Lustyweb's Exclusive Story Contest 2022 ➣ Reviews & Comments Thread

[Destiny]

Story - Sanyog A true love
(Theme-Love tales)....
writer - Destiny

itni shaandaar story line hai ki main totally speechless... kaise sameeksha karu.. kahi koi galti na ho jaaye sameeksha karte waqt... phir bhi is shandaar kahani ke liye ek sameeksha ki koshish , ek peshkash ... hope writer sahab aapko pasand aaye..
Kahani.... Ye kahani rounak ki hai... ek nek dil , suljha hua ladka apne maa baap ka ekmatr dulara ..... waqt bhi ajeeb hi khel khelta hai... Kabhi sukh ghadi to pal mein dukh ke kale badal mandraye.... ek accident ke chalte rounak ne apne pita ko kho diya... tuta to jarur tha rounak lekin khud sambhala aur apni mom ko bhi... khud ke balboote par ek kamyaab insaan bhi ban gaya... ishi bich ek incident ke chalte ushe pehli nazar mein ek ladki se pyar ho gaya... ab ishe sanyog kahe ya kuch aur ladki bhi pehli nazar mein ushe chahne lagi.... lekin haye re futi kismat rounak aur roushni ki... dono ko alag hone pade ... lekin shayad dono ki achhayi aur sache pyar ko dekh upar wale ki meharbaani ho ya sanyog ..dono phir se mile wo bhi ek naatakiya mod ke sath...rounak ke liye jis ladki pasand ki uski mom ne wohi roushni nikli...

aate hai review pe...... Yaha bas baat sanyog ki nahi balki lekhak ne aur kayi pehlu readers ka dhyan aakarshit karne ki koshish ki hai..
kaahani ke present time mein ho ya rounak ke atit ki wo yaadein ho.... dono pehlu mein kirdaaro ke jariye rishte, apnapan , pyar aur emotions ko ek details ke sath pesh kiya gaya hai...
Dukh ke lamhon ko bhi bahot hi varnanaatmak roop mein darshaya gaya hai... aur thodi bahot hashyakar drishy ko bhi jagah di hai lekhak ne...

Pasandida kirdaar?
rounak, uske mom dad, roushni aur wo funny dog Sabhi kirdaar pasandida the..sabhi apni jagah par bahot hi perfect way mein role nibhaye hai....
rounak ka yun apni mom ke prati yun fikarmand hona, ye baat dil ko chu gayi...

kahani vastavik lagi....?

Haan... of course... kyunki sanyog pe adharit hai kahani ... aur sanyog har kisike jindagi mein aate rehte hai..
aur sabse badi baat ek middle class family ki chhoti chhoti khushiyon ke palo ko, ek dusre ko ahmiyat dena... unke dukh dard ke lamho ko, in sabhi ko bahot hi umda tarike se har shadbon ke sath phiroya hai lekhak ne...
aam insaan ki jindagi mein ye sabhi cheeje vastav mein hoti rehti hai...

Sabse dukhad aur tanavpurn drishya?

Jab rounak ke pita chal base ek accident ke chalte.... wo scene kaafi hidray vidarak thi..
Pita ke jaane ka dard kya hota hai ye baat main bhali bhanti jaanti hun... isliye jab rounak apne pita yaad kar dukhi hota tha , uske manodasha ko padh ke main bhi kaafi dukhi ho gayi thi ... waise uske manodasha ko shabdon mein bayan kar pana namumkin hai.. bas mahsoos kar sakti hun us waqt uske dilo dimag mein kya beet rahi hogi ....

Sabse vishesh pasandida drishy ?

Well aise to kayi drishya the lekin sabse zyada pasandida drishya jab rounak aur roushni phir mile... mile bhi mile wo tab mile jab unki shaadi tay ho rahi thi... aur usse zyada khas pasandida drishya jab roushni ne kahi ki wo bhi pehle nazar dil de baithi ... aur dono ek duje ke ho gaye .. ek happy ending sanyog ke baloulat..

kya kahani ne aapko hanshaya ya rulaya...?
kahani mein kayi mod hote jishe padh kabhi hanshi bhi aaye aur aise mod hote hai jishe padh rone ko jee kare... well yahan yeh dono mod the... aur lekhak ne jis tarike se in sabhi mod ko pesh ki hai wo sach mein adbhut aur atulaniya hai...
waise wo dogy aur rounk ke bhagam bhag drishya aur jo wo kutte ko bol raha tha aur jis nazar wo dogy ushe dekh raha tha... wo sabhi drishya aur ghatanakram kaafi hashyakar aur manoranjak the...

kya kahani ne ant tak aapko kahani ke sath jude rehne ko majboor kiya...?
shat pratishat...... chaahe kitne bhi shadb jod lun sameeksha ke liye par wo bhi kam hi pade is epic story line ke liye...... jindagi kayi pehlu pe adharit hote hai.... jaha milne, bichhadne, sukh, dukh ,durghatna, achhe, bure har pal aate jaate rehte hai...thik ishi tarah se insaan ke jindagi mein sanyog bhi aate hai....
iske chalte kabhi kabhi kitni khushiyon ki saugaat bhi aati jindagi mein yahi is kahani ke jariye dikhane ka arth hai..
Yaha is story mein kisise milne bichhdne phir milne ki aur ek ma ki mamta bhi dekhne ko milegi..jaha ek pita khone baad ek ladka kaise apni mom ko sambhala, kaise apne apko is kabil banaya ki samaaj sar uthake jee sake ye bhi padhne ko milenge... Emotions ke sath sath comedy scenes ishi kahani mein add hai..
naye readers se yahi request hai ki ek baar jarur padhe is kahani ko... kyunki kahani ne suruwat se hi ek gati li hai ek lay ke sath jo ant tak kayam hai....aap log jitni baar padhenge is kahani utni hi dil ke karib hoti jayegi ye kahani....
Rahi meri baat to shayad aage bhi kayi baar padhu is kahani ko...

My point of view -
Writer sahab kahani ke jariye yeh dikhane ki koshish ki hai ki agar koi mahattvapoorn chij ho ya koi insaan vishesh jo aapko dilo jaa se chahe aur agar aapke karib hai, aur agar ek din wo kahi kho jaaye to kya hoga ...lekin sanyog vash phir se mil jaaye to kitni khushi hoti hai...Lekin isko dusri point of view se dekhe to kuch to arth ya udeshya hoga us upar wale ka ...jo aapki jindagi us byakti vishesh ko lane ka.. isliye ise sanyog kahe ya upar wale ki aashirvaad... usko laut ke aana hi hai.....

ant mein writer sahab ke liye kuch shabd-- - Destiny ji
Kahani mein kaafi mod ya kahi jaaye sanyog aaye joh kahani ko dilchaspi banaye rakhi ... ek achhe writer ke gun, lakshan yeh ki kahani ki jariye, kahani ke kirdaaro ke jariye kahani ke naam ko sarthak kar de.... jisme aap pure tarike se kamyab rahe...
Really badhte pehlu ke sath sath kahani aur bhi zyada interesting hoti jaa rahin thi...
Har ek pehlu ko aapne dhyan dete huye kahani ko aage badha rahe the.
Sanyog se leke milne bichadne phir milne ki mohabbat dastan tak...ma aur uske bache bich ka anmol pyar se leke pita aur uske aulaad ke kuch khatti mithi yaadein...pehli nazar ka pyar se leke funny type ka bhagambhag hero aur us doggy ki.. , heavy emotions leke romance aur apnapan ke bhi anokhe sangam hai kahani mein ... ... kahani ki ghatana karm aise ki aankho ke samne hi ghat rahi ho...

aur kirdaar... jo kahani mein jahan bhi jarurat padi wahan apni bhumika sathik roop se nibha rahe the kahani ki har ek pehlu mein....
yeh bhi ek sach hai ki aapki is kahani mein har ek kirdaar ki mahattva purn hai.. I mean to say ek kirdaar bhi hata diya jaye toh kahani adhuri hai...
Hum hamesha hero heroine pe hi zyada dhyaan Kendrit karte hain... lekin yeh yaad rakhna chahiye ki baaki kirdaaro ke bina multiple ya pramukh kirdaar kuch bhi nahin.... aur aap kahani mein sabhi kirdaaro ke sath ek justify karte hain... Isliye aapki yeh kahani meri favorites kahaniyo mein se ek ho gayi hai....

Chalo kuch aur tarif kar deti hun
Destiny ji ki ye kahani matlab meri nazar mein writing jagat mein master stroke... jo facts kahani mein hone chahiye jo agle pichle pehlu se connected ho, un sabhi ko mohit saheb ullekh karte hai... . na kam, na zyada, bilkul perfect tarike se...
usse bhi badi baat, readers ka manoranjan ho is baat ko leke kash khayal rakhte hai.... aur unki har ek kahani aisi ki jaise subhah ki khilti dhoop ho... barish ki pehli bunde ho...
ek reader ko isse zyada kya chahiye..
aur destiny ji Aapne kahani ke jariye hi kahani ke naam ko sarthak kar diya hai...
jis udasya se kahani ko humare samaks pesh kiye as a reader main yahi bolu ki aap us udasya ko leke kamyab rahe..
aise hi likhte rahiye aur humari manoranjan karte rahiye

Oh haan...
Brilliant story line with awesome writing skills Destiny ji

Ek request.- bura na maaniyo jhuth na balu .. Destiny aka Bigul ji..ye aap bhi jaante hai mujhe brutality se bharpur thriller, suspense aur murder mystery wali stories zyada pasand hai... So is contest mein ek aisi hi story ki ichha hai.. aasha hai ki aap mujhe nirash nahi karenge aur ek khaufnaak , vengeance retaliation bharpur brutal story line jarur likhenge... jisme cruelty ki koi seema na ho

Itna shandaar aur atulniy shamiksha diya. Yahn shamiksha ek asadharan sameeksha hai jiske jawab me mere pas koyi words hi nehi hai.

Jaise majhdhar me atki nawo bina patwar ke kinare nehi pahuch pata vaise hi koyi bhi rachna ek rachnakar ke liye tabhi sampurn hota hai jab use behtar pathak mile aur rakhna ko padkar pathak ko lage ki haa iss rachana me varnit ghatna mere jivan me kabhi na kabhi ghata ho tabhi ek rachna purn mani jati hai.

Jaisa aapne aapne shawdon me kaha ki meri ye rachna aapko bahut pasand aaya. Yakin maniye iss racha ko mai bahut pahle likh chuka tha par dil me ek daar sa tha ki na jane iss rachna ko koyi pasand karega ki nehi, bas isi dar ke chlte mai phaisla nehi kar pa raha tha ki mujhe post karna chaiye ki nehi. Phaisla karte karte kayi din nikal gaya antaah maine himmat jhuta kar post kar diya.

Aapke aur baki pathako ke samiksha padhke laga ki mera daar bebuniyad tha aur meri rachna ne padhne walo ke dil ko chua.

Bas iske alawa mujhe aur kiya chaiye.

Thank you , thank you thank you dil se

 

[Naina]

Itna shandaar aur atulniy shamiksha diya. Yahn shamiksha ek asadharan sameeksha hai jiske jawab me mere pas koyi words hi nehi hai.

Jaise majhdhar me atki nawo bina patwar ke kinare nehi pahuch pata vaise hi koyi bhi rachna ek rachnakar ke liye tabhi sampurn hota hai jab use behtar pathak mile aur rakhna ko padkar pathak ko lage ki haa iss rachana me varnit ghatna mere jivan me kabhi na kabhi ghata ho tabhi ek rachna purn mani jati hai.

Jaisa aapne aapne shawdon me kaha ki meri ye rachna aapko bahut pasand aaya. Yakin maniye iss racha ko mai bahut pahle likh chuka tha par dil me ek daar sa tha ki na jane iss rachna ko koyi pasand karega ki nehi, bas isi dar ke chlte mai phaisla nehi kar pa raha tha ki mujhe post karna chaiye ki nehi. Phaisla karte karte kayi din nikal gaya antaah maine himmat jhuta kar post kar diya.

Aapke aur baki pathako ke samiksha padhke laga ki mera daar bebuniyad tha aur meri rachna ne padhne walo ke dil ko chua.

Bas iske alawa mujhe aur kiya chaiye.

