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कर्मों का फल by Mahi Maurya
कर्मों का फल Ye to sach h ki inshan jo bota hai vo hi karta hai.
Story padhte hue aisa laga jaise koi film chal rahi ho samne pahle to laga ye koi sasur bahu ki sex story hogi lekin yahan aisa nai .
Jagdish ne jaisa jurm Kiya Puja ke sath thik vaisa uske bete ne bhi Antara ke sath karne Laga. Kitna rokana chaa par rok Nahin Paya.

Abhi sab uske sath hone laga tha usko Puja ke sath kiye hue vyavhar yad aane Lage. Puja pahle din se hi Pati kata atyachar Sathi re per ab tak uff tak nahi kiya kyunki uske khabar Lene wala iske pass koi nahin tha Ek bhai tha jiske liye bahan Ek Bhoj saman thi bahan ke Vida hote hi chain ki sans liya.

story ending bahut badhiya rahi kyuki usme uske bete ko apni bhul ka ahsaas ho gaya akhir aur bolte hain na ki ant bhala to sab bhala story ko 100/100 deta hun :love:

Shaandaar kahani, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan sath dilchasp kirdaaron ki bhumika bhi dekhne ko mili hai...

hope ki aage bhi aisi kahaniya padhne ko milegi..
Brilliant storyline with awesome writing skills :clapping: :clapping:
 
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Humari adhuri prem kahanee

Pyaar vo ehasaas hai, jo har kisee ko nahin hota. Ehasaas hi kyu ehasaaso ki ek khubshurate kahani hai. Par ye ehasaas sab ko nahin hota ya u kahu ki sab ke nasseb mai nahin hota.
Pyaar vo samundar hai... jesme doob jaane ka mann karta hai. Pyaar vo manate hai jese har dil mangna ta hai. Par puri sirf kuch nasheeb walo ki hoti hai. Pyaar karna toh aasan hai par usse nibha pana muskil aur usse bhi muskil hai pyaar ka kamyab hona.
Par ye toh sach hai pyaar ehasaaso ki ek adhbhute kahani hai.

Yahee ek ehasaas main aapako bataana chaahata hoon...usse ehasaas se aap sabko bhi rubaru karana chahta hu.

Shaam ka samay tha .... aur main apane dost Anuj ka intajaar kar raha tha.
Steshan ke baahar... hamalog ka baahar kahee ghoomane jaane ka plaan tha aur main jaldee pahunch gaya tha...iska karan ye tha ki mujhe travel karna bhoute pasand hai. Alag alag jagah jaana logo se milna aur dosto ke saath waqt guzarna.
Mujhe ye sab pasand tha iss liye mai waqt se pahle hi steshan aa gaya. Mai waha pahoch toh gaya tha par kuchh samajh nahee aa raha tha kee main kya karoon. Kyuki abhi tak koe dost aaya hi nahin.
Kuchh der idhar udhar ghumne ke baade main steshan ke paas ja ke baith gaya. Mainee ek taraf apna bag rakha aur phire mai apna phone chalane lag gaya, kyuki aur kuch karne ko tha nahin.
Mai apna phone dekh raha tha par, tabhee kuchh aisa hua ki meree jindagee ek alag mod lene vaalee thee.

Steshan kee taraph main dekh raha tha kee mera dost aaya kee nahin tabhee achaanak se meree nazar ek ladakee par padee.
Vo jo vaqt tha main pooree tarah kuchh der ke lie tham sa gaya tha. Belkul filmo ki traah manno sab slowmotion mai chal raha ho. Waqt tham sa gaya ho , background mai romantic music bajne laga ho aur dil mai left side wali ghnti bajne lagi ho.
Main sab bhool gaya tha kee main kaha hoon kyon hoon ?

Bas meree aankhe us ladakee kee taraph se hat hee nahin rahee thee aur is tarah se main use dekhata hee ja raha tha .
Uski tasvir meri aakho se utaar kar meri rooh par ankit ho rahi thi. Usakee maasoom chehara, usakee chhotee-chhotee aankhee, usake maasoom sa chehare pe vo maasoom see usakee hansee jaise maano koee paree ho vo..use dekh pahalee nazar me maano dil ko kuchh hone laga tha.
Ek alag sa ehsaas tha ye jo hume pahle kabhi nahin huva.
Dil ki dhadkan badh gae thi. Mann mai bus ek khawaish ki buss usse dekhta rahu...aur ye lamha kabhi khatam hi na ho.

