Lustyweb's Exclusive Story Contest 2022 ➣ Reviews & Comments Thread

[Destiny]

Mannat ke Diye
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Ye kahani apne likha bahut lajab tha mannat ka diya heer-ranjha, shirin-fhrhad aur laila-majnu dinya ke ye teen jode pyaar ki rah par chala na jane kite dard aur julm sahe antim sans tak ek dusre se parem karte rahe aur deh tayag diya.

Usi tarj par aapki ye hahani jiski adhuktar shavd urdu ke the bahut hi behtrin kahani tha. Seemran ki manat rang layi uski khawaish pura hua
Maine hamesha bas ek hi mannat mani hai aur ek hi duaa mangi hai, jo mera ishq hai wo mera naseeb ho jaye aur agar wo mera naseeb me nahi hai to bhale hi wo kisi aur ka ho jaye magar us ke siwa main kisi aur ke naseeb me na likhi jaun

Seemran garib thi anpad thi par uski chata atut tha. Usne sirf aur sirf saim ko chaha saim ke alwa kisi aur ki hona hi nehi chahti thi.

Aur sain ne kiya kiya sirf rahan sahan aur tadak bhadak ko sabse jayada tarjih diya par hua kiya ant me usi ke yaad me kud ko dandit karne ke liye khud manat ka diya jalata hai.

Ant me ek bat kahuna aapka likha hua manat ka diya bahut behtrin tha apne ek ek shabd ko tol mol kar likha. Par ant me jakar is story ne mera dil tod diya vo sirf isliye simran jis heer ke darwar me jakar manat ka diya jalana chata tha us heer ke jaisa uska pyaar adhura raha gaya. Adura love story mujhe bahut taklif deta hai.

 

[rusty blade]

Story: Kon Galath kon Sahi?
Writer: Rockstar Rocky

Total word Count ~ 1450 approx.

Pehale to dost mein aap ko badhaee doonga ke aap ne bhaag liya iss contest mein… best of luck!!
Kahanee likahana koyee aasan kaam nahee he… yeh aik creative kaam he… jis ko writer apne khoon aur bhaavanaon se seench kar likhata hai…

Iss kahanee ka main plot "love" tha… wo payaar jo amar to ho gaya magar… payaase rahe Priya aur Sooraj… is amar prem ka dushman banna samaaj aur uss ka caste system…
Sooraj aur Priya ka prem bahut gehraa thaa… Chot aik ko pohanchatee thee magar dard doosare ko hata tha…
Donon ne badee samajhdaree ke saath aik doosare kaa saath nibhaya aur Sooraj ne keavl job milne ke baad hee apne Mata Pita se baat kee shaadee kee…
Yeh Sooraj kee badkismatee thee ke samaaj ka bannaya caste system jeet gaya… nafrat jeet gayee… mohabbat haar gayee…
Sooraj ko "Aashiq ya phir beta" kissi aik ko chunnana thaa… uss ne apne Mata Piat ko nirash naa karte hue apne aur Priya ke payaar kee kurbaani de dee…
Aur jab donon kaafi samay ke baad aamne saamne aa jate hein to Sooraj apne aap ko rok naheen pata aur phir se keh deta he… "Priya….ice cream mat khana varna sardi lag jaayegi.."

Bohat achaa plot… uss par jodee gayee kirdaron kee bhoomika… shabdon ka chunaav… dialogues… shandaar…
Aik achhee story… iss ka yun khatam ho jana… kuch adoora sa laga… tishnagee reh see gayee…
Jeese abhee kuch thaa… uss jazbaat ke bhanwar ka kayaa hua jo aaya Sooraj kee patni ke mann mein ya phir Priya ke Pati ne kesaa mehsoos kiya…

Writer ke andar likhne ke gunn to hein… yeh baat to solaa aane pakkee he… writer ne readers ke saath keval zulm kiya… itanee achhee ruchi ko yun aadhe mein chod dena…
Bro jahan aap ke liye payaar aur duaayen… waheen kuch ranj aur dukh bhee… "achha naheen kiya bro…"…

Aap ke bhavishy ke prayaason ke lie shubhakaamanaen...

 

[Destiny]

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Spoiler: Aisa kyun hua…

Suneel subah hote hee uthaa to uss kee nazar apne bed par padee… uss ka bed khalee thaa... uss kee zindagi ki tarah…

Uss kee patni… Disha… uss ko akela chod kar jaane kahan ghayab ho gayee thee…

Aaj 1 saal se zayadaa samay beet chukka tha… uss kee patni… uss kee jaan… uss kee zindagi… uss ki Disha ko ghayab hue…

1 saal se zayada beet gaya tha… magar aaj bhee uss ko ache se yaad tha ke uss raat… Suneel bahut utejit tha… Disha ko payaar karne ke liye… magar Disha ne bataya ke wo thakee huee he to uss ne zayada zor na dete hue so gaya… jab subah uthaa to kuch bhee ghayab naheen tha… har cheez moujood thee… ghayab thee to keval Disha…

Un kaa aik bohat payara saa shandar Villa tha… samundar ke paas… uss din jab Suneel uthaa to Disha ko naa dekha villa mein… poora ghar dekhaa… wo kaheen naheen thee… ghar ke naukar bhee kuch na jaante the… ke Disha kahan gayee…

Police report karne par ghar aayee to un ke check karne par malum hua ke ghar mein Disha ke kapde, zevar, mobile phone, aur sab cheezen moujood theen…

aur CCTV footage se pata chala ke subah ke 4 baje… Disha ghar se nikalee… uss ke haath khalee the… wo paidal ghar se nikalee… phir uss ka kuch pata na chalaa… 1 saal guzar jaane ke baad bhee police kuch bhee pata naa chalaa sake thee…