Thank you , thank you thank you dil se

Waise reply bhi utna bhi bada hai

 

[GURU✓]

EK SAFAR…( AN UNFORGETTABLE JOURNEY)

Mai mayank engineering poori karne k baad delhi me room leke raha tha taaki koi sahi job lag jaaye … kayi jagah ja bhi chuka tha interview k liye par select nahi ho pa raha tha ..

Pata nahi kismat me kya likha tha .. Maine kayi company's me online resume bhi submit kar rakha tha.. Ek din mail check kiya to jaipur ki ek company se mujhe interview k liye notification aaya hua tha .. Maine us company me call karke confirm kiya .. Hiring k baare me .. Postive response mila udhar se..

Agle din subah 10 baje wahan report karna tha matlab ki aaj raat ko nikalana padega.. Fatafat apna backpack set kiya aur trains check karke shaamk time new delhi railway staion pahunch gaya .. Ticket li aur train ka wait karne laga .. Train aane me abhi kaafi time tha ..so mai thuda bahut idhar udha r tahal k timepass kar raha tha .. Fir thoda baith bhi liya ..

Train aane wali hai anounce ho raha tha.. Train bhi aa gayi kaafi mehnat mushakkat k baad jaa k train k andar ghus paaya..

Jaipur station pahunchte pahunchte mujhe raat k 3 baj chuke the..

Ab itni raat me kaha jaata kuch jaan pehchaan k ladke the par raat me unke yaha pahunchte kaisa ,, to socha hotel me sahi rahega .. Station k pass kuch dukaan thi wahan se poocha to pata chala kuch hotel hai yaha pass me hi..

Pehle waale ka to rent kaafi zyada tha 1200 rs maang raha tha ek din .. Patli gali se kat liye sunte ek do jagah aur check karne k 300 pe jaaki baat bani .. So usi me ruk liya alarm set kiya 8 baje ka aur so gaya..

Subah hote hi fatafat ready hua naashte k naam pe chai samosa mila .. Usi se kaam chalana pada.. Company me 9:30 baj tak mai entry kar chuka tha .. Formalities poori karne k baad mujhe wait karne ko bola gaya.. Aur bhi candidates the lagbhag 20 honge..

4-5 round hue jo hote normalyy hiring me aur bataya gaya ki selected candidates ko baad me call kiya jaayega..

Mai station pe aa gaya 2 baje tak…
Sochne laga ab kaha jaun delhi hi ya ghar (agra ) chalu ek do din k liye..

Ghar bhi gaye 3 mahine ho gaye the ghar jaana hi theek samjha aur ticket lene k liye counter ki taraf aa gaya yahan to kaafi bheedh thi ..ab line me lagne ki aadat thi nahi ,, aur train aane me abhi 2 ghante ka samay tha thoda bahar ho gaya ..
Wahin mujhe extra ticket counter nazar aa gaya jo ki kuch paise zyada lete hai aur ticket bhi turant mil jaata hai. 3-4 log hi mujhe wahan khade nazar aaye.. Unme ek uncle ji the 40+ k jinhone achhnera ki ticket li ye agra se thoda pehle padta us route me. El ladka tha shayad padhne likhnw wala hi lag raha tha aur ek ladki muh me pe kapda lapete thi usne bhi agra jaana tha. Mai in teeno k peeche tha to mujhe ye sab sunayi de gaya.

Mera bhi number jald hi aa gaya mujhe bhi turant hi ticket mil gayi. Mai jaise hi muda tucket lene k baad wo ladki mujhse boli aap agra jaa rahe hain..

Haan .. Kyu kya hua ..
Mujhe bhi wahin jaana hai..

Tabhi wo ladka bol pada bhaiya chalo saath me chalte hai time pass ho jaayega .. Ab akele dolne se yehi bhala maine bhi haami bhardi . Uski ladki kaafi figure kaafi achha tha par usne ek to kapda laper rakha tha aur upar se chasma chadhaa rakha tha wo bhi bada wala ti uske face k baare mujhe koi idea nahi lag paaya maine bhi ignore..

Mai aur wo ladka baatein karte karte staion k andar aa ye wo bhi hamre peeche peeche hi thi ..

Baatein karte karte maalum pada wo ladka 1st year engg ka student tha aur holiday pe ghar jaa raha tha agra . Aur wo ladki medical ki student thi wo bhi ghar jaa rahi thi agra .
Ladke k poochne pe maine bata diya ki mai to delhi me job karta hu yahan kuch kaam se aaya tha ab apne muh apni bezzati kya karta.. Kapde bhi acche pehan rakhe the to unko yakeen hogaya meri baaton pe.

Wo ladka bahut zyada hi hansh raha tha aur didi didi karke us ladki se baatein kar raha tha mazey le raha tha … mujhe to ye ladki kuch theek nahi lag rahi thi jis tarah se wo khul k baatein kar rahi thi usse aur mujse bhi baatein karne ki koshiss kar rahi thi .. Aaass paas me khade ladke bhi hame hi ghu rahe the..

Tabhi ladki boli yahan to kaafi time lagega chalo paass me hi ek park hai ghoom k aate ladke ne bhi insisit kiya to mai bhi maan gaya wo dono wahn rehte the..

Station k bahaar tempu waalun ne loot macha rakhi thi park tak 100rs maang rakhe the 10 -12 tempu se pooch paach kar li sab ka yahi haal tha tab wo ladki bolo chalo thoda aage chalte thoda baahar k fir apki baar usne baat ki tempu waale se ..

Thoda rajashthani me bholi jisse tempu waalo bhi yakeen ho gaya ye local hai inhe kaat nahi paaunga wo 50rs me maan gaya.

Mai sabse andar baitha fir wo ladka beech me aur fir sabse aakhir me wo.

Abhi tak ham ek doosre ke naam nahi jaante the aadha ghante park me ghoome thoda baahar se chaat gol gappe khaye sabne apne apne paise diye.

Ladke k naam tha arun , ladki ka deepika .. Pata nahi inhone naam bhi sabhi bataye the ya nahi maine bhi jaanbooj ka apna naam bata diya aakash.

Station laut aaye fir train aane me 15min time tha ..
Arun to bas ek backpack leke the peeth pe meri tarah par uski ladki k pass ek bag aur suitcase tha ..

Tarin aa gayi hadd se zyada bheedh thi .. Badi mushkil se mai andar ghus paaya .. Arun to dikha hi nahi bheed hi itni thi . Na wo ladki dikhi mai abhi gate k thoda hi andar jaa paaya tha to baahar khadi wo nazar aa gayi .. Wo shayad darr gayi thi bheed se isliye nahi chadhi ek baar ko maine socha bhaad me jaaye .. Lekin fir mujhe ye karna sahi nahi laga . Mai neeche utar gaya aur bola khadi kyu ho andar chalo ..

Deepika: nahi isme bahut bheed hai mujhe ni jaana… please agli train me chalein please 1 ghante me aa jayegi ..

Kuch der me train chali gayi ab bheedh thodi kam thi platform pe. Tabhi thodi der me arun bhi hamari taraf aata hua dikha .s


Pehli to mujhe ye ladki kuch gadbad lag rahi thi lekin jab park me iske papa ka phone aaya wo pooch taachh kara rahe the tab jaake laga theek hai warna mai to ise kuch aur hi samajh raha tha..

Maine poocha pehle kaise jaati akele .. Pehle dikkat nahi hoti thi?

d: nahi mai hamsha bus se jaati , par is baar ticket nahi mili to train se jaana pad raha hai..

Arun ne bataya : bhaiya agli train last train hai aaj ki ,,iske baad koi train nahi..

Mai utar to gaya tha train se par is baaare me bhool hi gaya tha maine socha bhi nahi tha iska to..

Maine bhi deepika ko bol diya dekho is baar kuch bhi ho jaaye train me chadh hi jaana abki baar.3

Train aane ka anouncement ho gaya. Achanak se bheedh fir se badh gayi wo ek dam mere shareer se chipak chipak k chal rahi thi.. Ek pal k liye bhi door nahi ho rahi thi..

Mujhe bhi maajra samajh me aa raha tha ye chherkhaani se bachne k liye kar rahi hai ye sab aatki isko mere samajh kar launde ise tang naa karein.

Maine bhi niswarth bhaaw se madad karne ki sochi aur uska suit case utha liya aur badi muskil se is baar train me chadh gaye is baar bhi arun gayab ho gaya.

Ham ghuss to gaye par par itni bheed thi gate k pass hi hame khada rehna pada patli se jagah pe.



Garmi k din the kaafi paseena aa raha tha romal se paasene pochte waqt meri kohni thodi uske boobs se lag gayi .. Usne kuch react nahi kiya ab khade khade uski haalat kharab ho rahi thi .. Ham logo ko khade rehne ki aadat thi.

Wo kaafi ghabraayi si lag rahi thi baar baar hil dul rahi thi .. Ek uncle ji thi saath me hi khade kya baat hai beta ,,

Deepika : mujhe chakkar se aa rahein hai
shayad ye garmi k kaaran tha for wo mujhse kehne lagi please mere saath agle station pe utar jaan thodi der me aayega
wo bhi jaipur me hi hai.

Me: mai nahi utaar raha ab to koi train bhi nahi aaj ki tumhe utarna ho to utar jaana saamana utarwa dunga tumhara.

Station bhi aa gaya par usne kuch react nahi chup chap khade rahi waise hi mai compartment se peeth lagaye khada tha wo mere se ek dam sat k khadi thi meri taraf muh ki beech beech me uske boobs halka sa pal bhar k liye mere seene se touch ho rahe the.. Mere ling ne bhi akadana shuru kar diya.. Tha.

Aas pass me khade log to hame boyfrend girlfrend samajh rahe the.. Train me chhed chhad to aam hoti hai itni bheed me kon kiske ungli kar de kya pata chalne waala tha, halla karke bhi koi fayda nahi ulta apni bezzati ho jaati .. Ab mujhe iska mere saath chipak k khada rehna bhi samajh aa raha tha..

Kuch der baad usne mere kandhe pe haath rakh k sahar lene lagi mai turant bola kya hua tumhe.

d: khade khade thak gayi hu..

Ek Uncle ji ne bola ye suit case hai to isi pe baith jaa wo suitcase bhi beech me hi rakha hua tha uspe uska bag tha .
Aadhe suitcase pe baith gayi meri taraf hi muh kiye ab uska muh muh mere pet k paas tha aur usne ek haath dahini jaangh poe rakh diya . Mujhe to jhatlka sa laga ek dam se .. Mai to pant me apne tambu bane bamboo tak ko adjust nahi kar paa raha tha sab k saamne upar se isne yahin haath rakhna tha..

Fir thodi der baad boli paani hai kya..

Maine pehle khud paani piya .. Bottle bag se nikal k fir use bottle thama di.. Paani ki aadhi botal wo gadak gayi fir bolne lagi isme to garam paani hai.

Maine use kuch nahi bola
Apne mann me bola meri maa ab tere liye freeze ka thanda paani kaha se laaun.

Peene peene k liye usne apne chehre se kapda hataya aur chasma bhi utaar diya.. Ab jaa ki uski shakal dekh paaya kaafi sexy chehra thadekhte hi koi lattu ho jaaye uspe.. Aur aisi ladkiyon ko akela dekhte hi manchalo ko line lag jaati hai khaas kar k train me.

Safar lamaba tha maine apne bag se kuch namkeen nikaal k khaane laga meri delha dekh usne bhi kuch biscuits nikaal k khaane lagi .. Mujhe bhi dene lagai par maine nahi liya usne kaafi koshis ki fir bhi..

Kisi station pe gaadi ruki to bheed kuch kam hui aur ek seat khali nazar aayi mai jhat se uspe baith gaya bagal, wo bhi mere peeche peeche wahi aake khadi ho gayi seat k paas 20 min khadi rehne k baad maine na jaane kyu use baithne ko bol diya par nahi maani ..kehni lagi aap baitho fir kehne lagi chalo aap thoda kone me ho jaao wo beech me aa ke baith gayi.
Chipak k baithe hone ki wajah se meri kohni uski boobs se side se lag rahi thi .. Mai apni feelings ko badi mushkil se control kar pa raha tha.. Fir thodi der baad wo fir se paani maangne lagi

Mann to kiya ki abhi iske muh me lund dedu usi se jitna mann ho peeti rehna.

