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Ooo aisa kiya aap to meri bato ko dil par le liya vaise apka har ek shavad mere ko tariff hi lagta hai.Naina madam aur Aakesh. ki tarah gol gol bate karni nahi ati hai mujhe, jo acha laga vohi bataya.

Ooo aisa kiya aap to meri bato ko dil par le liya vaise apka har ek shavad mere ko tariff hi lagta hai.Naina madam aur Aakesh. ki tarah gol gol bate karni nahi ati hai mujhe, jo acha laga vohi bataya.
рдзрдиреНрдпрд╡рд╛рдж рдЖрдкрдХрд╛ рдорд╣реЛрджрдпредRawat hi vo shaksh hai jisne srita ko kidnap karvaya. Abhisek ka banaya hua sketch jisme sirf aankhe hi tha ho na ho vo aankhe rawat ka hi hoga.
Sarita ne andha vishvas kiya tha rawat sir par aur aaj rawat sir ke karn hi vo musibat me fhas gaya hai.
Idhar nishchhal bacha ko bada karne gaya matbal uthne gaya par kauno phaida na hua. Bacha ko to kuch bhi pata na hai use to ye bhi pata na hai ki raghu jail se bhag gaya hai.
Ab dekhte hai aage kiya hota hai. Lagta hai nishchhal ki sarita bemaut mari jayegi ya phir.....khair chodo thoda wait karte hai.
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рдзрдиреНрдпрд╡рд╛рдж рдЖрдкрдХрд╛ рдорд╣реЛрджрдпредBada bikat paristhiri ban gaya hai. Ek ke baad ek part khulta ja raha hai. Aur sarita ko sirf jhatke hi mil raha hai. Rawat ne kitna kuch kiya taki sarita ko apne raste se hata sake par aisa ho na paya. Har baar nishchal kuch na kuch karke sarita ko bacha liya.
Ab jis paristhithi me sarita phasi hai is jagah se sarita kaise bachegi kiya nichshal samay par pahuch payega ya phir sarita hi kuch aisa karegi jise uski jan bache aur rawat ke chungal se nikal bhage.
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рдзрдиреНрдпрд╡рд╛рдж рдЖрдкрдХрд╛ рдорд╣реЛрджрдпредMast chir haran hone wala tha. Kitna maza aane wala tha sarita ke ek ek kapde yun haba me uchhlta mano tez tufan chal raha ho par ye naspita nishchhal hamesha sahi wakt par hi entry marta hai. Jab bhi sarita musibat me hoti hai na jane kaise sarita ko sungte huye pahuch hi jata hai.
Rawat to hai bada hi begairt inshan sarita ko beti kahta tha. Aur ab usi muh boli beti ke chir haran karwane par tula hua hai.
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рдмрд╣реБрдд рдмрд╣реБрдд рдзрдиреНрдпрд╡рд╛рдж рдЖрдкрдХрд╛ рдЗрд╕ рдЦреВрдмрд╕реВрд░рдд рд╕рдореАрдХреНрд╖рд╛ рдХреЗ рд▓рд┐рдПредab kya hi revo de aur kya hi bole..... Mahi Maurya ji ne apni mann marzi chala hi li.... meri ek naa suni.......
What is that one thing that makes a story interesting? ........
Abhishek! Yes abhishek......Is story ki shuruat mein hi Abhishek ke role aada kari ki wajah se is story ko padhne mein Aur zyada interest ekdum se badh gayi thi.......
Story ka flow tight ki apne......Lekin aapko ye baat bhoolni nahi chahiye ki aksar 80 % readers story mein entry lene wale kirdaaro ko hi as lead kirdaar apnate hai....aur ant tak unhe hi lead characters maante hai...
..khair readers ka dhyan samete rakhane mein nishchal aur sarita kamyaab rahe par us level pe nahi.......I think nischal ki entry bahot pehle ho jaana chahiye tha.....
One more thing I really like about this story is that it seems fantasy and not close to reality. Coz real life mein shayad hi aisa hota ho
Aur ish story ko 100 + update ki maturity se likha gaya hai, bilkul to the point. Zara bhi be matalab ki baatein nahi hai kahin bhi. It's true it's hell damn true..... warna readers mujhse hi kyun bhid jaate nischal savita ke liye.....
Normally mein review mein roast karti hoon agar meri nazar mein kahin story improvement ho sakti thi ......Lekin.......flow mein gadbada jaati story.....
Ab ish se aage aur kya kahu
рдзрдиреНрдпрд╡рд╛рдж рдЖрдкрдХрд╛ рдорд╣реЛрджрдпредChhaya ye villan lago ne sare kiye karaye par pani pher diya. Rawat aur neta to naam ka villan tha. Socha tha dig thoda satir niklega par ye begairat bhi kisi kaam ka nehi.ucha makan fika pakwan ye kawat in villano par satheek baithta hai. Sirfi ye lambi chaudi dialogue marna jante hai bas aur kuch nehi.
Kahir jaisa bhi sabhi villan ka haal damdol kar diya gaya. Gayal avastha me sabhi ko ilaaj karwana bhej diya gaya hai. Asli khatirdari in villano ki theek hone ke baad hogi bilkul baise jaise bakre ki mundi udane se pahle use puchkar kar pani aur ghas khilaya jata hai phir ek jhatke me jhatka wala meet bana diya jata hai.
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рдзрдиреНрдпрд╡рд╛рдж рдЖрдкрдХрд╛ рдорд╣реЛрджрдпредSarita ke dil me prem angdayi lene laga hai. Ab sarita ko lag raha hai vo hamesha nishchal ke saath galat karti aayi hai.
Der se hi sahi kuch to ahsas hua hai. Ab dekhte hai manisha aisa kiya karti hai jisse sarita kudh se pyaar ka ijhar karti hai.
Kya rani ji ke karan sarita naukri chod degi mujhe lagta hai sarita ko naukri nehi chodni chaiye.
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