Disha… 5'.8" kad, bhara huaa badan, jism par kaheen bhee maans zaroorat se zayada na tha, har ang poore aakar ke saath…
Kaali kajraree aankhen, kitaabee chehara, khadee naak, kale lambe baal, nitamb se bhee neeche lehrate…

Jab wo saj dhaj ke khadee hotee thee to husn kaa shahkaar lagtee thee… un sab cheezon se bhee bahdkar uss kee muskurahat… aur phir har samay kuch na kuch shararat karna… kissi chotee see bachee ke tarah… 23 saal ki mahila ho kar bhee 18 saal kee tarah shokh-o-chanchal ladkee jaisee zid kartee aur apnee har baat manwa kar chodtee…

Suneel ko bahut achha lagta tha… uss ka yun apnee har baat par zid karna aur har samay kuch na kuch shararat karna…

Disha ke aane se jesse kayee tarah ke rang bikhar gaye the Suneel kee zindagi mein… aur wo saare rang jaate samay apne saath le gayee thee… Suneel ki zindagi ko be-rang kar gayee thee…

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Suneel ko aaj bhee yaad tha… 25 saal kee birthday mein keval 2 mahiney reh gaye the… Uncle Advocate Mohan jo ke uss ke svargeey Pita ke bahut achhe mitr the… Suneel se milane uss ke office "Kumar Architects" mein pohanche aur uss ko yaad dilaya ke uss ke svargeey Pita kee vaseeyat ke anusaar uss ko 25 saal tak shaadee karnee he… yadi wo shaadee naheen kare ga to 25th​ birthday ke baad turant saaree property trust ke naam transfer ho jaye gee… ab keval 2 mahine the Suneel ke paas…

Aur vaseeyat mein yeh bhee shart thee ke Suneel ko shaadee kissi anath ladkee se karnee he jo trust ke tahat chalte anath aashram mein rehatee ho…

Suneel in sab baton ke baare mein pehale se jaanta tha magar kabhee uss ne in baton ko serious naheen liya tha…

Suneel ne 22 saal ki umr mein apne Pita ke dehant ke baad "Kumar Architects" ko takeover kiya tha… wo bhee apne pita kee tarah se qualified architect tha… us ne keval 2 saal hee mein clients kee sankhya double karlee thee… aur profit mein to maano sab competitors ko peeche chod diya tha…

Suneel har 2-3 mahine mein hee girlfriend badal leta tha… kayaa zabardast zindagi chal rahee thee uss kee aur aaj Uncle Mohan uss ke shantee se bharee zindagi mein bhanvar le aaye the…

Uncle Mohan… "Suneel beta… meri baat ko ab serious lelo… ab zayada samay naheen bacha he…"

Suneel… "lekin 2 mahine uncle… itane kam samay mein yeh sab kesse ho paye ga… ladkee dhondana aur shadee… yeh sab itanee jaldi kesse ho sake ga…"

Uncle Moha… "mein jaanta thaa ke tum bhee doosare navayuvakon kee tarah se gair zimmedaar ho issi liye mein apne saath 10 photos laya hun… yeh sab ladkiyan 20 saal se badee aur 24 saal se kam umr hein… tum aik nazar in photos ko dekh lo… shayad tumhen koyee ladkee theek lage patni ke roop mein…"

Uncle Mohan ne yeh kehate hue aik envelope nikala apne brief case mein se… aur Suneel ke saamne rakh kar jaane lage… to Suneel ne kaha "Uncle rukiye… mein ne coffe ke liye keh diya he… coffee pee kar jaiye… tab tak mein ye photos dekh leta hun…"

Suneel ne envelope udaaseenata se khola aur photos dekhane laga… Coffe aagyee thee… Uncle Mohan ne coffee ka cup uthaa liya…

Suneel ne aik minute ke andar hee 9 photos dekh liye… koyee ladkee bhee uss ke dil ko naa bhayee… be mann se… magar jesse hee wo aakhiri photo par pohancha… uss kee nazren waheen jam gayeen… uss ladkee kee kaali kaali aankhon ne jesse Suneel kee ankhon ko jakad liya tha… wo kaheen kho sa gaya tha…

Uncle Mohan… "hmm lagta he koyee ladkee pasand naheen aayee…"

Uncle kee aawaz ne jesse usse jaga diya tha… uss ne turant photo ko palat kar dekha… naam tha ladkee ka Disha… umr 23 saal…

Suneel… photo ko uncle ko dikhate hue… "uncle Disha se meri meeting fix kijiye aaj shaam ko…"

Uncle ne "ok" kehata hue… saare photos daal liye envelope mein aur Disha ka photo bhee wapis maanga… to Suneel ne muskurate hue jawaab diya… "yeh photo ab mere paas rahe ga…"

Uncle… Suneel kee baat sunn kar muskura diye… "lagta he meeting ka naheen phairon ka intezaam karna hoga jaldee se…"

Suneel bhee hansne laga…

Aur phir betaabi se shaam hone ke intezaar karne laga…

Suneel aaj se pehale itnaa tayaar kabhee nahee hua thaa… phir bhee jab wo restaurant pohancha to Uncle Mohan ke saath bethi Disha jo ke saada se kapdon mein thee… binaa kissi makeup ke… uss ke saamne saare rang… pheeke lag rahe the…

Suneel… table ke kareeb pohanch kar… "hi Uncle… hello Disha…"

Disha ne apna chehara uss kee taraf ghumaa kar pranaam kiya aur phir nazar neeche karlee…

Suneel… us ke saamne chair par bethate hue… Uncle se kaha… "Uncle… pls. don't mind… mein Disha se akele mein kuch baat karna chahta hun…"

Uncle Mohan… "oh yes… why not!!!" Uncle wahan se jaane lage…

Disha ne aik dam unn kee taraf dekha… uss samay Disha kee aankhon mein ghabaraahat aur laaj ke rang the…