Kya ye pyaar tha??
Mujhe nahin pata bas dil bol raha tha ki mera dost kuchh der baad aaye ya ye vaqt ruk jae. Hum humesha ke liye bus isse lamhe ke ho jaae.
Mujhe usaka naam jaanana tha...usake baare mein bahut kuchh pata karane ko dil kar raha tha ... lekin kaise karoon ye samajh hee nahin aa raha tha.

Jab kuchh samajh nahin aaya tab mainne bas bhagavaan se praarthana kiya kee mujhe ye ladakee meree jindagee mein chaahie. Kyuki isse ladakee ke saath mai jindagee ki har khushi batna chahta tha aur uske hise ke har dukh khude sahna chahta tha.

Par tabhi dil mai ek dard mahshoosh huva. Vo ja rahee thee....meree aankhon se door mujhe rokana tha use.
Usase baaten karana tha. usase dostee karanee thee aur use apane dil kee baat bataanee thee. lekin kaise ???

Yahee savaal bas baar-baar mere man mein aa raha tha aur mujhe baichain kiye ja raha tha.

Mainne phir soch liya ki meree aankhon se door hone se pahale mujhe isaka naam pata chal jaaye to main isase apana banoonga aur shaayad bhagavaan ne hee use bheja hoga mere lie ye main samajhoonga tabhee bhagavan ne chamatkaar kar diya..peechhe se aavaaj aaya priya main yahaan hoon.


Phir vo peechhe dekhi to mainne dekha vahaan se ek ladakee aavaaj dee aur vo us ka paas chalee gayee..tabhee main samajha us ladakee ka naam priya tha.

Main khush ho gaya aur us ladakee ko man kiya ja ke dhanyavaad bol doo kyonki usee ke vajah se mujhe us ka naam pata chala....bas tabhee mainne thaan lee ab use apana banaana hai, use apanee jindagee mein laana hai.

Phir tabhee mai usake pichhe jaane laga ki achaanak hee peechhe se ek haath aaya. Peechhe dekha to dost aa gaya tha.
Jese dost ka khuch pal pahle hum intezaar kar rahe the uss dost ko dekh kar ab main kya karoon samajh nahin aa raha tha..main kya boloon usase..kaise mana karoon usase?..kaise jaoo main us ke peechhe ? main isee soch mein laga raha raha tab tak vo meree aankhon se door ja chukee thee dil maano rone laga tha aur tabhee maano aisa laga ki jaise sab kuchh ek sapana sa tha bas aur aankhe khul gaya to sapana toot gaya.
Main vaha se chala to gaya apane dost anuj ke saath lekin pooree raaste bas anuj ko mann se gaaliya deta raha aur jab mann thoda khali huva toh priya ke baare mein sochata raha.

Maano mera dil ab usake khyaal se nikalane ko taiyaar hee nahin tha.
Doosare din main kolej lie taiyaar ho gaya aur main kolej panhucha...aur bench pe ja ka baith gaya..tabhee anuj ne bulaaya aur kaha dekh apane kolej mein ek naee ladakee aayee hai.
Mera man abhee bhee bas usee ke khyaalon me dooba hua tha.
Aankhon se us ka chehara mano hat hee nahee raha tha...vo baar baar mujhe aavaaj diye ja rahee tha.
Tabhee mujhe gussa aaya aur aana bhi lajmi tha kal anuj ki wajah se mai priya se nahin mile paya aur ab jab mai apni priya ke khayalo mai khoya huva tha tab bhi isse chain nahin hai.
Kal jo dost mujhe jaan se payara tha vo mujhe ab manhoos lagne laga tha. Pata nahin kyu par sach yahi tha yaha mai ye sab soch raha tha vahi vo abhi bhi laga huva tha mujhe awwaz dene mai toh mai ghusaa hokar peechhe usase bolane ja hee raha tha ki main ruk sa gaya.

Meree najar maano phir se ek baar sapanon me chala gaya. Mainne dekha kee vahee thee.
Maano jaise meree khushee ka koee thikaana nahin raha main khud ko rok hee nahin pa raha tha aur mere samajh mein hee nahin aa raha tha kee main kya karoo ? kya bolata main, bas ja ke apane dost ke gale lag gaya... Ab wapas mujhe anuj apna sab se accha dost mahshush ho raha tha.. 2 min. Pahle jese mai gaaliya nikal raha tha ab mai usse duwa de raha tha.. ittna ajeeb vehwar maine kabhi nahi kiya par pata nahi priya ko dekhne ke baade se mujhme bhoute kuch ulta fhulta chal raha tha.
Aur jab mujhe abhee ye pata chala ki vahee vah naee ladakee thee jo kolej mein aaj pahala din aayee thee.

