ji ke dost ki beti hai
Arre thode palu ka dhyaan rako :slap:
Logo ki najar, bhute buri hain :secret:
,inko inke husband ne jo ke nashe karta hai, chhod rakha hai,inke pitaji ki death ho chuki hai,aur inke ghar ka gujara mushkil se chal ta hai,inki mummy ke kehne par,papa ne inko ghar me rakh liya tha,ye soch kar ke ghar ki nigarani rakh legi aur ghar ka kam kar liya karegi.Lekin ab ye hamare sath family member ki tarah hi rehti hai..
:care2: o sed life
Hamari family kafi rich hai,papa ke kapdo ke kai showroom hai.
Me Activa se college jati hu.College me meri ek bahut achhi friend hai.Uska naam Pammi hai.Pammi mere sath B tech me hi padhayi kar rahi hai.Iske papa Pankaj mere papa ke dost hi hai,aur iske mummy Sheetal. Sheetal aunty bhi bahut beautiful hai,inki age 41 yr, figure 36 32 38,bahut
Sheetal ๐Ÿ‘‡ Pammi di mumy


20211223-083852
zabardast look hai inki,lekin inko bachedani ka cancer ho gaya tha,jis karn inko bachedani ko nikal wana pad gya tha, aur ab ye sexual intercourse nahi kar sakti.
:swordfight:
Sabhi apne figures and pose se issh tarah fight kar rahi hain.
Wese bachedaani ka cancer Rajizexy sissy ye kya hota hain​
Pammi vesse bahut beautiful aur sexy hai,iski figure 36 30 38
Pammi ๐Ÿ‘‡

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hai,fair colored hai,iski badi Gand aur boobs per boys bahut gande comments karte hai, boys to mujh par bhi bahut dirty comments karte hai, lekin hum dono kisi ko ghas nahi dalte.
Very good, :good2:
Ek bar galti se meri ek book , Pammi apne sath le gyi thi,to me apni book lene uske ghar chali gayi.
Mujhe aisa kyu lag raha hain kuch galath hone wala hain :?:
Ghar ja kar mene dekha, main gate khula hua tha, mujhe ander se kuchh awaje sunai di.
aage mat ja kuch galath chal raha hain :ohno:
Mene drawing room me jhak kar dekha to Pammi apne papa ki goad me nagan ho kar unke lund par bethi thi, uske papa bhi naked hi the.Pammi bahut maze se Apni chut apne papa ke lund par rub kar rahi thi,aur uske papa uske boobs daba rahe the.
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.Kamre me se bahut kamuk awaje a rahi thi hiii cccccรงccccc uffffff eeeee pankajjjjj rajeeee,pa do ab apna loda meri chut me,ah bahut maza a raha hai Pankaj,ahhh ufff.Uske papa uthe aur unhone apna 9"lamba aur 2" inch wide loda Pammi ke mouth ke pass kar diya.Pammi ne

tumblr-1a1c5c1ea3fd87468073521893701fb2-8126fc9f-500
lund ko suck karna shuru kar diya,aur kehne lagi raje dal do ab apna sanp apni beti cum lugai ke fudde me.
Uske papa ne fauran apna loda Pammi ke fudde ke chhed par lagaya aur ek hi dhakke me uski chut me dal diya aur

close-up-18323
dhakke lagane laga . Pammi bhi apni gand ko upar utha utha kar,maze se apne papa se chudwane lagi.20 mint baad uske papa ne apne big lund se maal nikal kar

tumblr-ntpllku-CQx1uzgdfbo1-500
Pammi ki chut me bhar diya.Me bhi unki chudai dekh kar bahut hot ho gyi thi,aur meri chut bhi wet ho gyi thi.Lekin me chup chap bina kisi se kuchh kahe,deep breathing karti hui apne ghar laut ayi.
Mene kaha tha na , kuch gadbade hain aage mat ja par meri toh maani nahin, ab dekho live show.
Wese ye paami toh kaafi chupar ustam nikli, bechare wo boys wo paami ke saami bnne na chahte the par yaha toh uncle hi sofe par dangal khel rahe hain.
Papa apni pari ko sonapari bnna kar udda rahe hain :roflol:

Friends kindly like, reply nd comments jarur karna ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™
Raji will wait
To be continued
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Ha updates mein need ke hissab se paragraph change kar ke likhogi toh read karne mein aur bhi aasani hogi.