Suneel ne itane saare rang aik jagah ikahte kabhee naheen dekhe the… uss ne aaj janna tha ke stree saundary kaya hotee he…

Suneel ne achanak… jaate hue Uncle ko rok kar poochaa… "Uncle mein aaj hee shaadee karna chahta hun Disha se… "

Uncle uss kee baat sun kar hansne lage… "theek he… theek he… tum tayaar ho… magar Disha se to pooch lo… Disha bhee tum se shaadee karna chahtee he ya nahee…"

Suneel ko aesa laga jesse Uncle uss ko ched rahe hon… magar phir uss ko khayaal aaya ke uncle kee baat bhee theek he… ladkee kee sahamati bhee zarooree he… aur phir uss ne nivedan bharee nazron se Disha kee taraf dekha…

Disha ne aik pal ke liye Suneel kee anurodh bharee aankhon mein dekha… pehale to wo sharmayee phir muskurate hue… gardan neeche karlee…

Uncle to Disha ka jawaab samajh chuke the… phir bhee wo donon ko tang karte hue bole…

Uncle… "dekho Suneel… Disha jab tak apne munh se shadee ke liye haan na kehde tab tak tumharee shadee iss se naheen ho saktee…"

Suneel… "Disha please "haan" keh do naa…"

Disha jo ke sar neeche kiye hue… iss 6 feet lambe yuva kee aankhon mein apne liye bepanah payaar dekh chukee thee… badee koshish kee ke sar utha kar aik baar "haan" keh de… magar iss samay stree lajja uss par haavee ho chukkee thee… gala sukh chukka thaa… aur shabd the ke uss ke sukhe gale se bahar hee naheen nikal rahe the…

Udhar Suneel kee bekararee badhatee jaa rahee thee…

Uss ne bechaini aur asahajata ke chalte… table par dhare Disha ke haath apne haathon mein leliye… Disha ke munh se shabd to naa nikal sake magar uss ne itanee himmat zaroor kee ke apne hathon se Suneel ke haathon ko zor se daba diya… Uncle in do jawaan diloon kee athkeliyaan dekh rahe the… wo zor zor se hansne lage… aur kaha…

Uncle… "chalo Suneel ab jaldee se kuch meetha ho jaye… Disha ne 'haan' kardee he…"

Suneel bhee ab samajh gaya tha ke Disha raazi he shaadee ke liye… to wo bhee zor se cheekh pada… "hurray…" aur uncle ke gale lag gaya…

Aur yun 2 din mein hee shadee ho gayee… aur Disha… anath aashram se Kumar Villa mein aagayee Suneel kee patni ban kar…

Suneel suhaag raat ko jab kamre aaya to Disha kissi apsara kee tarah se phoolon kee sej par gardan jhuakye bethee huee thee…

Suneel ne bade payaar se us ke apiron mein payal pehnayee thee ke… jess eke wo chahta ho wo usse chod kar kaheen na jaye…

Suneel uss se bohat saare baten karna chhata thaa… mager wo keval muskura rahee thee… aankhen bhee naheen mila pa rahee thee… Suneel se…

Phir Suneel uss kee aankhon ko choomne laga… Disha kissi tarah kaa virodh na karte hue apne aap ko sonp diya… khud ko apne pati ke haathon mein… jo ke saari raat khojta raha…

Suneel jaan gaya tha key eh raaste naye hein… in raston par pehale kabhee koyee naheen gaya…

Phool masle jaate rahe sej ke saari raat…

Disha bhee achee navasikhua thee… wo bhee jald hee bohat saare raaz aur tareeke seekh rahee thee iss khel ke… jald hee wo poora saath dene lagee thee Suneel ka…

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Suneel ko yahee to dukh thaa jis tarah se who khaalee haath aayee thee Suneel kee zindagi mein… ussee tarah se khalee haath chalee gayee…

Wo payal tak chod gayee thee dressing table par jo suhaag raat ko Suneel ne uss ke paon mein pehnate hue bedee banayaa tha aur wo pal bhar mein un bediyon ko tod kar kaheen ghayab ho gayee thee…

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Suneel ko yaad aane laga ke aakhiri baar kab uss ne Disha ke saath haseen pal guzaare the…

Shaadee kiye hue 3 mahine ho chukke the… Disha kee zid thee ke iss shaandar Villa mein wo sara din akele bore ho jaatee he aur uss kee zid par Suneel uss ke saath shehar ke purane hisse mein aik purani haveli ko dekhne ke liye apnee bike "scout rogue" par aaye the… un tang galiyon mein car naheen jaa saktee thee…

Poore raaste Disha iak chote bache kee tarah se khush hotee rahee… aur Suneel ko tang kartee rahee… kabhee uss ko gudgudee kartee to kabhee uss kee jhangon par chutkiyan kaatatee… Suneel bhee enjoy kar raha tha…

Haveli aik avivaahit mahila… Shobha Devi… ki milkiyat thee…

Uss tang galee mein neeche shops aur oopar aik doosre se judee havelian… itanee nazdeek ke aik haveli kee balcony se doosree haveli ke balcony mein koyee bhee cheez lee ya dee ja sake… aik doosare se baat kee jaa sake…

Suneel ne kuch samay tak socha ke yahan wo kesse reh paye ga… magar phir uss ne sochaa ke yadi yeh Disha kee mansha he to wo yeh haveli khareed kar yahan zaroor rahe ga…

Suneel khud architect tha… iss liye wo ache tarah se jaanta tha ke yeh purani haveli bahut mazboot bannee huee he…

Haveli ke darwaaze par aik bell lagee huee thee… uss ko dabane se oopar se aik maid ne jhank kar dekha aur phir wo seedhiyan utar kar neeche aayee… darwaza khola haveli ka aur un ka swagat kiya…