Main to maano hava me udane laga... anuj ne mujhe pucha ki aakhir majhra kya hai...kyuki vo janta tha mujhe acche se ...aur kal se jo mai ajeeb vahwar kar raha tha..iss karan usse yakin ho gaya ki kuch gadbade hai...phir uske kahne par mainne anuj ko bataaya kee aisa aisa hai..usane kaha ja ke bol de use apane dil kee baat.. lekin main darata tha... ki vo kya kahegee..kya lagega use..yahee soch ke main hamesha ruk jaata tha.

Main sochane lagata tha ki kahee vo meree baaten sun ke mujhase door na ho jae. Yahi hota hai jab hum kisi ko khude se jayada chahte hai toh khude ko chahie kitni bhi talklif kyu na ho saamne wale ko agar humari wajah se thodi se bhi taklif hone ki ghunjaish ho toh hum himmate nahin kar paate.
Main usase door nahin hona chaahata tha. mujhe ye ehasaas ho gaya tha ki shaayad vo bhee mujhe pasand karatee thee...lekin vo kabhee kuchh nahin kahatee thee.
usase lagata ki mere man mai us ka lie kuchh nahin hai. lekin vo kya jaane ki use pahalee najar mein dekh ke hee mainne use apana dil de chuka tha.

Din beetate gae hamalog ek achchhe dost kee tarah saath rahate aur baate karate the..lekin na kabhee mujhe himmat hua usase kuchh bhee kahane ka na aur hee use.
Vaqt beet gaya aur is tarah hamalog kee padhaee pooree ho gayee. lekin mere dil me usake ke lie abhee bhee pahala aur aakharee pyaar tha aur shaayad us ke lie bhee.
Aur is tarah se hame sabako alag alag kampanee me job lag gaee thee tabhee bas ek din mainne soch liya ki ab bas.. main usase kal ja ke dil kee baat bata doonga.
Main agale din subah utha aur mainne use fon kiya aur usase kaha kee mujhe milana hai usase ..usane milane ka lie haan kar diya aur is baat se mujhe bahut khushee mila. hamalog ne ek samay nirdhaarit kiya tha aur main samay se pahale vahaan usaka intajaar kar raha tha ....tabhee meree najar us pe padee.. vahee kapade..vahee baig.. vahee chhotee-chhotee aankhe aur chehare pe vahee pyaaree se muskaan, maano aisa lag raha tha..kee vahee pahala din ho..jab mainne use pahalee baar dekha tha..vo dheere dheere aa rahee thee.
Aaj bhi wahi dhimme dhimme hawae bah rahi thi , time jese slow ho gaya tha aur wahi romantic song aaj bhi background mai baj raha tha. Dil ki dhadkan kaafi tej ho gae thi. main to bas use dekhata hee ja raha tha..phir vo paas aatee hai..phir vo mere saamane baith jaatee hai..tabhee bas..mainne usase kaha kee mujhe kuchh kahana hai usase.
Phir tabhee usane bhee kah diya kee mujhe bhee kuchh kahana hai tumhen ...main khush ho gaya.. mujhe laga kee aaj vo bhee apane dil kee baat bol degee...phir mainne usase kaha diya ki tum pahale bol do...usane to pahale mana kiya pahale bolane se..lekin mainne hee jid kar diya... ki pahale tum bole aur vo bolane ja rahee thee.
Maano meree saans ruk gae the..usakee baate sunane ka liye...sab kuchh tham sa gaya...bas aisa laga main aur vo..aur kuchh nahee hai aas-paas... aaj dil ko manno sukoon milne wala tha.
Jes lamhe ka intezaar mene ittni saalo se kiya vo aaj pura hone wala hai. Mai buss in khayalo mai tha ki tabhee phir usane apane baig se ek kaard nikaala..aur diya mujhe...vo jo pal tha.