Anamaane man se maine use botal dedi bacha hua saaara pani wo pee gayi. Mujhe kaafi gussa aa raha tha par maine wo sab apne chehre se zaahir nahi hone diya.

Fir wo mobile nikaal k kuch game khelne lagi uspe tabhi kisi ka msg aaya uspe ..pakka uske boyfrend ka hoga usne thoda haath se chhupa k kuch type kiya aur fir mobile andar rakh liya aur mujhse mobile maangne lagi..

Aakash please apna mobile dena mujhe ek call karni hai..
Me: tumhare pass bhi ho to hai .
d: usme balance nahi hai .. Abhi khatam ho gaya.
Anamaane mann se maine use mobile diya ..

Wo call milaane ki bajaye call log aur msg inbox dekhne lagi.. Maine jhat se uske haath se mobile chheen liya.

Ye kya kar rahi thi call karne k liye diya tha na ki taank jhaank karne ko..

Are wo hi to kar rahi thi do to sahi.
Fir maine use de diya . Abki usne ek nmbr dial kiya aur baat karne lagi .. Baaton se maalum pad raha tha apne papa se hi baatein kar rahi hai. Aur baad me usne bataya ki ksi aur se mobile maang k call kiya hai uske me balance khatam ho gaya hai.

Uski kal cut hote hi maine apne ek haath se uski wo naazuk kalai pakdi aur doosre se apna mobile pakda aur pant ki jeb me daal liya.

Jab se usne kapda hataya tha wo meri taraf dekh k smile kar rahi halke halke ,, kya ye mujhe koi signal de rahi thi..

Par iska to bf pehle se hi hai jiska saboot usne khud diya thodi der pehle tab kyu kar rahi hai ye sab.

Fir usne shareer thoda meri taraf ghuma liya uske wo soft boobs mere baaju se lag k dab rahe the wo mere pe hi gire jaa rahi thi jaise apne boobs dabwaana chah rahi thi..

Fir poochne lagi aap kaha rahte ho agra me: maine use jhootha pata bata diya .. Aur fir mere bina poocha batane lagi mai laxmi nagar me rehti hu.

Meri taraf se koi response na paate hu , usne aap apna number de dijiye ..

Mai :wo kis liye..
d: aise hi..
Mai kuch nahi bola na use number diya aisa hi saamne dekhne lagaa usse alag ..
Wo mere taraf hi gire jaaa rahi thi usle boobs ka load mere seene tak tha ab ab to hadd paar kar di thi usne .. Aur lund ki to haalat hi mat poohna itna dard ho raha tha 1 ghante se khada tha kab nikal jaaye kuch pata nahi..

1-2 jagah chhote station pe gaadi aur ruki bheed aur kam ho gayi ab zyadatar log seat pe hi baithe nazar aa rahe they.

5 min baad arun nazar ayaya hamari taraf usko aata dekh deepika thoda seedha ho gayi thoda mujhe bhi sakoon mila.

Seat to khali thi nahi , pehle to khada hi rehne ki soch raha tha fir maine kah diya suitcase pe baitha ja .. Toote to mera jaayega.. Ha ha maine mann me socha..

Usne bataya ki bheed bahut thi isliye wo doosri taraf pahunch gaya tha train aane se pehle udhar se koi chadhne wala tha nahi

Jhat se chadh bina kisi dikkat ke fir wo deepika se didi didi aur mujhse bhaiya bhaiya karke maze lene ..

Kaaafi kulhandi launda tha wo bhi jitna shareef dikh raha tha utna tha nahi .. Fir double meaning jokes sunane laga dheere dheere jo sirf ham teeno hi sun paa rahe the. Mujhe chhor k wo dono khoob hansi hans rahe the thoda control karte karte.

Deepika ne apna haath ek baar fir meri jaangh pe rakh diya ,, jab se seat pe baithe ham dono wo baar baar apna haath mere jaangh pe rakhti , kabhi sehlaati , kabhi thoda daba bhi deti fir agle pal jhat se hata bhi leti jaise kuch hua bhi nahi ho aur mai uski taraf dekhu koi reaction bhi nahi deti. Ek dam anjaaan banne ki koshis kar rahi thi wo.

Abki baar usne apne haath usne thoda zyada andar tak le gayi hansi mazak me aur daba diya , mujhe bahut tezz shock laga ek bar aur maine uska haath wahin pe daba k pakad liya aur uske kaan k paas muh le jaake dheere se bola kyu klar rahi ho ye sab ..

Chahti kya ho tum aakhir jabse tumne koi na koi naatak laga rakha hai..
Usne kuch nahi bola baaki k safar bhar .. Arun bhi chup hi raha usne bhi ungli karna band kar diya .. Train ab agra pahunchne waali thi.

Kuch der me pahunch bhi gayi ,, usne fir se meri taraf dekha abki baar uski aankhon me mujhe apne liye kuch nazar aa raha tha.

Arun ne uska saamaan utarwa diya mai chup chaaap uski taraf ek baar dekha aur jaldi jaldi station se baahar nikal aaya ..

Raat k 2 baje ghar pahuncha ..


Neend to maano koso door thi mujhse ..

Raat bhar uske baare me hi sochta raha.. Sir bhi kaafi dard kar raha tha subah 9 baje shayad meri aankh lag gayi mummy ne aake jaagaay 12 baje tab aankh khuli aur abhi sir dard k baare me fata jaa raha tha..

Usi ki yaad aa rahi thi jo sab kal hua ..


Maine wo sab bhulane ki kaafi koshis ki ..


Par 2 saal bhi baad bhi mai use bhula nahi paaya ..

Uska poora naam bhi nahi pata tha .. Kya pata wo naam bhi asli tha bhi ya nahi.. Use dhundta bhi to kaise ..

Address k naam par sirf laxmi nagar maalum ab kuch nahi so sakta ,,

Mujhe bhi usse kuch attractoin ho gaya tha , kya pata pyaar ho gaya ho .. Mai nahi jaanata us waqt to mere sochne samjhne ki shakti hai jaise chali gayi thi.


Par ab sirf uska chehra hi bacha hai yaadon me jo shayad mai kabhi na bhula paaun . Zindagi bhar..


Kabhi kabhi wo sab pal mujhe yaad aa jaate hai aur kaafi udaasi chha jaati hai .. Poora din hi bekaar ho jaata hai .


Isi ka naam zindagi ..

Kya pata fir kabhi usse milna likha ho ya kuch aur ye upar wala hi jaanta hoga

Badhiya safar ki kahani zindgi ke mod par kuch aise log mil jate jinko hum kabhi bhula na pate hain.very nice story brother

 

[Destiny]

Waise reply bhi utna bhi bada hai

1500 words ke aage 150 wards kuch na hai.

 

[Naina]

Story - EK SAFAR…( AN UNFORGETTABLE JOURNEY)
Writer - Ares

Kahani - naukri ke talash mein is shahar se us shahar ghumne wala aakash ko ek achhi jagah job interview ke liye bulaya gaya.... waha interview dene ke baad usne decide kiya ki friend ke ghar rukne achha hai ghar ho aaye wo.. kyunki bahot dino se ghar nahi gaya tha.... well... Train se uska safar suru hua ghar ki aurr matlab agra ki aurr.... lekin is safar uski mulakaat huyi deepika aur arun se.... jab se un dono se mila hai khaskar deepika se kuch uncomfortable ghatanaayen aakash ke sath .... deepika jis tarah se behave kar rahi thi wo sach me kuch seductive type ki thi... Aur arun,waise banda thik hi tha, lekin uska behavior kuch ajeeb sa the...well isse pehle pata chale ki deepika ke mann akhir kya chal raha hai safar khatm ho gaya aur baad mein aakash usse kabhi mil nahi paya....

Aate hai sameeksha pe - waise ek normal story line thi...is bhid bhad wali is jindagi mein naukri talaashta aakash kaise hometown laut te waqt us safar mein deepika aur arun se mulakaat huyi , unse milne ke baad khaskar deepika ke sath safar karke uski dwara ki gayi harkaton ki wajah se kaisi parishishtiyo ka saamna karna pada aakash ko aur us safar ke ant ke baad bhi, ghar pahunche ke baad bhi aur aaj do saal baad bhi kyun akash deepika ko bhool nayi paya ishi pe adharit hai story....

My point of view....
waise kahani mein zyada kuch khas nahi hai....sibaye ek baat khas ke...
Ya to Deepika Aakash parakh rahi thi.... ya phir Deepika ek call girl thi.... Ya lootne aayi thi...
waise parakhne wali baat pe zyada jod di jaaye to zyada thik hoga... Station mein ya train mein koi uske sath ched chad na kar de isliye aakash ke aas paas hi rahi, chahe khade rahte waqt ho ya baithe waqt ho.... Aakash ke paas secure feel kar rahi thi wo khud ko... mob. number se leke ghar ke adress maangne tak, yahi puche gaye sabhi sawal... Ye sabhi ishi aurr indicate kare ki Deepika aakash ko parakh rahi thi... rahi baat seductive tarike se touch karne ki to shayad ushe pehli nazar mein pyar ho gaya tha usse..lekin uske liye aakash anjaan tha totally..isliye aise parakh rahi thi taaki jaan sake uska nature kaisa hai...
safar ke ant mein bichhadte waqt uski aankhen saari baatein bayan kar rahi thi...ye bhi ek aur proof hai... Bas aakash samajh nahi paya...
Waise ek baat baar khatakti rahi... aisa kyun laga baar baar ki ho na ho us arun aur Deepika ke bich jaan pehchan hai pehle se hi.. Kuch to nata hai..

Khair insaan ki jindagi hi ek safar hai.. janm se leke mrityu tak... is dauraan bahot se log milte hai, mulakaat hoti hai to bichhadte bhi hai... lekin un mein se kuch bahot hi khas hote hai.... Jo dil ke karib hote hai to kabhi ajnabi banke aate hai dil mein jagah banake chale jaate hai...
Well is kahani mein aakash ki jindagi mein unhi khas logo mein se ek Deepika thi,, jo ek safar ke dauraan uski life mein kuch lamho ke liye aayi aur chali bhi gayi... par uski baatein aur aadaye kabhi bhool paane ki ek chap chhod gayi aakash ke dilo dimag pe... aur wo bhi is kadar ki ab shayad hi aakash ushe shayad bhool paaye...

Waise kahani mein kayi saari kamiya bhi thi... off bit Conclusive story line thi bhi aur shayad nahi bhi , isliye shayad itna likh di ... Aap apni lekhni aur soch ke sath bahut kuch iss kahani ke jariye dikha sakte the.. Kisi 2 alag point of view se comparison karke ... .. Khair is topic ko aage na badhake yahi closed karti hun... usko ullekhit karne ko mann na hai...

Baaki
overall it was a well writen story and superbly presentation .... Aap ki story ne wakai kafi manoranjan kiya hai ....
Aap wakai is type ke concept pe adharit kahahi bahut shandaar tarike se rachna ki hain.. undoubtedly.

brilliant story line with awesome writing skills

 

[Ahamdeepo]

Virgin Seal Tooti, Lekin L***d Ki​

wah Bhai title pad Kar to maza aa gya.. Or story me bhi dum tha.. Lkn kuch zyada twists nhi tha.. Normal si sex story hai..
Overall average story..
Bhai bura mat manna, waise Mai bhi isi tarah ki story likh rha hu..

 

[Rahul]

EK SAFAR…( AN UNFORGETTABLE JOURNEY)

Mai mayank engineering poori karne k baad delhi me room leke raha tha taaki koi sahi job lag jaaye … kayi jagah ja bhi chuka tha interview k liye par select nahi ho pa raha tha ..

Pata nahi kismat me kya likha tha .. Maine kayi company's me online resume bhi submit kar rakha tha.. Ek din mail check kiya to jaipur ki ek company se mujhe interview k liye notification aaya hua tha .. Maine us company me call karke confirm kiya .. Hiring k baare me .. Postive response mila udhar se..