Sedhiyaan chadate hue… Suneel to lakdiyon kee seedhion aur deewaron kee condition check karte hue oopar chadhne laga… jabke Disha ne uss thode samay mein hee uss maid ke saath dostee karlee aur hanste hue baat karte hue oopar jaane lagee…

Maid… ne donon ko aik bade se kamre laa kar bithaa diya aur chaye paani ka poochaa… Suneel ne to inkaar kardiya… magar… Disha ne aik cup chaye ke liye keh diya…

Thode samay ke baad… aik mahila jo 35 saal se zayada kee naheen dikhatee thee… unhon ne kamre mein pravesh kiya… un kee khoobsurtee mein suruchipoorn thee… aik badhiya saade badhe hue… jo un ke aakarshak badan ko graceful banna rahee thee… chehara muskurata hua… dilkash… gale mein aik keematee mala… safed motiyon kee… kul milla kar wo aik shandar mahila lag rahee thee…

Suneel ko aik pal ke liye apnee aik gf yaad agayee jo ke uss se umr mein badee thee magar bohat kaamuk thee aur kaamvasna mein kaafi anubhav thee… Suneel ne apne aap par kaaboo rakhate hue nazar neeche karlee…

Uss mahila ne kamre me andar aakar namaskaar kiya… aur kaha… "mera naam Shobha he… mein iss haveli kee malkin hoon…"

Disha to uss ko dekhate hee uth khadee huee aur uss ke paas jakar haath milaya…

Disha… "aap to bahut sundar hein… I am Disha…"

Suneel bhee Shobha Devi kaa aadar karate hue khada ho gaya…

Shobha Devi… Disha kee oar dekh kar muskura rahee thee… "aap to mujh se bhee zayada sundar hein…"

Disha yeh sun kar sharma gayee… Suneel Disha ko sharmate hue dekh kar hansne laga…

Itanee dair mein Disha ke liye chaye aagayee… wo chaye peene lagee…

Shoba Devi… "ye meri pushtainee haveli he… mein apne parents kee aik hee santaan hun… mein ne kabhee shadee naheen kee aur naa hee shadee mein interest he… mein aazad rehana chahatee hun… iss haveli ko bechana ka maksad rupya naheen he… broker aap ko meri demand bata dega aur wo final hogee…" phir Disha kee oar dekh kar bolee… "aap chaye pee len to mein aap ko pooree haveli dikhaa doon gee…"

Disha chaye peete hue badee meethee nazron se kabhee Suneel ko dekhatee kabhee Shobha Devi ko dekhatee…

Uss ke iss tarah dekhane se Suneel jo pehale hee Shobha Devi ke husn ke kaaran kuch utejit sa thaa… us kaa mann adhik bayakal hone laga…

Disha ne chaye khatam kee to Shobha Devi aur Disha uth khadee hueen… magar Suneel bethaa raha…

Disha ne Suneel ko kaha…"aap naheen dekho ge ghar…"

Suneel… "aap dekh lo… yadi aap ko pasand aagaya to khareed lenge…"

Disha aur Shobha Devi ghar dekhane chaleen gayeen… Suneel ussi kamre mein betha raha…

Uss ko laga shayad Disha koyee shararat naa karde… uss kee aankhon mein aaj phir masti aur khumaar uthane laga tha… Suneel ko Disha kee aik shararat yaad aagayee…

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Suneel aur Disha shadee ke teesare din hee hill station honeymoon ke liye nikal pade the…

mausam kharab hone ke kaaran… airline kee service naheen thee… Suneel chahta tha ke apnee car mein chalen… magar Disha ne zid kee ke air-conditioned bus se chalen ge… 8 ghante ka safar tha…

Bus seats comfortable theen… un kee seats bus ke beech mein hee theen… 2-2 seats kee 2-rows theen… Disha bethee window kee side mien…

Raat ke 8 baje… un kee bus rawana huee…

Donon ne dheele aur comfortable kapde pehane hue the… bus ka maahol bhee acha tha… sab mussafir apnee moj mastion me lage hue the… Disha ne bus ke chalte hee bolna shuroo kiya to chup hee na huee… Suneel ko uss ke meethi meethi aawaz mein shararat bharee halkee phulkee baten sunnana achha lag raha tha… wo bohat enjoy kar raha tha… aesa lagta tha ke jesse Disha thakatee hee na ho baten karte hue…

Raat ke 11 baje bus ne aik jagah stop kiya… aur passengers ko kaha gaya ke jo bhee toilet waghera ya phir chaye nashte ke liye utarna chahe to 30 minute bus khadee rahe gee…

Disha ke kehane par donon utare aur fresh ho kar chaye pee aik dhabe se… bus ke chalane se pehale hee loat aaye wapis bus mein…

Disha bohat khush thee… Suneel bhee bohat khush thaa…

Bus chal padee aik baar phir se… ab ki baar khaamoshee thee bus mein… sab log sone kee koshish karne lage…

Dish ne bhee khamoshee se aankhen band karte hue… apna sar tikaa diya Suneel ke kandhe par… Suneel ne paas rakhe shoulder bag mein se aik chaadar nikal kar apne aur Disha ke oopar daal dee… donon ke shoulders tak uss chaader mein chhup gaye the… donon ne apnee apnee seats lever push karke peeche recline karleen…

Dsiha ne bhee apna sar Suneel ke shoulder se kuch neeche karte hue uss ke seene mein daba diya… aur apna left haath rakh diya Suneel kee jhangon par…