Vahee pahala pal..jab mujhe laga ki mera sapana tha..aur sapana toot gaya...us kaard main usakee shaadee ka aamantran tha...bas..phir kya..sab kuchh vaheen ruk gaya...dil mai ek bhout tezz tise uthhi...shaayad aaj saas tham si gae thi..jaha khuch pal pahle mai khude ko duniya ka sab se khushnaseeb insaan mann raha tha..wahi ab mai khude ko sab se dhukhi aur bebasse pa raha tha.
Bhagwan ne toh mujhe usse milaya tha par shaayad mainne bahut der kar dee usase apanee dil kee baat bataane me..shyaad bahot-bahot der... phir usane mujhase poochha.. ki tum kya kahana chaahate the ? main kya kahata tab..baat badal dee..aur vo chalee gayee...aur main vahee baithe rah gaya....mujhe use apana banaane ka bas ek sapana hee tha shaayad.......jo ek samay pe aa ka toot gaya....vo aaj ka din aur pahala din...maano kyon aaya tha meree jindagee main ab tak ye baat samajh nahee aaya.... pahala din bhee ek sapane kee tarah aaee aur kuchh der baad toot gayee...aur ye aaj ka pal..jo phir se ek sapana banakar pal mai toot gaya........ iseelie doston kabhee bhee apanee dil kee baat bataane me der na karo... varana itana der ho jaata hai ki....apane pyaar ko bas sapane main hee apana banaana pad jaata hai... aur jab essa hota hai na toh sach kahta hu jaan toh nahin niklti par jindagi bemtlab se lagne lagti hai. Har par ek ajjeb sa khalipan mehshossh hota hai. Isse liye agae aap kisi se pyaar karte ho toh usse apne dil ka haal bata do..kahi essa na ho ki aap sahi waqt ka intezaar karte rahe aur aapko pata chale ki waqt hi nahin raha...

-The End
Pyaar vo ehasaas hai, jo har kisee ko nahin hota.
Ye to ju ne bilkul Satya kaha hai pyare vah sar se jo har kisi Ko Nahin hota


Bhut hi bdiya kahani dost..
Sabdo ka Acha istemal kiya hai aapne.. Kahani ki stithi ko achi Tarah se vyakhankit Karti hai.. Pyar me insan ko der nhi Karni chahiye Lkn ye bhi dhyan rakhna chahiye ki jaldbazi bhi na ho.. Station ka vatavaran, Bhut Acha btaya gya hai... Overall achi story hai..


Shaandaar kahani, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan sath dilchasp kirdaaron ki bhumika bhi dekhne ko mili hai...

hope ki aage bhi aisi kahaniya padhne ko milegi..
Brilliant storyline with awesome writing skills :clapping: :clapping:
 
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✮ Dark Matter ✮ by TheBlackBlood (kalakhuni)

mast fadu kahani thi bhid.

Ky ladki h do do jano ka akle le leti hai le :blah:
Badhiya stamina hai chudiye ka. :D

Ju is story me ares ko lena tha tab to Nitin bhi nahi marta. Aur vo us ladki ka pair aur apna pair ek kara leta fir gayab hone ka sawal hi na hota :lol4: ager vo gayab bhi hoti to vo bhi uder Pauch jata :D
Nitin ko bhi vo mast topi pehna ke apne jhanse me le leta aur ladki se dur kar deta :hehe: aur mera bhi jugad kara deta vo :verysad:


Shaandaar kahani, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan sath dilchasp kirdaaron ki bhumika bhi dekhne ko mili hai...

hope ki aage bhi aisi kahaniya padhne ko milegi..
Brilliant storyline with awesome writing skills :clapping: :clapping:
 
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Veerakshi ki Love Story by Aakesh.

Veerakshi ka Milan Bhut hi acha Tarah btaya gya hai.. Mind me aapki story chal rhi hai Abhi bhi.. Ki kaise veer or Sakshi mile honge... Kaise dosti kaise pyar hua hoga... Sakshi ke man me Care jo Care thi usse to saf Pta chal rha tha ki.. Aag Dono hi Taraf lagi thi starting se.. Bus Usko thodi hawa ki zarurat thi..

Shaandaar kahani, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan sath dilchasp kirdaaron ki bhumika bhi dekhne ko mili hai...

hope ki aage bhi aisi kahaniya padhne ko milegi..
Brilliant storyline with awesome writing skills :clapping: :clapping:
 
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Story - साजिश
Writer - Mahi Maurya

mast thrilling kahani thi mahi madam.
Ritika ke sath itna kuch ho gaya aur mujhe khabar tak nahi diya kisine. ye to galat hai na .
ladki todi psycho thi par thi damdar .:D do do jano ka akele sambhal liya, aditya ko bhi aur chatur ko bhi. mast capacity thi chhodi me. mujhe ye samjh nahi a raha ke aditya usse shadi karne se parhez kyu kar rha tha. beautiful thi , paise wali thi. pagalo ki tarah usse pyar karti thi. aur kya chahiye tha. batao to jara, ajj kal logo ko free me mili chijo ki kadra hi nahi hai.
are meko le lete story me . tab to itna kuch complex aata hi nai . aur ritika marti bhi nahi . usko me sambhal leta, khyal bhi rakhta. Shadi bhi kar leta :D
mahendra ke style me chatur aur aditya ko bhi mast topi pehna ke apne jhanse me le leta aur ritika se dur kar deta 😘
 