Agle din subah 10 baje wahan report karna tha matlab ki aaj raat ko nikalana padega.. Fatafat apna backpack set kiya aur trains check karke shaamk time new delhi railway staion pahunch gaya .. Ticket li aur train ka wait karne laga .. Train aane me abhi kaafi time tha ..so mai thuda bahut idhar udha r tahal k timepass kar raha tha .. Fir thoda baith bhi liya ..

Train aane wali hai anounce ho raha tha.. Train bhi aa gayi kaafi mehnat mushakkat k baad jaa k train k andar ghus paaya..

Jaipur station pahunchte pahunchte mujhe raat k 3 baj chuke the..

Ab itni raat me kaha jaata kuch jaan pehchaan k ladke the par raat me unke yaha pahunchte kaisa ,, to socha hotel me sahi rahega .. Station k pass kuch dukaan thi wahan se poocha to pata chala kuch hotel hai yaha pass me hi..

Pehle waale ka to rent kaafi zyada tha 1200 rs maang raha tha ek din .. Patli gali se kat liye sunte ek do jagah aur check karne k 300 pe jaaki baat bani .. So usi me ruk liya alarm set kiya 8 baje ka aur so gaya..

Subah hote hi fatafat ready hua naashte k naam pe chai samosa mila .. Usi se kaam chalana pada.. Company me 9:30 baj tak mai entry kar chuka tha .. Formalities poori karne k baad mujhe wait karne ko bola gaya.. Aur bhi candidates the lagbhag 20 honge..

4-5 round hue jo hote normalyy hiring me aur bataya gaya ki selected candidates ko baad me call kiya jaayega..

Mai station pe aa gaya 2 baje tak…
Sochne laga ab kaha jaun delhi hi ya ghar (agra ) chalu ek do din k liye..

Ghar bhi gaye 3 mahine ho gaye the ghar jaana hi theek samjha aur ticket lene k liye counter ki taraf aa gaya yahan to kaafi bheedh thi ..ab line me lagne ki aadat thi nahi ,, aur train aane me abhi 2 ghante ka samay tha thoda bahar ho gaya ..
Wahin mujhe extra ticket counter nazar aa gaya jo ki kuch paise zyada lete hai aur ticket bhi turant mil jaata hai. 3-4 log hi mujhe wahan khade nazar aaye.. Unme ek uncle ji the 40+ k jinhone achhnera ki ticket li ye agra se thoda pehle padta us route me. El ladka tha shayad padhne likhnw wala hi lag raha tha aur ek ladki muh me pe kapda lapete thi usne bhi agra jaana tha. Mai in teeno k peeche tha to mujhe ye sab sunayi de gaya.

Mera bhi number jald hi aa gaya mujhe bhi turant hi ticket mil gayi. Mai jaise hi muda tucket lene k baad wo ladki mujhse boli aap agra jaa rahe hain..

Haan .. Kyu kya hua ..
Mujhe bhi wahin jaana hai..

Tabhi wo ladka bol pada bhaiya chalo saath me chalte hai time pass ho jaayega .. Ab akele dolne se yehi bhala maine bhi haami bhardi . Uski ladki kaafi figure kaafi achha tha par usne ek to kapda laper rakha tha aur upar se chasma chadhaa rakha tha wo bhi bada wala ti uske face k baare mujhe koi idea nahi lag paaya maine bhi ignore..

Mai aur wo ladka baatein karte karte staion k andar aa ye wo bhi hamre peeche peeche hi thi ..

Baatein karte karte maalum pada wo ladka 1st year engg ka student tha aur holiday pe ghar jaa raha tha agra . Aur wo ladki medical ki student thi wo bhi ghar jaa rahi thi agra .
Ladke k poochne pe maine bata diya ki mai to delhi me job karta hu yahan kuch kaam se aaya tha ab apne muh apni bezzati kya karta.. Kapde bhi acche pehan rakhe the to unko yakeen hogaya meri baaton pe.

Wo ladka bahut zyada hi hansh raha tha aur didi didi karke us ladki se baatein kar raha tha mazey le raha tha … mujhe to ye ladki kuch theek nahi lag rahi thi jis tarah se wo khul k baatein kar rahi thi usse aur mujse bhi baatein karne ki koshiss kar rahi thi .. Aaass paas me khade ladke bhi hame hi ghu rahe the..

Tabhi ladki boli yahan to kaafi time lagega chalo paass me hi ek park hai ghoom k aate ladke ne bhi insisit kiya to mai bhi maan gaya wo dono wahn rehte the..

Station k bahaar tempu waalun ne loot macha rakhi thi park tak 100rs maang rakhe the 10 -12 tempu se pooch paach kar li sab ka yahi haal tha tab wo ladki bolo chalo thoda aage chalte thoda baahar k fir apki baar usne baat ki tempu waale se ..

Thoda rajashthani me bholi jisse tempu waalo bhi yakeen ho gaya ye local hai inhe kaat nahi paaunga wo 50rs me maan gaya.

Mai sabse andar baitha fir wo ladka beech me aur fir sabse aakhir me wo.

Abhi tak ham ek doosre ke naam nahi jaante the aadha ghante park me ghoome thoda baahar se chaat gol gappe khaye sabne apne apne paise diye.

Ladke k naam tha arun , ladki ka deepika .. Pata nahi inhone naam bhi sabhi bataye the ya nahi maine bhi jaanbooj ka apna naam bata diya aakash.

Station laut aaye fir train aane me 15min time tha ..
Arun to bas ek backpack leke the peeth pe meri tarah par uski ladki k pass ek bag aur suitcase tha ..

Tarin aa gayi hadd se zyada bheedh thi .. Badi mushkil se mai andar ghus paaya .. Arun to dikha hi nahi bheed hi itni thi . Na wo ladki dikhi mai abhi gate k thoda hi andar jaa paaya tha to baahar khadi wo nazar aa gayi .. Wo shayad darr gayi thi bheed se isliye nahi chadhi ek baar ko maine socha bhaad me jaaye .. Lekin fir mujhe ye karna sahi nahi laga . Mai neeche utar gaya aur bola khadi kyu ho andar chalo ..

Deepika: nahi isme bahut bheed hai mujhe ni jaana… please agli train me chalein please 1 ghante me aa jayegi ..

Kuch der me train chali gayi ab bheedh thodi kam thi platform pe. Tabhi thodi der me arun bhi hamari taraf aata hua dikha .s


Pehli to mujhe ye ladki kuch gadbad lag rahi thi lekin jab park me iske papa ka phone aaya wo pooch taachh kara rahe the tab jaake laga theek hai warna mai to ise kuch aur hi samajh raha tha..

Maine poocha pehle kaise jaati akele .. Pehle dikkat nahi hoti thi?

d: nahi mai hamsha bus se jaati , par is baar ticket nahi mili to train se jaana pad raha hai..

Arun ne bataya : bhaiya agli train last train hai aaj ki ,,iske baad koi train nahi..

Mai utar to gaya tha train se par is baaare me bhool hi gaya tha maine socha bhi nahi tha iska to..

Maine bhi deepika ko bol diya dekho is baar kuch bhi ho jaaye train me chadh hi jaana abki baar.3

Train aane ka anouncement ho gaya. Achanak se bheedh fir se badh gayi wo ek dam mere shareer se chipak chipak k chal rahi thi.. Ek pal k liye bhi door nahi ho rahi thi..

Mujhe bhi maajra samajh me aa raha tha ye chherkhaani se bachne k liye kar rahi hai ye sab aatki isko mere samajh kar launde ise tang naa karein.

Maine bhi niswarth bhaaw se madad karne ki sochi aur uska suit case utha liya aur badi muskil se is baar train me chadh gaye is baar bhi arun gayab ho gaya.

Ham ghuss to gaye par par itni bheed thi gate k pass hi hame khada rehna pada patli se jagah pe.



Garmi k din the kaafi paseena aa raha tha romal se paasene pochte waqt meri kohni thodi uske boobs se lag gayi .. Usne kuch react nahi kiya ab khade khade uski haalat kharab ho rahi thi .. Ham logo ko khade rehne ki aadat thi.

Wo kaafi ghabraayi si lag rahi thi baar baar hil dul rahi thi .. Ek uncle ji thi saath me hi khade kya baat hai beta ,,

Deepika : mujhe chakkar se aa rahein hai
shayad ye garmi k kaaran tha for wo mujhse kehne lagi please mere saath agle station pe utar jaan thodi der me aayega
wo bhi jaipur me hi hai.

Me: mai nahi utaar raha ab to koi train bhi nahi aaj ki tumhe utarna ho to utar jaana saamana utarwa dunga tumhara.

Station bhi aa gaya par usne kuch react nahi chup chap khade rahi waise hi mai compartment se peeth lagaye khada tha wo mere se ek dam sat k khadi thi meri taraf muh ki beech beech me uske boobs halka sa pal bhar k liye mere seene se touch ho rahe the.. Mere ling ne bhi akadana shuru kar diya.. Tha.

Aas pass me khade log to hame boyfrend girlfrend samajh rahe the.. Train me chhed chhad to aam hoti hai itni bheed me kon kiske ungli kar de kya pata chalne waala tha, halla karke bhi koi fayda nahi ulta apni bezzati ho jaati .. Ab mujhe iska mere saath chipak k khada rehna bhi samajh aa raha tha..

Kuch der baad usne mere kandhe pe haath rakh k sahar lene lagi mai turant bola kya hua tumhe.

d: khade khade thak gayi hu..

Ek Uncle ji ne bola ye suit case hai to isi pe baith jaa wo suitcase bhi beech me hi rakha hua tha uspe uska bag tha .
Aadhe suitcase pe baith gayi meri taraf hi muh kiye ab uska muh muh mere pet k paas tha aur usne ek haath dahini jaangh poe rakh diya . Mujhe to jhatlka sa laga ek dam se .. Mai to pant me apne tambu bane bamboo tak ko adjust nahi kar paa raha tha sab k saamne upar se isne yahin haath rakhna tha..

Fir thodi der baad boli paani hai kya..

Maine pehle khud paani piya .. Bottle bag se nikal k fir use bottle thama di.. Paani ki aadhi botal wo gadak gayi fir bolne lagi isme to garam paani hai.

Maine use kuch nahi bola
Apne mann me bola meri maa ab tere liye freeze ka thanda paani kaha se laaun.

Peene peene k liye usne apne chehre se kapda hataya aur chasma bhi utaar diya.. Ab jaa ki uski shakal dekh paaya kaafi sexy chehra thadekhte hi koi lattu ho jaaye uspe.. Aur aisi ladkiyon ko akela dekhte hi manchalo ko line lag jaati hai khaas kar k train me.

Safar lamaba tha maine apne bag se kuch namkeen nikaal k khaane laga meri delha dekh usne bhi kuch biscuits nikaal k khaane lagi .. Mujhe bhi dene lagai par maine nahi liya usne kaafi koshis ki fir bhi..

Kisi station pe gaadi ruki to bheed kuch kam hui aur ek seat khali nazar aayi mai jhat se uspe baith gaya bagal, wo bhi mere peeche peeche wahi aake khadi ho gayi seat k paas 20 min khadi rehne k baad maine na jaane kyu use baithne ko bol diya par nahi maani ..kehni lagi aap baitho fir kehne lagi chalo aap thoda kone me ho jaao wo beech me aa ke baith gayi.
Chipak k baithe hone ki wajah se meri kohni uski boobs se side se lag rahi thi .. Mai apni feelings ko badi mushkil se control kar pa raha tha.. Fir thodi der baad wo fir se paani maangne lagi

Mann to kiya ki abhi iske muh me lund dedu usi se jitna mann ho peeti rehna.

Anamaane man se maine use botal dedi bacha hua saaara pani wo pee gayi. Mujhe kaafi gussa aa raha tha par maine wo sab apne chehre se zaahir nahi hone diya.

Fir wo mobile nikaal k kuch game khelne lagi uspe tabhi kisi ka msg aaya uspe ..pakka uske boyfrend ka hoga usne thoda haath se chhupa k kuch type kiya aur fir mobile andar rakh liya aur mujhse mobile maangne lagi..

Aakash please apna mobile dena mujhe ek call karni hai..
Me: tumhare pass bhi ho to hai .
d: usme balance nahi hai .. Abhi khatam ho gaya.
Anamaane mann se maine use mobile diya ..