Aaj shaadee ke baad un ke vivahit zindagi kee teesaree raat thee…

Suneel ne apna right side wala baazoo Disha ke gird karte hue apna haath uss ke stan par rakhte hue khud bhee aankhen band karke sone kee koshish karne laga… Disha ne koyee aapati na dikhayee… aankhen mundde letee rahee… Suneel ke seene par…

Suneel ko apne haath par Disha ke komal stan ka sparsh aik jadoo ka sa kaam kar gaya… uss ne anaayaas dhang se stan ko kapde ke oopar se halke halke dabana aur sehlana shuroo kardiya…

Yeh jadoo aik ke badan se doosare ke badan mein kab sthaanaantaran huaa… yeh jaane binaa hee donon anand lene lage…

Aur Disha ke haath par… jo ke Suneel kee jaangh par rakha hua tha… Suneel ka jaagta hua ling choone laga… Disha bhee Suneel ke ling ho trouser ke oopar se sehlane lagee…

Suneel ne aankhen khol kar dekha sabhee so rahe the… koyee unn kee oar naheen dekh raha tha… light bhee dim thee… Disha kee aankhen bhee band theen…

Ab bina kissi darr ke Suneel au Disha apna apna kaam karne lage… donon hee bohat dheere se aik praakrtik gati se vyast the… koyee jaldee to thee nahee… abhee 4 ghante ka safar baaki tha…

Kuch samay ke baad Suneel ko aesa laga jesse Disha kuch josh mein aagayee ho… uss ne Suneel ke trouser ko neeche khiska kar uss ko anaavrt kar diay tha… Suneel ko achha laga…

Achanak… Disha ne chaadar hataa dee… iss baar Suneel ne aankhen khol kar phir se chaadar se khud ko aur Disha ko dhakna chahaa magar Disa ne aesa karne na diya… Suneel ne bhee zid naa kee…

Disha kee gatividhiyaan mein jesse aakraamakata badhtee ja arahee thee…

Suneel ne heraan ho kar Disha kee khulee huee aankhon mein dekha to wo saamne waalee seat kee oar dekh rahee thee… wahan par aik 20-22 saal kee ladkee bethee huee Suneel aur Disha ko hee dekh rahee thee…

Suneel ne phir se apne aap ko dhakna chaha… magar Disha ne aesa karne na diya… maano… Disha ko iss khel mein maza aaraha ho… uss ladkee ka un donon ko kaamuk roop mein dekhana jesse Disha ko acha lag raha ho…

Aaj aik naya roop tha Disha ka Suneel ke saamne… jaane kyun Suneel ko bhee burra na laga… wo bhee muskura uthaa… uss ladkee kee ankhon mein bhee bechainee thee… utsaah thee…

Disha aik jangleepan se vyast thee… aur phir jab seemaen naseeb hueen to Disha ne poora saaf kiya… Suneel kee jhango ko… tissue paper se… aur iss baar khud se Disha ne chaadar odhaa dee dono ke oopar aur so gayee… jesse kuch hua hee na ho… wo ladkee ab bhee bechain nazar aarahee thee… Suneel bhee thak chukka tha… wo bhee so gaya…

Hill station pohanch kar donon pohanche online booking kiye gaye cottage par… Cottage mein 2 kamre the… aik karma un ke liye reserve tha… iss samay raat ke 4 baj rahe the… un donon kee neend pooree na huee thee… iss liye phir se so gaye… aik doosare kee banhon mein…

subah 9 baje tak sote rahe… uthane ke baad donon fresh hue… chaye nashte ke baad… Disha kee baten phir se shuroo ho gayeen…

Suneel ke liye yahee asal zindagi thee… wo Disha ke saath guzare har pal ko jee raha tha…

Cottage ke kamre se bahar nikale to dekha ke saamne waala doosara kamra abhee bhee khalee the… wahan guests chek-in naheen hue the…

Donon kamre 6-6 feet door banne hue the aik doosare se… keval khidkee kholne se hee kamre mein dekha jaa sakta tha… warna… mukamal privacy thee sab ke liye…

Suneel Disha ko saath lekar chala gaya bahar ghoomane… bohat enjoy kiya donon ne… Disha bohat khush thee… aaj pehali baar Disha ne Suneel ko "I love you" kaha…

Yeh shabd Suneel kayee ladkiyon se sunn chukka tha aur unn se keh bhee chukka tha… keval in shabdon mein sachayee pehalee baar nazar aayee thee Suneel ko… aaj pehalee baar uss ko in shabdon par vishvaas hua tha…

Shaam ko 4 baje wapis aaye to saamne waale kamre mein aik couple check-in ho chukka tha… wo bhee newly-wed the… donon pati patni khoobsurat the… aur khoob enjoy kar rahe the…

Suneel aur Disha kee mulakaat un donon se paas mein hee aik restaurant mein huee dinner table par huee… mard ka naam Suresh aur patni ka naam Nisha tha… khana khaane ke baad Disha aur Nisha to alag se beth gayeen apas mein baten karne to Suneel aur Suresh ko bhee beth gaye alag… kuch samay ke baad… Suresh ne bataya ke yahan uss ke aik purane jannane waale rehate hein uss ko un se milne janna he aur uss ne request kee Suneel aur Dish se ke yadi tab tak Nisha ko company de den to wo aabhaaree hoga…

Suneel aur Disha ko iss baat se koyee aapati na thee iss liye Suresh ke jaane ke baad wo teenon: Suneel, Disha aur Nisha un ke kamre me aagaye… kamre mein wapis aaye to Dish ne change karliya bathroom mein jaa kar aur aik sexy nighty pehan kar bahar aagayee… Nighty uss ka badan chuppane ke bajaay sab kuch dikhaa rahee thee…

Dish ne kamre mein wapis aakar… Nisha ke saamne hee… Suneel ko kiss kar liya… Suneel ko atapata laga… Nisha garden neeche karke muskurane lagee…