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Lagi Lund Ki Lagan, Chudi Sajan Ke Sange by iMUNISH



Shaandaar kahani, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan sath dilchasp kirdaaron ki bhumika bhi dekhne ko mili hai...

hope ki aage bhi aisi kahaniya padhne ko milegi..
Brilliant storyline with awesome writing skills :clapping: :clapping:
 
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Story concept bhote hi accha hai, lakin khani ke sath aap Naya nahi kar paye,sabdo ke chyan me bhi Kami nazar ayi. Lakin fir bhi aap tariff ke hakdar hai coz apne story likha h ham sabhi readers ke liye :good2:


Amit ek yasha ladka hai jo payra ka P bhi nahi jant aur vo payar ka dava karta h :lol2: pyar me vishvas bhote hi jaruri hai.lakin yahan Amit ke pyar me vishvas ki kami thi.payar kisi Bandha ka name nahi hai jo ki bhandan me Rahe kar apni life se samjota kar lee.

Shaandaar kahani, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan sath dilchasp kirdaaron ki bhumika bhi dekhne ko mili hai...

hope ki aage bhi aisi kahaniya padhne ko milegi..
Brilliant storyline with awesome writing skills :clapping: :clapping:
 
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kahani betarin thi .aisa nahi laga ke kuch kami reh gai ho .emotions, tragedy ki bharmar thi kahani me. Thrill aur suspense kahani ke end tak bana raha.
kahani ka title hi saajish tha aur us mein rahasyamay tarike se kiska katl ho jana aur kaatil ke talash me chan bin karne wala hi ant me kaatil nikalna story me char chand laga diya tha. Kahani ke andar kayi kahani banti gai .koi jhuthi kahani bol raha tha to koi sach . Ritika , aditya aur chatur tino ne hi aparaadh kiya. jiska dand mil chuka hai. sabse dilchasp isliye lagi kyu ki mahi jii ne kahani ka jyada nahi khincha.ek chonka dene wala mod ke sath kahani ko ant kiya.waise is akashmat hue paristhiti ki jarurat bhi thi ant me.
 
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kahani - ek hatyakaand se shuruwaat huyi is kahani mein kayi mod aaye hai..... investigation kar rahe officers hi ek baad ek us murder se related suspected criminal bante gaye......ant mein ye pata chala ki ek investigation officer kaatil nikla.......hatya ki wajah purani badla aur nafrat thi ........coz victim yaani ritika ne ush officer yaani aaditya ke sath past aur present mein bahot galat kiya........isi ke chalte usne mauka milte hi ritika ko jaan se maarke revenge le li. .....haalanki is case mein dusra officer yaani Mr tripaathi bhi doshi nikla......usne bhi paiso ke khatir ritika pe goli chalayi thi lekin uska nishana chuk gaya .....lekin us waqt ritika ke ghar chupa hua aditya ka nahi.. usne sahi mauka faida uthake goli maar di..... waise gaur ki jaaye to dono mujrim hi ek dusro ko fanshane ke koshish kar rahe the,, .... par ant mein ye sach saamne aa hi gaya ki kaatil koun tha....

Aati hoon review pe - title ke sath kahani ka taalmel to hai.... Kyunki do logo ki sochi samjhi saazish ke tahat ritika ki maut huyi thi..... Lekin yahan stupidity ke bare mein bhi ullekh ki hai Mahi Maurya ji ne :D ...mujrim ne apni bewakoofi ke chalte ek aisa clue chhod diya kaanoon ko bhatkane ke liye ...... Lekin wohin clue bana uske liye grahan ......
handwriting ki chaan bin hote hi aditya ka jhuth pakda gaya.....
Kahani mein koi kisiko had se zyada majbur kar dene par aur jor jabardasti ka rishta jodne par kya parinaam nikalta hai.. usko bhi ullekh kiya gaya hai.... Jaise ritika majbur kar rahi thi, blackmail kar rahi thi, jor jabardasti kar rahi thi aditya ko apna banane aur uske mutabik chalne ke liye..... aur iska parinaam yahin nikla ki ritika ko apni jaan deni padi....
Kahani mein ye bhi ullekh hai ki jab ek rakshak bhi bhaksak ban jaaye to kya parinaam nikalta hai.... Jaise paiso ke khaatir Mr tripaathi itne bade post pe hoke bhi criminal activity ke sath juda hua tha....
Kahani mein ye bhi ullekh kiya gaya hai ki koi chaahe jitna bhi perfect crime kyun naa kar le..... koi na koi clue chhod hi jaate hai...