Wo call milaane ki bajaye call log aur msg inbox dekhne lagi.. Maine jhat se uske haath se mobile chheen liya.

Ye kya kar rahi thi call karne k liye diya tha na ki taank jhaank karne ko..

Are wo hi to kar rahi thi do to sahi.
Fir maine use de diya . Abki usne ek nmbr dial kiya aur baat karne lagi .. Baaton se maalum pad raha tha apne papa se hi baatein kar rahi hai. Aur baad me usne bataya ki ksi aur se mobile maang k call kiya hai uske me balance khatam ho gaya hai.

Uski kal cut hote hi maine apne ek haath se uski wo naazuk kalai pakdi aur doosre se apna mobile pakda aur pant ki jeb me daal liya.

Jab se usne kapda hataya tha wo meri taraf dekh k smile kar rahi halke halke ,, kya ye mujhe koi signal de rahi thi..

Par iska to bf pehle se hi hai jiska saboot usne khud diya thodi der pehle tab kyu kar rahi hai ye sab.

Fir usne shareer thoda meri taraf ghuma liya uske wo soft boobs mere baaju se lag k dab rahe the wo mere pe hi gire jaa rahi thi jaise apne boobs dabwaana chah rahi thi..

Fir poochne lagi aap kaha rahte ho agra me: maine use jhootha pata bata diya .. Aur fir mere bina poocha batane lagi mai laxmi nagar me rehti hu.

Meri taraf se koi response na paate hu , usne aap apna number de dijiye ..

Mai :wo kis liye..
d: aise hi..
Mai kuch nahi bola na use number diya aisa hi saamne dekhne lagaa usse alag ..
Wo mere taraf hi gire jaaa rahi thi usle boobs ka load mere seene tak tha ab ab to hadd paar kar di thi usne .. Aur lund ki to haalat hi mat poohna itna dard ho raha tha 1 ghante se khada tha kab nikal jaaye kuch pata nahi..

1-2 jagah chhote station pe gaadi aur ruki bheed aur kam ho gayi ab zyadatar log seat pe hi baithe nazar aa rahe they.

5 min baad arun nazar ayaya hamari taraf usko aata dekh deepika thoda seedha ho gayi thoda mujhe bhi sakoon mila.

Seat to khali thi nahi , pehle to khada hi rehne ki soch raha tha fir maine kah diya suitcase pe baitha ja .. Toote to mera jaayega.. Ha ha maine mann me socha..

Usne bataya ki bheed bahut thi isliye wo doosri taraf pahunch gaya tha train aane se pehle udhar se koi chadhne wala tha nahi

Jhat se chadh bina kisi dikkat ke fir wo deepika se didi didi aur mujhse bhaiya bhaiya karke maze lene ..

Kaaafi kulhandi launda tha wo bhi jitna shareef dikh raha tha utna tha nahi .. Fir double meaning jokes sunane laga dheere dheere jo sirf ham teeno hi sun paa rahe the. Mujhe chhor k wo dono khoob hansi hans rahe the thoda control karte karte.

Deepika ne apna haath ek baar fir meri jaangh pe rakh diya ,, jab se seat pe baithe ham dono wo baar baar apna haath mere jaangh pe rakhti , kabhi sehlaati , kabhi thoda daba bhi deti fir agle pal jhat se hata bhi leti jaise kuch hua bhi nahi ho aur mai uski taraf dekhu koi reaction bhi nahi deti. Ek dam anjaaan banne ki koshis kar rahi thi wo.

Abki baar usne apne haath usne thoda zyada andar tak le gayi hansi mazak me aur daba diya , mujhe bahut tezz shock laga ek bar aur maine uska haath wahin pe daba k pakad liya aur uske kaan k paas muh le jaake dheere se bola kyu klar rahi ho ye sab ..

Chahti kya ho tum aakhir jabse tumne koi na koi naatak laga rakha hai..
Usne kuch nahi bola baaki k safar bhar .. Arun bhi chup hi raha usne bhi ungli karna band kar diya .. Train ab agra pahunchne waali thi.

Kuch der me pahunch bhi gayi ,, usne fir se meri taraf dekha abki baar uski aankhon me mujhe apne liye kuch nazar aa raha tha.

Arun ne uska saamaan utarwa diya mai chup chaaap uski taraf ek baar dekha aur jaldi jaldi station se baahar nikal aaya ..

Raat k 2 baje ghar pahuncha ..


Neend to maano koso door thi mujhse ..

Raat bhar uske baare me hi sochta raha.. Sir bhi kaafi dard kar raha tha subah 9 baje shayad meri aankh lag gayi mummy ne aake jaagaay 12 baje tab aankh khuli aur abhi sir dard k baare me fata jaa raha tha..

Usi ki yaad aa rahi thi jo sab kal hua ..


Maine wo sab bhulane ki kaafi koshis ki ..


Par 2 saal bhi baad bhi mai use bhula nahi paaya ..

Uska poora naam bhi nahi pata tha .. Kya pata wo naam bhi asli tha bhi ya nahi.. Use dhundta bhi to kaise ..

Address k naam par sirf laxmi nagar maalum ab kuch nahi so sakta ,,

Mujhe bhi usse kuch attractoin ho gaya tha , kya pata pyaar ho gaya ho .. Mai nahi jaanata us waqt to mere sochne samjhne ki shakti hai jaise chali gayi thi.


Par ab sirf uska chehra hi bacha hai yaadon me jo shayad mai kabhi na bhula paaun . Zindagi bhar..


Kabhi kabhi wo sab pal mujhe yaad aa jaate hai aur kaafi udaasi chha jaati hai .. Poora din hi bekaar ho jaata hai .


Isi ka naam zindagi ..

Kya pata fir kabhi usse milna likha ho ya kuch aur ye upar wala hi jaanta hoga

Adbhut kahani kausal mitra..safar ke dauraan ek hasina se mulakaat aur fir Jo kuch bhi ghatnayen hui sab badhiya rahi lekin last me us ladki se contact toot gaya ye bura hua lekin samjh lo uska sath utna hi tha koi naya humsafar milega Jo usse behtar ho sakta waise bhi aap kuch ghante ko kisi ko kitna samjh sakte ho.badhiya kahani Maja aa gaya

 

[Rahul]

Mannat ke Diye




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Kia hua??? Maine uski thodi ko hath se upar uthaya ,Us ki aankhon me larazte moti is baat ki gawahi de rahe the keh dil ke aabgine pe kahin chot lagi hai

Kia hua?? Ye rona kis baat ka??? Mujhe waqai maloom nahi tha ke us ki aankhon ki ye fazool kharchiyan(ansoo bahana) kis baat par ho rahi hain

Kuch nahi ……us ne itni aahista kaha ke me bamushkil hi sun paya tha , Agar kuch nahi hua to phir ye bain kyin daal rahi ho??? Mere lehje me halki si talkhi utar aayi thi , Bua bta rahi then , tumne khana nahi khaya???? Maine us pe nazrein gaad kar drashti se kaha

Us ne sir utha kar eek shikwa karti nigah mujh par dali aur phir sir jhuka lia, Ansoo ab us ke rukhsar bhigoo rahe the

Achaa sorry …..mujhe laga mere rawayye ne use hurt kia hai , Chalo khana khaa lo….. maine us ka bazoo pakad kar uthaya to wo chup chaap uth khari huy

Us ki aankhon me ajeeb si chamk ubhri thi

Tum…….tum bahot kanjoos ho……mere peeche chalte chalte us ne dheere se kaha to main chonk gya

Maine kya kanjoosi ki hai????? Achanak ruk kar maine mud kar pucha

Wo jo kisi farmanbardar(aagyakari) bacche ki tarah sir jhukaye mere kadmon pe kadam rakhti chali aa rahi thi , khud ko rok na saki aur thaa kar ke mujh se takrayi

Button khol kar chalte hain…… maine us ki aankhon ki taraf ishara kia

Mujhe kia pata tum khambe ki tarah achanak raste me khade ho jaao ge

Sharmina si ho kar wo do kadam peeche hat gayi

Apni chadar ko usne mazbooti se jakad lia tha

Konsi kanjoosi ki maine??????, us ki taraf dekhte hue maine dobara pucha

Mujhe chudiyaan nahi le kar di tum ne…us ne sir utha kar darte darte meri taraf dekha aur mere mathe pe pare bal dekh kar foran jhuka lia

Hahahahaha…..be sakhta mere muh se qehqa nikla tha

Isme hansne wali kia baat hai????? Us ne spat se lehje me mujh se pucha

Ammi ne kaha to tha ke le lo?????? Phir kyun nahi li tumne??? Maine use ghoora

Tum se leni thi , tumhare paison se

Mujhe aise hi jawab ki umeed thi

Kyun…? Mere paison se hi kyun??? Ajeeb zid hai

Ye zid nahi hai….us ne aaram se kaha aur mere kareeb se guzar kar chali gyi

Main janta tha ke ye us ki zid nahi balke mohabbat hai magar mujhe us se mohabbat nahi thi aur na kabhi ho sakti thi

Darbaaron pe mannat ke diye jalane wali gaaon ki ek middle pass ladki kabhi meri mohabbat nahi ho sakti thi, samreen naam tha uska wo meri bua ki beti thi….karachi ke kisi door drraaz gaaoun me rehte the….
main bachpan me sirf ek baar wahan gya tha,, ammi abba do char saal bad kabhi chakkar laga lete the magar bua garmiyoun ki chutti me har saal apne bachoon ke sath zaroor aati then

Bachpan se hi mujhe kabhi un ke aane ki Khushi nahi hui thi kyuki un ke bachee mere khilono se khelte the, jo mujhe bilkul pasand nahi tha, mill bant kar khana mujhe pasand nahi tha , ya shayad mujhe kisi ne sikhaya hi nahi tha

Main apne maa baap ka iklouta tha….aur shayad isi lie jo kuch bhi thaa main use sirf apna samajhta tha, kisi dusre ka us par koi haq nahi tha

Samreen apne behan bhaiyoun me sab se badi aur mujhse 4 saal chotti thi, wo bachpan se hi khamosh tabiyat kit hi, koi cheez de do to le leti warna nahi, kabhi kisi cheez ke lie zidd nahi karti thi

Bachpan se hi wo mera khyal rakhne lagi thi, jab bhi aati ghar ke saare kaam karti aur khaas tor par mere kamre ko saaf rakhti, wo jab wapas jaate to ammi apne purane kapde aur kuch dusri purani cheezein un ko de deti then

Bhai aur Bhabhi ki taraf se milne wali purani cheezein bhi bua Khushi se kabool kar leti the, main bachpan me jab ek baar un ke gaaoun gya tha to samreen bahot khush hui thi , mujhe saath lie wo kheton ki taraf chali jaati aur deer tak ghumati rehti , apne cousins ko btati ke ye saim hai mere mama ka beta, bahut bade shehr me rehte hain, un ke pass gadi bhi hai

Shayad is tarah wo apne cousins ko jalana chahti thi

Phir kuch wajah se bua char paanch saal nahi aa saki then aur na hi ammi abba un se milne gaye the

Phone par baat ho jati thi jis se ye pata chal jata ke wo theek hain

Bua pure paanch saal baad aayi then un ke saath samnreen aur un ka ek beta bhi aaya tha

Hamare shehr me phupha ke rishtedar rehte the, unki beti ki shadi thi , bua unki shadi me aayi then ,shadi wale ghar jaane ki jagah wo seedha hamare ghar aayi then

Bua hamesha ki tarah sab se badi mohabbat se mili then

"masha'Allah ….mera saim to jawaan ho gya hai. Unhone mohabbat bhare andaz me kaha, samreen pe nazrein padi to palatna bhool gyi , mere wehmo guman me bhi nahi tha ke itni pyari ho jayegi wom mere zehan ke kisi goshe me to ab bhi wahi purane se kapde pehane khamosh samreen thi, kapde to ab bhi us ne aam se hi pehan rakhe the magar us ke jisam par aam nahi lag rahe the

Kuch log koi cheez pehente hain to ache lagne lagte hain , magar kuch aise bhi hote hain wo koi cheez pehan lein to wo cheez achi lagne lagti hai

Tum samreen ho….. maine us se pucha,,,, na jaane mere andaz me aisi kia baat thi ke wo sharma si gyi