Aur phir se teenon apas mein idhar udhar kee baten karne lage…

Baten karte karte Disha ne apna haath rakh diya… Suneel kee jaangh par… samne bethee Nisha ke chehare par muskaan aagayee…

Suneel ko bus wala manzar yaad aagaya… aur uss ke ang phir se jaagne lage…

Disha ka haath bhee kuch shararat saa karne laga…

Nisha ke chehra surkh hone laga… wo bhee seedhe dekh rahee thee Disha ke haath ko…

Suneel kee jaane kyun himmat na huee… naa hath hatane kee naa hee kuch bolne kee… wo wesse bhee kaafi liberal mind tha…

June ke mahine mein halkee thand thee hill station par… magar iss kamre mein jazbaat kee aanch dehekne lagee thee…

Nisha se shayad bardasht na hua… wo uthee aur kaha… "mein bhee apne kamre mein jaa kar aaram kartee hun…"

Disha… "yaar tum akelee hogee apne kamre kee khidkee khulee rakhna…"

Nisha koyee jawaab diye bina apne kamre mein chalee gayee…

Nish ke jaate hee… Dish ne kamre ka darwaza lock kar diya aur khidkee khol dee… saamne kamre mein Nisha ne bhee khidkee khol dee thee apne kamre kee…

Uss ne apne kamre mein night bulb on kar diya tha… Suneel ne kamre kee light band karnee chahee to Disha ne uss rok diya…

Disha ne apnee nighty aur uss ke kapde bohat tezee se utaar diye… na kuch sochne diya na samajhe diya Suneel ko…

Aur phir khud se Suneel par chad gayee… yeh sab itna achha laga Suneel ko ke wo virodh na kar saka…

Suneel ko aesa laga jesse saamne waale kamre mein Nisha bhee change kar rahee he…

Suneel adhik utejit ho uthaa…

Suneel aur Disha jaane kab tak aik doosare mein doobate aur ubharte rahe…

Nisha saamne khidkee mein khadee sab dekhatee rahee…

Aaj raat naa Suneel haar maan raha thaa… naa hee Disha peeche hatane ko tayaar thee…

Naye rang aur naye dhang the… tevar alag the… donon ke…

Jvalanasheel maahol… aag laga raha tha… aur yeh aag doosre kamre tak bhee aanch ko pooree tarah se phaila rahee thee…

Nisha bhee jalne lagee thee…

Disha aur Suneel sab jaan chuke the… Disha jesse nimantran de rahee thee Nisha ko magar Nisha na jutta payee himmat… aik kamre se doosre kamre kee yaatra aasaan na thee uss ke liye…

Aur kehate hein naa ke har achhe kaam kaa ant hona hee hota he… iss baar Suneel ne kamre kee light to off kardee magar donon itane thak chuke the ke bina kadon ke hee aik doosre mein gumm so gaye…

aur yun hee enjoy karte poore 5 din wahan reh kar Suneel aur Disha ghar ko laut aaye…

3 mahinon ke guzarne ka Suneel ko pata hee na chala… har din aur raat aik naya saahasik laata tha donon ke liye…

aur phir Disha ke zid karne par Suneel uss ke saath yeh haveli dekhane aa pohancha thaa…

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Kaafi samay ke baad… Disha aur Shobha Devi kamre mein wapis aayeen to Suneel bhee apnee yaadon ke bhanwar se bahar nikal aaya…

Disha ke chehare par alag hee rang the… uss ka chehra khile hue gulaab kee tarah se damak raha tha… Shobha Devi bhee muskura rahee thee…

Suneel ne sochaa ke Disha ko haveli pasand aayee he… wo bhee khush ho gaya… aur uth khada hua…

Haveli se nikalne ke baad donon poore shehar mein bike par hee ghoomate rahe… hansee mazaak karte rahe… aaj wesse bhee Sunday tha… raat ko donon ne Disha ke pasandeeda restaurant par dinner kiya… dair tak ghar pohanche to… kaafi thak chukke the…

Uss ne broker ko call lagayee… haveli kee keemat jaanane ke liye… Broker ne usse bataya ke… Shobha Devi… haveli sell naheen karna chahatee…

Iss bat par Suneel heraan hua aur socha ke Disha yeh baat jaan kar dukhi ho jaye gee… magar apratyaashit roop se Disha ne keval itana hee kaha… "koyee baat naheen… ham koyee aur haveli dekh lenge…"

Suneel khush hua ke Disha ka mood kharab naheen hua… aaj uss ka dil chah raha thaa Disha ke saath kuch masti karne ka… magar Disha ne kaha ke wo thakee huee he… iss liye uss ne socha ke agle din office jana he to zara jaldee sote hein… raat 12 baje tak donon so chuke the…

Subah… 7 baje… Suneel uthaa… roz kee tarah… uss ke saath bed par Disha naheen thee… us ne socha ke shayad bathroom mein ho… wahan bhee naa thee… kitchen mein bhee naheen thee… phir poore ghar mein dekha… Disha kaheen naa thee… Cook, Chowkidaar donon ne yahee kaha ke unhon ne madam ko ghar se bahar jaate naheen dekha…

Suneel pareshan ho gaya… police mein report kiya… CCTV footage se pata chala ke subah 4 baje wo ghar se khalee haath nikalee… aur paidal hee kaheen chalee gayee… ghar se kuch bhee lekar naheen gayee…

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1 saal se oopar ho gaya tha… kaheen se bhee Disha kee koyee jankaaree naheen milli thee… aisa lagta tha ke wo apnee marzee se kaheen gayee thee… magar kyun… aisa kyun kiya uss ne… aisa kya hua… ke uss ko ghar se jana pada… bina Suneel ko bataye…