My point of view - well... is kahani ke jariye main Sarita ko samjhana chaahungi ki...... nischal bhi tripaathi ki tarah hi bhaksak hai.... So sarita jitni jaldi ho sake nischal aur uski family se door chali jaaye... yahin uske liye behtar hoga..... :D
Ritika ki jor jabardasti dekh mujhe ek kahani ke kirdaar yaad aaye..... ek ka naam nischal aur ek ka naam raghav ... ye dono bhi ritika ki tarah blackmail aur jor jabardasti karke sarita aur manisha ke sath kuchhi ku karna chaahte hai....:D. is sadyantra mein un dono ka saath de rahi hai un dono ki bahan mendak jaisi aankho wali savita ...... :D
Khair......... aur jaise yahan is kahani mein apne swaarth sidh karne ke liye ritika ko hi raaste se hatane ki koshish ki tripaathi ne.....thik waise hi nischal ne bhi Sarita aur manisha ke us bichare bhai ko fansa diya... taaki wo jail mein chadta rahe aur yahan nischal aur raghav milkar apne tharki mansubon ko pura kar sake Sarita aur manisha ke sath.. .. :bat:

Shaandaar kahani, shaandaar lekhni, shaandaar shabdon ka chayan sath dilchasp kirdaaron ki bhumika bhi dekhne ko mili hai...

hope ki aage bhi aisi kahaniya padhne ko milegi..
Brilliant storyline with awesome writing skills :clapping: :clapping:
बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद आपका महोदया।
इस कहानी में ऐसा कुछ नहीं है जिसके तहत आपको सरिता को समझाने की जरूरत पड़े।। क्योंकि इस कहानी का कांसेप्ट और नाम किसी भी बुरी सोच से बाहर निकाल देता है। कहानी थ्रिलर है और थ्रिलर कटेगरी में इन्सेस्ट का तड़का नहीं डाला जा सकता।।
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कहानी आपको पसंद आई हमारी मेहनत सफल हो गई। क्योंकि कोई भी हमको पुरस्कार देने के पक्ष में नहीं है।😝😜 इसलिए अब हमें आप सबके कमेंट से ही संतोष करना पड़ेगा।
 
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Badi ghumavdar kahani thi . koi soch bhi nahi sakta tha ke aditya ne hi ritika ka khoon kiya tha. tazub ki baat ye hai ki aditya ne khud khoon karke khud hi jans pardal kar raha tha chaitanya ke sath milke. chaitanya ko bhi bhanak lagne nahi diya. chaitanya bhi bhala kyu uspar shak karne laga. ek to uska dost tha aur itne dino se sath kaam kar raha tha. aeise me shak karne ka sawal hi nahi paida hota. tin wajaho ke karan adtiya aur chatur tripathi gunehgar sabit hua. wo diary, tripaathi aur aditya ek dusre par arop lagana aur dono ka ritika ke sath sambandh . par aditya ne khoon kiya mazboor hoke aur chatur tripaathi ne khoon karne ki kosis ki lalach ke karan. story me galti sabhi ki thi. ritika jisne aditya ke man me apne liye grina paida ki. aditya jisne khud policewala ho kar bhi kanun ka sahara na leke hatya jaisa paap karne chala gaya. aur chatur tripathi jisne khud commissioner ho kar bhi gerkanuni kaam kiya . aur itna lalchi ho gaya tha ke ritika ka khoon karne ke liye chala gaya tha.
धन्यवाद आपका रिया जी।।
आदित्य भले ही एक पुलिस वाला था लेकिन रितिका की वजह से ही उसकी मां की जान गई थी, जिसे वो भूल नहीं पा रहा था। उसे मौका तब मिल गया जब रितिका दोबारा उसकी जिंदगी में आई। उसके बाद उसने फिर से परेशान करना शुरू कर दिया।

एक आदमी कब तक किसी की ज्याजतियाँ को बर्दाश्त करता।
रितिका भी पागलपन का शिकार थी साथ मे गलत संगत में भी पड़ गई थी जिसमे बहुत बड़ा हाथ कमिश्नर का भी था।
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