Itni jaldi bhool gye tum mujhe……us ne sir jhukaa kar ajeeb se andaz me shikwa kia

Nahi bhoola to nahi tha bas zara tasdeeq kar raha tha, maine kaha to to us ke chehre par haya ke rang pheel gaye aur aankhon me chamak ubhar aayi

Chalo shukar hai…. Usne halke se kaha , main uske kareeb tha is lie sun li

Shadi me wo sirf barat wale din hi gyi thi, baki saare din us ne hamare ghar me guzare the, bua ka irada bhi abhi kuch din yahan rehne ka tha aur main achi tarah janta tha ke is irade ke peeche bhi samreen ka hath hai, us ne hi bua ko chand din rukne ka kaha tha

Ek din us ne bua se kaha ke wo darbar pe jana chahti hai …aur bua ne mujhe keh dia ke humein darbar par le chalo

Mera bilkul bhi mood nahi tha magar main bua ko inkar na kar saka

Maine gadi start ki aur unko lekar darbar par pohanch gya, bua ke kehne pe ammi bhi sath aayi then

Darbar ke andar pohanchte hi samreen ne apne joote utar die , main hansa to us ne ghoor kar meri taraf dekha , wo bachpan me bhi kayi baar yahan aa chuki thi aur jab bhi aati thi to darbar me nange paun dakhil hoti thi

Main is baat pe uska mazaq bnaya karta tha aur wo hamesha ek hi baat kehti" ye naik bazurug hain, in ehtram karna chahiye" usi waqt mere mobile pe dost ki call aa gyi

Maine wahin ruk kar call receive ki aura age jaane ki jagha wapas palat aaya

Wo log kafi deer bad wapas aaye, hum gadi me bethne hi wale the ke ek choriyan bechene wala aa gya

Saim mujhe bhi churiyan le do…ammi aur bua ko masroof dekh kar us ne dheere se mujhe kaha

Is se pehle ke main kuch kehta ammi ne samreen ko bula kar kaha ke wo bhi apne lie churiyan pasand kar le

Acha maami…samreen ne kaha aur sath hi mujh se phir se farmaish kar di

Saim tum le do na mujhe……. Us ne iltaja ki

Jaao le lo!!!! Ammi bula to rahi hain……… maine be rukhi se kaha to wo khamosh ho gayi

Ammi ne dobara use kaha to us ne ye keh kar inkar kar dia ke us ne pehle hi bahot churiyaan pehan rakhi hain, aur wo aur nahi lena chahti…… magar main janta tha ke us ne is lie inkar kia he ke churiyan main use le kar deta, aur meri annaaa(ego) ko ye gawara hi nahi tha keh us ke kehne pe main us ki ye zid ya farmaish poori karta

Kuch din baad wo wapas chali gyi…..

Is ke baad wo kayi baar aayi aur jab bhi aati apni aadat ke hisab se darbar par zaroor jaati thi

Ek baar wo pure do mahine hamare ghar rahi aur un do mahino me wo na jaane kitni baar darbar par gayi thi…….

Maine pucha tha ke wo darbaron pe kyun jaati hai?

Boli mannat ke diye jalati hun "

Mannat ke diye? Main heran hua

Kehne lagi tum nahi samajh sakte saim ye dil ke masle hain dimagh se nahi suljhein ge

Achaa? Btao to sahi kya mannat maang rakhi hai????? Mujhe tajassus hua pata to chale kia mangti hai?

Maine hamesha bas ek hi mannat mani hai aur ek hi duaa mangi hai, jo mera ishq hai wo mera naseeb ho jaye aur agar wo mera naseeb me nahi hai to bhale hi wo kisi aur ka ho jaye magar us ke siwa main kisi aur ke naseeb me na likhi jaun

Ajeeb mannat thi, ajeeb duaa thi , tumhara apna hi falsafa hai , maine hans kar tanz kia

Mujhe laga tha ke kahe gi ke man to bas tum ko mangti hun, agar wo aisa keh deti to meri anna ko zara si taskeen mil jaati , kyuki mujhe us se mohabbt to nahi thi albata meri anna ye chahti thi ke wo mere aage peche phire , mujhe kahe ke mujhe tum se ishq hai, aur main use ignore karta rahun

Ajeeb si khud garz si soch thi meri , ajeeb si khawhish thi, shayad us ke peeche us ka parha likha na hona, aur gareeb hona badi wajah thi kyuki bachpan se main use mange hue kapdon me dekhta aa raha tha aur mujhe dunya ki har cheez mayassar thi, shayad isi ehsaas bartari ki wajah se mujhe us se mohabbat to door ki baat hamdardi bhi nahi hui,

Lekin samreen ki har adaa se wazeh hota tha ke wo mujhse mohabbat karti hai, magar us ne aaj tak kabhi mujhse kaha nahi tha aur meri zidd thi ke wo mujhse kahe aur main inkar kar dun

Ek baar us ne mujh se farmaish ki ke main use JHANG me mojood HEER ke darbar par le jaun

(jhang is a city situated in Punjab, Pakistan, where the tomb of heer)

Kehne lagi maine bahot se darbar dekhe hain aur meri khwahish hai ke main ek baar heer ke darbar pe jaaun

Aakhri khwahish????? Maine hans kar kaha, kia karogi wahan ja ja, tum ne diaa hi jalana hai wahan jakar, yahin jala lo, maine saaf inkar karte hue kaha, main bhala kaise uski farmaish poori kar deta? Waise bhi mera us se aisa rishta hi nahi tha ke wo jo bhi kehti main pura kar deta, main use jatana chahta tha ke mere nazdeek us ki koi ehmiyat hi nahi hai

Aakhri samajh kar hi sahi zindgi me ek khawahish to puri kar do…… us ne apne makhsoor dheeme lehje me iltijaa kit hi

Pata hai , mujhe heer se bahot aqeedat haim ek baar us ke darbar pe diaa jalal kar us ke jaise neseeb ki mannat mangna chahti hun

Use to ishq mila hi nahi tha , maine hans kr jaise use btaya ho

Main janti hun , magar wo hamesha ke lie kisi aur ki bhi nahi hui thi, wo sirf apne ranjhe kit hi aur aaj bhi usi ke sath hai, mohabbat walon ke lie is se acha naseeb aur kia hoga?????

Tum le jaao gen a mujhe? Baat khatam karte hi us ne umeed bhari nazron se meri taraf dekha

Nahi mujhse itna safar nahi hota, maine do tok andaz me kaha aur use heran pareshan chor kar wahan se chala gya

Wo chaar 6 mahine me hamare ghar chakkar zarur lagati thi, wo jab wapas jane lagti mujhe apne ghar aane ko zarur kehti thi aur mera har baar ek hi jawab hota tha , time mila to dekhun ga…. Mere jawab se wo bujh si jaati

Ek baar bua ne abba se dabe shabdon me mere aur samreen ke rishte ki baat ki, abba ne ammi se kaha to unhone saaf inkar kar dia, abba ne mujhse pucha to maine bhi ammi ki tarafdari ki

Main janta ha ke abba apni behan ka dil rakhne ke lie kar rahe hain warna dil se wo bhi nahi chahte the ke samreen is ghar ki bahu bane

Ammi ki tarah apne ikloute bet eke lie un ke khwab bhi ek parhi likhi aur ameer khandan se rishta lane ka tha, jahan gun ki jagha dhan ko dekha jata tha, wahan samreen jaisi ladkiyoun ko kon puchta hai,

Bhale hi wo soorat aur seat me behtreen hi kyun na ho

Ammi ne mere lie apni behan , ya kahein ke meri massi ki beti kanwal pasand kar rakhi thi

Kanwal mujhe bhi pasand thi aur main janta tha kanwal bhi mujhe pasand karti haim us ne kayi baar is ka izhaar bhi kia tha

Kanwal doctor banne wali thi aur hum se bhi zyada ameer khandan se thi, kanwal me wo sab khoobiyan mojood thin jo main apni hone wali jewan sathi me chahta tha

Jaded dour ke har fashion ko apnaye wo ek modern ladki thi, lekin wo samreen jitni khoobsurat nahi thi magar kisi bhi tarah us se kam nahi lagti thi kyuke dikhane ke lie hi sahi paisa insaan ki khoobsurti ko barha deta hai

Aisa hi kuch kanwal ke mamale me tha , ammi ne massi se baat ki aur intehai dhoom dham se hmari mangni kardi gayi

Shadi kanwal ke doctor banne ke bad hona taye paye thi, mangni me bua aur samreen bhi aayi then , main samreen ke dil ka haal chehre se parh sakta tha main janta tha ke samreen mangni me sirf kanwal ko dekhne aayi hai, shayad wo dekhna chahti thi ke main jis ka naseeb bana hun aur jo mere naseeb me likhi gayi hai , wo mujhse kis lehaz se bartar hai????

Kanwal aur kuch na sahi magar education aur paise me samreen se zarur bartar thi

Samreen ne mujhe watch gift kit hi , Mubarak ho saim …… us ne hamesha ki tarah nazrein jhuka kar dheeme se kaha

Tumhare lie kanwal jaisi hi ladki honi chahiye thi, tum dono ki jodi bahut achii lag rahi hai,

Aur shayad aaj usne maan lia tha ke wo mere kabil nahi hai

Tum bhi koi apne jaisa ladka dekh kar shadi kar lo, maine use tanz se bhara mashwra dia

Usne nazrein utha kar mujhe dekha , uski aankhon me chupa shikwa bata raha tha ke us ne mera tanz mehsoos kia hai



Kuch meheene bad pata chala samreen ki mangni ho gyi hai, ye khabar sun kar zindgi me pehli baar ,mujhe ajeeb sa ehsaas hua tha, jaise mujhse meri koi cheez cheeni jaa rahi ho, main is ehsaas ko koi naam nahi de saka ,

Hamare ghar se koi bhi nahi gya tha, bua ne phone kia to ammi ne masroof hone ka bahana kr dia

Samreen ne mujhe phone kia aur kehne lagi maine apne jaisa chuna hai , mohabbat karne wala, tum mangni par to nahi aaye magar shadi par zaroor aana, ye meri khawahhish hai aur ho sake to ise aakhri khwahish samajh kar puri kar dena, iske baad main kabhi tumhare samne nahi aaun gi,

Achaa dekhun ga …… maine hamesha ki tarah apna jawab dohraya

Phir pata chala uski shadi hai. Samreen ne shadi se 10-12 din pehle mujhe phone kar ke kaha ke shadi me zaroor aana main apni zindgi me dusri baar apne ghr me tumhein dekhna chahti hun, iske baad wada karti hun kabhi aane ko nahi kahun gi aur na kabhi tumhein nazar aaun gi

Mera jaane ka koi irada nahi tha islie ye keh kar taal dia ke agar mujhe koi zaruri kaam na hua to zaroor aaun ga

Paanch din baa dabba ko call aayi ke samreen mar chuki hai……. Abba ne mujhe phone kia aur foran tyar hone ko kaha, ye sun kar main jaise sunn ho gya, meri anna chikna choor ho gyi thi, aankhon se nikalne wale ansooun ne har cheez dhundhla di thi, meri zindgi me shayad main pehli baar roya tha , samreen ko kabar me dafan karte hi mere zabt jwab de gya, kabristan me sab ke samne phoot phoot kar roya

Bua ne btaya ke wo apni shadi ke lie kapde lene gayi thi , road cross karte hue gadi se takkra gyi use hospital le jaane ka bhi time nahi mila tha

Main bua ke ghar me bechain rooh ki tarah chakrata phirta tha, main us ke ghar dusri bar aaya tha magar wo nahi thi jis ke lie aaya tha,,,

Samreen agar hoti to shayad main na aata , magar jaise hi sahi mujhe bula hi lia tha us ne.