Uncle Mohan bhee pareshan hue the… Disha ke ghayab hone ka sunn kar…

Aaj phir se Sunday tha… ab 2 baj rahe the… dopehar ke…

har Sunday ko uss ke saare purane dost uss ko phone karke zindagi ko phir se jeene ka kehate the… aaj uss ne nirnay liya ke wo raat ko bahar jaye ga… doston ke saath… bar aur disco… aur purani zindagi kee taraf laute ga… aur uss ne lunch karne ke baad socha ke aik baar uss jagah jaye ga… jahan aakhiri baar uss ne Disha ko khush dekha tha…

wo 3 baje apnee bike par nikala… aur 3.30 tak un tang galion mein pohanch chukka tha… aaj kaafi bheed thee… us ne haveli se kuch door hee bike park kee…

aur abhee aage jaane ka soch hee raha tha ke… uss ko saamne se haveli kee taraf se 2 mahilaen aatee dikheen… donon aapas mein baaten karne mein vyast theen… un ka dhayaan keval aik doosre mein hee tha…

aik ko to wo turant pehchan gaya… ao Shobha Devi thee… uss roz kee tarah dilkash aur graceful… aur doosaree ladkee… young… bob-cut ball… chote chote… brown color ke… jeans aur t-shirt mein… magar jesse hee uss ke saamne se wo guzree… wo usse bhee pehchaan gaya…

wo Disha thee… uss ke baal bhale hee chote the aaj… rang bhee black kee jagah brown thaa… magar uss ke chehre par wesee hee muskurahat thee… mann moh lene waalee…

Suneel kissi butt ki tarah se wahan khada tha…

uss ke saamne 1 saal pehale ke manzar ghommane lage the…

wo haveli ke kamre mein betha hua tha aur Disha aur Shobha ke kamre mein pravesh karne se pehale donon kaa haath aik doosre ke haath mein thaa aur kadam andar kee taraf rakhte hue haath chudaate hue andar aayeen theen… uss samay Suneel ne uss baat par dhayaan naa diya tha… magar aaj wo jaan chukka thaa ke "aisa kyun hua"…

wo kyun chod gayee thee usse…

Suneel ne socha ke aage jaa kara rok le Disha ko aur apne saath jaane ka kahe… uss ne apne vicharon ka khud hee virodh karte hue socha ke yadi Disha ne divorce maang lee to kaya hoga… wo samajh gaya ke wo zabardasti naheen kar sakta…

Halanki usse dukh hua tha iss baat se ke Disha usse yun bataye binaa hee ghayab hogayee thee… magar wo aaj bhee uss se payaar karta tha… aur yahee soch raha tha ke wo jahan rahe khush rahe… yadi wo apnee marzi se laut aaye gee to wo usse sveekar kar lega… tab tak apnee zindagi apnee marzee se jiye gaa…

Wesse bhee property Suneel ke naam transfer ho chukee thee… vasseeyat ke anusaar…

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"from the repertoire of rusty blade…"​

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Rusty ji ye story ek rahasy se suru hua aur rahasy par khatm.

Padhne me maza aaya sabhi ghatnaye samjh me aayi. Diya ek chulbuli ladki thi saath hi thodi batuni aur kubsurti bemishal thi.

Par do teen ghatnao se aisa prtit hua diya ko jab sex karte huye koyi dekhe to use had se jayda maza aata hai jiske chale bas me us ladki ke samne use dikhte huye ansik sex ka maza liya.

Phir honeymoon par gayi jaha dono ko ek do anjan shaksh mile jinse pal bhar me dosti kar liya phir nisha ko dikhakr sex kiya.

Phir vo haveli wali ghatna aisa kiya hua jo haweli se aanne ke bad achanak bina pati ko bataye gayab ho gayi phir ek sal bad us haweli ke malkin ke saath mili.

Samjha nehi aya ki Sunil ko kya pata chala jisse vo diya ke pas nehi gayi.

Lagta hai shoba aur diya me koyi rista hoga ho sakta hai dono ma beti ho aur kisi contract ke taht suneel se shadi kiya hoga taki suneel 25 saal pure hone ke bad sari sampti ka malik ban jaye jab tak aisa na ho tab tak diya sueenil ki wife bankar rahega.

Story me bas yehi ek chiz samjh na aaya suspense se suru hua aur suspense par hi khatm ho gaya.

 

[Rahul]

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Spoiler: Aisa kyun hua…

Suneel subah hote hee uthaa to uss kee nazar apne bed par padee… uss ka bed khalee thaa... uss kee zindagi ki tarah…

Uss kee patni… Disha… uss ko akela chod kar jaane kahan ghayab ho gayee thee…

Aaj 1 saal se zayadaa samay beet chukka tha… uss kee patni… uss kee jaan… uss kee zindagi… uss ki Disha ko ghayab hue…

1 saal se zayada beet gaya tha… magar aaj bhee uss ko ache se yaad tha ke uss raat… Suneel bahut utejit tha… Disha ko payaar karne ke liye… magar Disha ne bataya ke wo thakee huee he to uss ne zayada zor na dete hue so gaya… jab subah uthaa to kuch bhee ghayab naheen tha… har cheez moujood thee… ghayab thee to keval Disha…

Un kaa aik bohat payara saa shandar Villa tha… samundar ke paas… uss din jab Suneel uthaa to Disha ko naa dekha villa mein… poora ghar dekhaa… wo kaheen naheen thee… ghar ke naukar bhee kuch na jaante the… ke Disha kahan gayee…

Police report karne par ghar aayee to un ke check karne par malum hua ke ghar mein Disha ke kapde, zevar, mobile phone, aur sab cheezen moujood theen…

aur CCTV footage se pata chala ke subah ke 4 baje… Disha ghar se nikalee… uss ke haath khalee the… wo paidal ghar se nikalee… phir uss ka kuch pata na chalaa… 1 saal guzar jaane ke baad bhee police kuch bhee pata naa chalaa sake thee…