Over all, agar dekhu toh writing kaafi acchi hain. Aapne na kewale main characters ka intro diya, balki story ko start bhi kiya.

Kyuki, aajkal ye dekhne ko milta hain ki writers intro mein 4-5 updates le jaate hain and then decide hi nahin kar paate ki story start kish tarah kare.
Iss reason se ye point mujhe aapki story ka kaafi aacha laga.

Writing skills kaafi aachi hain sissy,
Next update ka intejaar rahega.
And thread ke liye :congrats: and story likhne ke liye :thanks: .
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:congrats: sissy, let's show the :girlpower:

:yes4: , :chilling2:

๐Ÿ˜ณ, surbhi ye pose jayada expose toh nahin kar raha :sarma:

Ohh toh uncle health conscious hain :flex:

๐Ÿ˜ณ Aunty, wow kya maintain kya hain aapne.

Arre thode palu ka dhyaan rako :slap:
Logo ki najar, bhute buri hain :secret:

:care2: o sed life

:swordfight:
Sabhi apne figures and pose se issh tarah fight kar rahi hain.
Wese bachedaani ka cancer Rajizexy sissy ye kya hota hain​

Very good, :good2:

Mujhe aisa kyu lag raha hain kuch galath hone wala hain :?:


aage mat ja kuch galath chal raha hain :ohno:

Mene kaha tha na , kuch gadbade hain aage mat ja par meri toh maani nahin, ab dekho live show.
Wese ye paami toh kaafi chupar ustam nikli, bechare wo boys wo paami ke saami bnne na chahte the par yaha toh uncle hi sofe par dangal khel rahe hain.
Papa apni pari ko sonapari bnna kar udda rahe hain :roflol:


Story kaafi aachi thi
Ha updates mein need ke hissab se paragraph change kar ke likhogi toh read karne mein aur bhi aasani hogi.

Over all, agar dekhu toh writing kaafi acchi hain. Aapne na kewale main characters ka intro diya, balki story ko start bhi kiya.

Kyuki, aajkal ye dekhne ko milta hain ki writers intro mein 4-5 updates le jaate hain and then decide hi nahin kar paate ki story start kish tarah kare.
Iss reason se ye point mujhe aapki story ka kaafi aacha laga.

Writing skills kaafi aachi hain sissy,
Next update ka intejaar rahega.
And thread ke liye :congrats: and story likhne ke liye :thanks: .
Your Sissy, Aanya
Aanya sis tum ne to mujhe apne review se apna fan bana liya hai, mujhe to aise lagne laga hai ke story Raji nahi Aanya likh rahi hai. Thanks a lot sister, mere pass tumare sabhi comments ke liye Thanks karne ke liye to shabd nahi hai lekin fir bhi Thanks a lot dear lovely Aanya sis๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ’œ๐Ÿ’œ๐Ÿ’œ for tremendous review ,feel obliged 2 u.
 
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:toohappy: For starting new story thread :toohappy:
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:avazak:
Story ki starting kaafi acchi hain,
Main chracters ka intro and usske saath story ki begning kaafi acchi lagi.
Characters ke intro ke saath inkee nature ke glimps bhi show ho rahee hain
Jo story mein inn characters ke role ko justify aur define karne mein madade karege.
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Inn the end, story ko likhne mein jo aap apna precious time spend karengi aur jo mehnant karengi uske liye aapka thanks.
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Umeed karta hun, ye kahani
Ek aisa
Chaska laga degi
Jes se sabka sawade badale jaaega.



Thanks a lot dear Likeable ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™โฃ๏ธโฃ๏ธโฃ๏ธfor congrats & jabardast like, koshish karungi ji aap ki umido par khara utrane ki.
 

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