Wapas aate hue uski chotti behan ne purani si ek copy mujhe thama di

Kehne lagi saim bhai, ye aapi ki diary hai ,agar aap parhna chahein to le jayen, maine wo le li aur ghar pohanchte hi use lekar apne kamre me chala gya

Diary kia thim school me use hone wali purani si ek copy thi jis par us ke ehsaasaat aur jazbaat likhe hue the

Pehle page par do bar 'S' likha hua tha, jiska ek hi matlab banta tha "samreen , saim"



Besakhta maine us par apne hont rakh die, us ke baad tooti phuti si urdu me sheer aur ghazlein likhi hui then, bachpan me jab main us ghar gya tha, din tareekh likh kar us ka bhi zikar tha

Likha tha" saim jitney din hamare ghar raha mujhe laga har din mere lie eid hai, maine edi ki Khushi kabhi mehsoos nahi ki thi kyuki hamare pass har eid pr wahi purane kapde hote the magr saim hamare ghar aaya to mujhe laga eid ki Khushi aisi hi hoti hogi, jaisi maine un dino me mehsoos ki hai, "

Pachtawa meri nas nass me bharne laga, maine page palta "meri khwahish thi wo hamare ghar aaya kare ,magar wo dobara kabhi nahi aaya" aage likha tha

" main us se ishq karti hun , waisa hi ishq jaisa heer ne ranjhe se kia tha, magar hum bahut ghareb hain, aur mohabbat ghareebon ke lie bani hi nahi hai, is lie maine kabhi apni mohabbat ka izhar saiim se nahi kia kyuki main janti hun, wo mujhse mohabbat nahi karta aur na hi kabhi kar sakta hai, main us ke kabil hi nahi hun, wo bahot parha likha hai, aur main middle pass hun, kuch bhi to aisa nahi jis ki wajah se wo mujhse mohabat kare siwaye meri mohabbat ke……….mujhe itna yaqeen to zarur hai keh saim se koi mujh jaisi mohabbat nahi kar sakta magar saim ko is se farq nahi parta, main uske lie darbaron pe diye jalati hun, ke wo mera ho jaye agar nahi to main kisi aur ki na ho paaun, "

Aur bhi kayi gile shikwe the jo wo kisi se nahi keh sakti thi to usne pages par utar lie , magar likhne se dukh kam to nahi hote na, wo to bantne se hote hain, magar maine bantne ki jagha hamesha use dukh hi diye the.

Parhte parhte na jaane main kitna roya tha, maine wo purani si copy apne seene se lgayi aur bilakh bilakh kr ro dia

Waqt guzarta rha , main awara gardi karta raha, shayad hi koi aisa darbar ho jahan main nahi gya aur dia na jalaya ho

Heer ke darbar pe to main kayi baar ja chuka tha aur jab bhi jata samreen ki taraf se diya zaroor jalata tha, is se mujhe koi fayda nahi tha bas main samreen ki yaad me aisa karta tha, main kisi ko paane ke lie nahi balke khud ko jalane ke lie mannat ke diye jalata tha, islie ke diye jaalaun, wo mujhe yaad aaye aur main pachtawa me jalun, aisa karna mujhe acha lagta tha , main us ke ghar bhi kayi baar gya , sirf islie ke shayad samreen mujhe maaf karde aur mere dil ki bechaini aur pachtawa kam ho jaye

Kanwal doctor ban chuki thi , ammi abba zor dete the ke shadi kar lo magar wo jab bhi shadi ki baat karte main ghar se nikal jaata aur phir kayi din tak wapas nahi aata tha , mera dil hi nahi manta tha ke main kisi aur ka naseeb ho jaun, samreen ki khwahish to puri ho gayi thi, main us ke naseeb me nahi tha magar wo bhi kisi aur ke naseeb me nahi likhi gyi

Main kisi aur ka ho kar use dukh nahi dena chahta tha

Hum insaan bhi ajeeb hain, zinda insaano ki kadar nahi karte aur un ke marne ke baad unki fikar karne lag jaate hain..

The End ​

Bahut achichi kahani ek ladki ke ektarfa pyaar ki kahani waise pyaar sonchkar nai kiya jata hai us ladki ko marne se pahle pyaar hua aur is insaan ko marne ke baad hua..Maine bhi jalaye hain chahat ki diye tere liye wali baat hui hai..bahut dard bhara hua hai story me dost aur amiri garibi ki wajah bani dusman nai to us ladki ke sath sayad aisa nai hota.. last me inna kahunga ab pachtaye ka hoi jab chidiya chug gayi khet..mast kahani bhai ji

 

[Destiny]

EK SAFAR…( AN UNFORGETTABLE JOURNEY)

Mai mayank engineering poori karne k baad delhi me room leke raha tha taaki koi sahi job lag jaaye … kayi jagah ja bhi chuka tha interview k liye par select nahi ho pa raha tha ..

Pata nahi kismat me kya likha tha .. Maine kayi company's me online resume bhi submit kar rakha tha.. Ek din mail check kiya to jaipur ki ek company se mujhe interview k liye notification aaya hua tha .. Maine us company me call karke confirm kiya .. Hiring k baare me .. Postive response mila udhar se..

Agle din subah 10 baje wahan report karna tha matlab ki aaj raat ko nikalana padega.. Fatafat apna backpack set kiya aur trains check karke shaamk time new delhi railway staion pahunch gaya .. Ticket li aur train ka wait karne laga .. Train aane me abhi kaafi time tha ..so mai thuda bahut idhar udha r tahal k timepass kar raha tha .. Fir thoda baith bhi liya ..

Train aane wali hai anounce ho raha tha.. Train bhi aa gayi kaafi mehnat mushakkat k baad jaa k train k andar ghus paaya..

Jaipur station pahunchte pahunchte mujhe raat k 3 baj chuke the..

Ab itni raat me kaha jaata kuch jaan pehchaan k ladke the par raat me unke yaha pahunchte kaisa ,, to socha hotel me sahi rahega .. Station k pass kuch dukaan thi wahan se poocha to pata chala kuch hotel hai yaha pass me hi..

Pehle waale ka to rent kaafi zyada tha 1200 rs maang raha tha ek din .. Patli gali se kat liye sunte ek do jagah aur check karne k 300 pe jaaki baat bani .. So usi me ruk liya alarm set kiya 8 baje ka aur so gaya..

Subah hote hi fatafat ready hua naashte k naam pe chai samosa mila .. Usi se kaam chalana pada.. Company me 9:30 baj tak mai entry kar chuka tha .. Formalities poori karne k baad mujhe wait karne ko bola gaya.. Aur bhi candidates the lagbhag 20 honge..

4-5 round hue jo hote normalyy hiring me aur bataya gaya ki selected candidates ko baad me call kiya jaayega..

Mai station pe aa gaya 2 baje tak…
Sochne laga ab kaha jaun delhi hi ya ghar (agra ) chalu ek do din k liye..

Ghar bhi gaye 3 mahine ho gaye the ghar jaana hi theek samjha aur ticket lene k liye counter ki taraf aa gaya yahan to kaafi bheedh thi ..ab line me lagne ki aadat thi nahi ,, aur train aane me abhi 2 ghante ka samay tha thoda bahar ho gaya ..
Wahin mujhe extra ticket counter nazar aa gaya jo ki kuch paise zyada lete hai aur ticket bhi turant mil jaata hai. 3-4 log hi mujhe wahan khade nazar aaye.. Unme ek uncle ji the 40+ k jinhone achhnera ki ticket li ye agra se thoda pehle padta us route me. El ladka tha shayad padhne likhnw wala hi lag raha tha aur ek ladki muh me pe kapda lapete thi usne bhi agra jaana tha. Mai in teeno k peeche tha to mujhe ye sab sunayi de gaya.

Mera bhi number jald hi aa gaya mujhe bhi turant hi ticket mil gayi. Mai jaise hi muda tucket lene k baad wo ladki mujhse boli aap agra jaa rahe hain..

Haan .. Kyu kya hua ..
Mujhe bhi wahin jaana hai..

Tabhi wo ladka bol pada bhaiya chalo saath me chalte hai time pass ho jaayega .. Ab akele dolne se yehi bhala maine bhi haami bhardi . Uski ladki kaafi figure kaafi achha tha par usne ek to kapda laper rakha tha aur upar se chasma chadhaa rakha tha wo bhi bada wala ti uske face k baare mujhe koi idea nahi lag paaya maine bhi ignore..

Mai aur wo ladka baatein karte karte staion k andar aa ye wo bhi hamre peeche peeche hi thi ..

Baatein karte karte maalum pada wo ladka 1st year engg ka student tha aur holiday pe ghar jaa raha tha agra . Aur wo ladki medical ki student thi wo bhi ghar jaa rahi thi agra .
Ladke k poochne pe maine bata diya ki mai to delhi me job karta hu yahan kuch kaam se aaya tha ab apne muh apni bezzati kya karta.. Kapde bhi acche pehan rakhe the to unko yakeen hogaya meri baaton pe.

Wo ladka bahut zyada hi hansh raha tha aur didi didi karke us ladki se baatein kar raha tha mazey le raha tha … mujhe to ye ladki kuch theek nahi lag rahi thi jis tarah se wo khul k baatein kar rahi thi usse aur mujse bhi baatein karne ki koshiss kar rahi thi .. Aaass paas me khade ladke bhi hame hi ghu rahe the..

Tabhi ladki boli yahan to kaafi time lagega chalo paass me hi ek park hai ghoom k aate ladke ne bhi insisit kiya to mai bhi maan gaya wo dono wahn rehte the..

Station k bahaar tempu waalun ne loot macha rakhi thi park tak 100rs maang rakhe the 10 -12 tempu se pooch paach kar li sab ka yahi haal tha tab wo ladki bolo chalo thoda aage chalte thoda baahar k fir apki baar usne baat ki tempu waale se ..

Thoda rajashthani me bholi jisse tempu waalo bhi yakeen ho gaya ye local hai inhe kaat nahi paaunga wo 50rs me maan gaya.

Mai sabse andar baitha fir wo ladka beech me aur fir sabse aakhir me wo.

Abhi tak ham ek doosre ke naam nahi jaante the aadha ghante park me ghoome thoda baahar se chaat gol gappe khaye sabne apne apne paise diye.

Ladke k naam tha arun , ladki ka deepika .. Pata nahi inhone naam bhi sabhi bataye the ya nahi maine bhi jaanbooj ka apna naam bata diya aakash.

Station laut aaye fir train aane me 15min time tha ..
Arun to bas ek backpack leke the peeth pe meri tarah par uski ladki k pass ek bag aur suitcase tha ..

Tarin aa gayi hadd se zyada bheedh thi .. Badi mushkil se mai andar ghus paaya .. Arun to dikha hi nahi bheed hi itni thi . Na wo ladki dikhi mai abhi gate k thoda hi andar jaa paaya tha to baahar khadi wo nazar aa gayi .. Wo shayad darr gayi thi bheed se isliye nahi chadhi ek baar ko maine socha bhaad me jaaye .. Lekin fir mujhe ye karna sahi nahi laga . Mai neeche utar gaya aur bola khadi kyu ho andar chalo ..

Deepika: nahi isme bahut bheed hai mujhe ni jaana… please agli train me chalein please 1 ghante me aa jayegi ..

Kuch der me train chali gayi ab bheedh thodi kam thi platform pe. Tabhi thodi der me arun bhi hamari taraf aata hua dikha .s


Pehli to mujhe ye ladki kuch gadbad lag rahi thi lekin jab park me iske papa ka phone aaya wo pooch taachh kara rahe the tab jaake laga theek hai warna mai to ise kuch aur hi samajh raha tha..

Maine poocha pehle kaise jaati akele .. Pehle dikkat nahi hoti thi?

d: nahi mai hamsha bus se jaati , par is baar ticket nahi mili to train se jaana pad raha hai..

Arun ne bataya : bhaiya agli train last train hai aaj ki ,,iske baad koi train nahi..

Mai utar to gaya tha train se par is baaare me bhool hi gaya tha maine socha bhi nahi tha iska to..

Maine bhi deepika ko bol diya dekho is baar kuch bhi ho jaaye train me chadh hi jaana abki baar.3

Train aane ka anouncement ho gaya. Achanak se bheedh fir se badh gayi wo ek dam mere shareer se chipak chipak k chal rahi thi.. Ek pal k liye bhi door nahi ho rahi thi..

Mujhe bhi maajra samajh me aa raha tha ye chherkhaani se bachne k liye kar rahi hai ye sab aatki isko mere samajh kar launde ise tang naa karein.

Maine bhi niswarth bhaaw se madad karne ki sochi aur uska suit case utha liya aur badi muskil se is baar train me chadh gaye is baar bhi arun gayab ho gaya.

Ham ghuss to gaye par par itni bheed thi gate k pass hi hame khada rehna pada patli se jagah pe.



Garmi k din the kaafi paseena aa raha tha romal se paasene pochte waqt meri kohni thodi uske boobs se lag gayi .. Usne kuch react nahi kiya ab khade khade uski haalat kharab ho rahi thi .. Ham logo ko khade rehne ki aadat thi.

Wo kaafi ghabraayi si lag rahi thi baar baar hil dul rahi thi .. Ek uncle ji thi saath me hi khade kya baat hai beta ,,

Deepika : mujhe chakkar se aa rahein hai
shayad ye garmi k kaaran tha for wo mujhse kehne lagi please mere saath agle station pe utar jaan thodi der me aayega
wo bhi jaipur me hi hai.

Me: mai nahi utaar raha ab to koi train bhi nahi aaj ki tumhe utarna ho to utar jaana saamana utarwa dunga tumhara.

Station bhi aa gaya par usne kuch react nahi chup chap khade rahi waise hi mai compartment se peeth lagaye khada tha wo mere se ek dam sat k khadi thi meri taraf muh ki beech beech me uske boobs halka sa pal bhar k liye mere seene se touch ho rahe the.. Mere ling ne bhi akadana shuru kar diya.. Tha.

Aas pass me khade log to hame boyfrend girlfrend samajh rahe the.. Train me chhed chhad to aam hoti hai itni bheed me kon kiske ungli kar de kya pata chalne waala tha, halla karke bhi koi fayda nahi ulta apni bezzati ho jaati .. Ab mujhe iska mere saath chipak k khada rehna bhi samajh aa raha tha..

Kuch der baad usne mere kandhe pe haath rakh k sahar lene lagi mai turant bola kya hua tumhe.

d: khade khade thak gayi hu..

Ek Uncle ji ne bola ye suit case hai to isi pe baith jaa wo suitcase bhi beech me hi rakha hua tha uspe uska bag tha .
Aadhe suitcase pe baith gayi meri taraf hi muh kiye ab uska muh muh mere pet k paas tha aur usne ek haath dahini jaangh poe rakh diya . Mujhe to jhatlka sa laga ek dam se .. Mai to pant me apne tambu bane bamboo tak ko adjust nahi kar paa raha tha sab k saamne upar se isne yahin haath rakhna tha..

Fir thodi der baad boli paani hai kya..

Maine pehle khud paani piya .. Bottle bag se nikal k fir use bottle thama di.. Paani ki aadhi botal wo gadak gayi fir bolne lagi isme to garam paani hai.

Maine use kuch nahi bola
Apne mann me bola meri maa ab tere liye freeze ka thanda paani kaha se laaun.

Peene peene k liye usne apne chehre se kapda hataya aur chasma bhi utaar diya.. Ab jaa ki uski shakal dekh paaya kaafi sexy chehra thadekhte hi koi lattu ho jaaye uspe.. Aur aisi ladkiyon ko akela dekhte hi manchalo ko line lag jaati hai khaas kar k train me.

Safar lamaba tha maine apne bag se kuch namkeen nikaal k khaane laga meri delha dekh usne bhi kuch biscuits nikaal k khaane lagi .. Mujhe bhi dene lagai par maine nahi liya usne kaafi koshis ki fir bhi..

Kisi station pe gaadi ruki to bheed kuch kam hui aur ek seat khali nazar aayi mai jhat se uspe baith gaya bagal, wo bhi mere peeche peeche wahi aake khadi ho gayi seat k paas 20 min khadi rehne k baad maine na jaane kyu use baithne ko bol diya par nahi maani ..kehni lagi aap baitho fir kehne lagi chalo aap thoda kone me ho jaao wo beech me aa ke baith gayi.
Chipak k baithe hone ki wajah se meri kohni uski boobs se side se lag rahi thi .. Mai apni feelings ko badi mushkil se control kar pa raha tha.. Fir thodi der baad wo fir se paani maangne lagi

Mann to kiya ki abhi iske muh me lund dedu usi se jitna mann ho peeti rehna.

Anamaane man se maine use botal dedi bacha hua saaara pani wo pee gayi. Mujhe kaafi gussa aa raha tha par maine wo sab apne chehre se zaahir nahi hone diya.

Fir wo mobile nikaal k kuch game khelne lagi uspe tabhi kisi ka msg aaya uspe ..pakka uske boyfrend ka hoga usne thoda haath se chhupa k kuch type kiya aur fir mobile andar rakh liya aur mujhse mobile maangne lagi..

Aakash please apna mobile dena mujhe ek call karni hai..
Me: tumhare pass bhi ho to hai .
d: usme balance nahi hai .. Abhi khatam ho gaya.
Anamaane mann se maine use mobile diya ..

Wo call milaane ki bajaye call log aur msg inbox dekhne lagi.. Maine jhat se uske haath se mobile chheen liya.

Ye kya kar rahi thi call karne k liye diya tha na ki taank jhaank karne ko..

Are wo hi to kar rahi thi do to sahi.
Fir maine use de diya . Abki usne ek nmbr dial kiya aur baat karne lagi .. Baaton se maalum pad raha tha apne papa se hi baatein kar rahi hai. Aur baad me usne bataya ki ksi aur se mobile maang k call kiya hai uske me balance khatam ho gaya hai.

Uski kal cut hote hi maine apne ek haath se uski wo naazuk kalai pakdi aur doosre se apna mobile pakda aur pant ki jeb me daal liya.

Jab se usne kapda hataya tha wo meri taraf dekh k smile kar rahi halke halke ,, kya ye mujhe koi signal de rahi thi..

Par iska to bf pehle se hi hai jiska saboot usne khud diya thodi der pehle tab kyu kar rahi hai ye sab.

Fir usne shareer thoda meri taraf ghuma liya uske wo soft boobs mere baaju se lag k dab rahe the wo mere pe hi gire jaa rahi thi jaise apne boobs dabwaana chah rahi thi..

Fir poochne lagi aap kaha rahte ho agra me: maine use jhootha pata bata diya .. Aur fir mere bina poocha batane lagi mai laxmi nagar me rehti hu.

Meri taraf se koi response na paate hu , usne aap apna number de dijiye ..

Mai :wo kis liye..
d: aise hi..
Mai kuch nahi bola na use number diya aisa hi saamne dekhne lagaa usse alag ..
Wo mere taraf hi gire jaaa rahi thi usle boobs ka load mere seene tak tha ab ab to hadd paar kar di thi usne .. Aur lund ki to haalat hi mat poohna itna dard ho raha tha 1 ghante se khada tha kab nikal jaaye kuch pata nahi..

1-2 jagah chhote station pe gaadi aur ruki bheed aur kam ho gayi ab zyadatar log seat pe hi baithe nazar aa rahe they.

5 min baad arun nazar ayaya hamari taraf usko aata dekh deepika thoda seedha ho gayi thoda mujhe bhi sakoon mila.

Seat to khali thi nahi , pehle to khada hi rehne ki soch raha tha fir maine kah diya suitcase pe baitha ja .. Toote to mera jaayega.. Ha ha maine mann me socha..

Usne bataya ki bheed bahut thi isliye wo doosri taraf pahunch gaya tha train aane se pehle udhar se koi chadhne wala tha nahi

Jhat se chadh bina kisi dikkat ke fir wo deepika se didi didi aur mujhse bhaiya bhaiya karke maze lene ..

Kaaafi kulhandi launda tha wo bhi jitna shareef dikh raha tha utna tha nahi .. Fir double meaning jokes sunane laga dheere dheere jo sirf ham teeno hi sun paa rahe the. Mujhe chhor k wo dono khoob hansi hans rahe the thoda control karte karte.

Deepika ne apna haath ek baar fir meri jaangh pe rakh diya ,, jab se seat pe baithe ham dono wo baar baar apna haath mere jaangh pe rakhti , kabhi sehlaati , kabhi thoda daba bhi deti fir agle pal jhat se hata bhi leti jaise kuch hua bhi nahi ho aur mai uski taraf dekhu koi reaction bhi nahi deti. Ek dam anjaaan banne ki koshis kar rahi thi wo.

Abki baar usne apne haath usne thoda zyada andar tak le gayi hansi mazak me aur daba diya , mujhe bahut tezz shock laga ek bar aur maine uska haath wahin pe daba k pakad liya aur uske kaan k paas muh le jaake dheere se bola kyu klar rahi ho ye sab ..

Chahti kya ho tum aakhir jabse tumne koi na koi naatak laga rakha hai..
Usne kuch nahi bola baaki k safar bhar .. Arun bhi chup hi raha usne bhi ungli karna band kar diya .. Train ab agra pahunchne waali thi.

Kuch der me pahunch bhi gayi ,, usne fir se meri taraf dekha abki baar uski aankhon me mujhe apne liye kuch nazar aa raha tha.

Arun ne uska saamaan utarwa diya mai chup chaaap uski taraf ek baar dekha aur jaldi jaldi station se baahar nikal aaya ..

Raat k 2 baje ghar pahuncha ..


Neend to maano koso door thi mujhse ..

Raat bhar uske baare me hi sochta raha.. Sir bhi kaafi dard kar raha tha subah 9 baje shayad meri aankh lag gayi mummy ne aake jaagaay 12 baje tab aankh khuli aur abhi sir dard k baare me fata jaa raha tha..

Usi ki yaad aa rahi thi jo sab kal hua ..


Maine wo sab bhulane ki kaafi koshis ki ..


Par 2 saal bhi baad bhi mai use bhula nahi paaya ..

Uska poora naam bhi nahi pata tha .. Kya pata wo naam bhi asli tha bhi ya nahi.. Use dhundta bhi to kaise ..

Address k naam par sirf laxmi nagar maalum ab kuch nahi so sakta ,,

Mujhe bhi usse kuch attractoin ho gaya tha , kya pata pyaar ho gaya ho .. Mai nahi jaanata us waqt to mere sochne samjhne ki shakti hai jaise chali gayi thi.


Par ab sirf uska chehra hi bacha hai yaadon me jo shayad mai kabhi na bhula paaun . Zindagi bhar..


Kabhi kabhi wo sab pal mujhe yaad aa jaate hai aur kaafi udaasi chha jaati hai .. Poora din hi bekaar ho jaata hai .


Isi ka naam zindagi ..

Kya pata fir kabhi usse milna likha ho ya kuch aur ye upar wala hi jaanta hoga

Life me journey chlta hi rahta hai. Par kabhi kabhi ek adh aisa journey karna padrta hai jo bhule se bhi bhulaye nehi jata. Mayaank ne bhi ek aisa journey kiya jo iske loye na bhulne wala marj ban gaya.

Deepika ki mansa samjh na aayi vo kyu aisa kar rahi thi kya vo mayaank ke nature ko parkhna chah rahi thi ya phir uske maan me kuch aur tha. Sahyaad deepika mayank ke mansha ko parakh rahi thi ki baki ladko ki tarah mayank bhi bhid ka phaida utha kar ched ched to na kar dega. Par mayaank me deepika ko aisa kuch nehi dikha. Tabhi mayaank ko deepika ke nazro me kuch aur dikha.

Khair bahut acha lika aur umid hai aage bhi apke likhe story padhne ko milega.

 

[Destiny]

Veerakshi ki Love Story​

Ek sadaran si love story par sawdon ka istemal bahut hi asadharn tarike se aur tol mol kar likha gaya।

Amuan love life ya to school life se suru hokar college tak jata hai। Ya phir college life se suru hokar aage tak jata hai aur kabhi kabhi dekha jata college aur school life me suru hona wala pyaar mukam tak pahuchte pahuchte dam thod deta hai.

Lekin veer aur shakshi ke saath aisa nehi hua dono ka pyaar mukam tak pahucha aur ek bandhan me bandhkar sath hai.

Shakshi ki kahi ek bat mere dil ko bha gaya vo ye ki shakshi ne veer ki personality dekh kar pyaar nehi hua balki ye dekhkar pyaar hua ki veer shakshi ki kitni care karta hai.

Galti ki bat karu to mujhe koyi galti nehi dikha bas itni dua karunga aaki ye rachna sabhi ko prbhawit kare aur top one bane.