Disha… 5'.8" kad, bhara huaa badan, jism par kaheen bhee maans zaroorat se zayada na tha, har ang poore aakar ke saath…
Kaali kajraree aankhen, kitaabee chehara, khadee naak, kale lambe baal, nitamb se bhee neeche lehrate…

Jab wo saj dhaj ke khadee hotee thee to husn kaa shahkaar lagtee thee… un sab cheezon se bhee bahdkar uss kee muskurahat… aur phir har samay kuch na kuch shararat karna… kissi chotee see bachee ke tarah… 23 saal ki mahila ho kar bhee 18 saal kee tarah shokh-o-chanchal ladkee jaisee zid kartee aur apnee har baat manwa kar chodtee…

Suneel ko bahut achha lagta tha… uss ka yun apnee har baat par zid karna aur har samay kuch na kuch shararat karna…

Disha ke aane se jesse kayee tarah ke rang bikhar gaye the Suneel kee zindagi mein… aur wo saare rang jaate samay apne saath le gayee thee… Suneel ki zindagi ko be-rang kar gayee thee…

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Suneel ko aaj bhee yaad tha… 25 saal kee birthday mein keval 2 mahiney reh gaye the… Uncle Advocate Mohan jo ke uss ke svargeey Pita ke bahut achhe mitr the… Suneel se milane uss ke office "Kumar Architects" mein pohanche aur uss ko yaad dilaya ke uss ke svargeey Pita kee vaseeyat ke anusaar uss ko 25 saal tak shaadee karnee he… yadi wo shaadee naheen kare ga to 25th​ birthday ke baad turant saaree property trust ke naam transfer ho jaye gee… ab keval 2 mahine the Suneel ke paas…

Aur vaseeyat mein yeh bhee shart thee ke Suneel ko shaadee kissi anath ladkee se karnee he jo trust ke tahat chalte anath aashram mein rehatee ho…

Suneel in sab baton ke baare mein pehale se jaanta tha magar kabhee uss ne in baton ko serious naheen liya tha…

Suneel ne 22 saal ki umr mein apne Pita ke dehant ke baad "Kumar Architects" ko takeover kiya tha… wo bhee apne pita kee tarah se qualified architect tha… us ne keval 2 saal hee mein clients kee sankhya double karlee thee… aur profit mein to maano sab competitors ko peeche chod diya tha…

Suneel har 2-3 mahine mein hee girlfriend badal leta tha… kayaa zabardast zindagi chal rahee thee uss kee aur aaj Uncle Mohan uss ke shantee se bharee zindagi mein bhanvar le aaye the…

Uncle Mohan… "Suneel beta… meri baat ko ab serious lelo… ab zayada samay naheen bacha he…"

Suneel… "lekin 2 mahine uncle… itane kam samay mein yeh sab kesse ho paye ga… ladkee dhondana aur shadee… yeh sab itanee jaldi kesse ho sake ga…"

Uncle Moha… "mein jaanta thaa ke tum bhee doosare navayuvakon kee tarah se gair zimmedaar ho issi liye mein apne saath 10 photos laya hun… yeh sab ladkiyan 20 saal se badee aur 24 saal se kam umr hein… tum aik nazar in photos ko dekh lo… shayad tumhen koyee ladkee theek lage patni ke roop mein…"

Uncle Mohan ne yeh kehate hue aik envelope nikala apne brief case mein se… aur Suneel ke saamne rakh kar jaane lage… to Suneel ne kaha "Uncle rukiye… mein ne coffe ke liye keh diya he… coffee pee kar jaiye… tab tak mein ye photos dekh leta hun…"

Suneel ne envelope udaaseenata se khola aur photos dekhane laga… Coffe aagyee thee… Uncle Mohan ne coffee ka cup uthaa liya…

Suneel ne aik minute ke andar hee 9 photos dekh liye… koyee ladkee bhee uss ke dil ko naa bhayee… be mann se… magar jesse hee wo aakhiri photo par pohancha… uss kee nazren waheen jam gayeen… uss ladkee kee kaali kaali aankhon ne jesse Suneel kee ankhon ko jakad liya tha… wo kaheen kho sa gaya tha…

Uncle Mohan… "hmm lagta he koyee ladkee pasand naheen aayee…"

Uncle kee aawaz ne jesse usse jaga diya tha… uss ne turant photo ko palat kar dekha… naam tha ladkee ka Disha… umr 23 saal…

Suneel… photo ko uncle ko dikhate hue… "uncle Disha se meri meeting fix kijiye aaj shaam ko…"

Uncle ne "ok" kehata hue… saare photos daal liye envelope mein aur Disha ka photo bhee wapis maanga… to Suneel ne muskurate hue jawaab diya… "yeh photo ab mere paas rahe ga…"

Uncle… Suneel kee baat sunn kar muskura diye… "lagta he meeting ka naheen phairon ka intezaam karna hoga jaldee se…"

Suneel bhee hansne laga…

Aur phir betaabi se shaam hone ke intezaar karne laga…

Suneel aaj se pehale itnaa tayaar kabhee nahee hua thaa… phir bhee jab wo restaurant pohancha to Uncle Mohan ke saath bethi Disha jo ke saada se kapdon mein thee… binaa kissi makeup ke… uss ke saamne saare rang… pheeke lag rahe the…

Suneel… table ke kareeb pohanch kar… "hi Uncle… hello Disha…"

Disha ne apna chehara uss kee taraf ghumaa kar pranaam kiya aur phir nazar neeche karlee…

Suneel… us ke saamne chair par bethate hue… Uncle se kaha… "Uncle… pls. don't mind… mein Disha se akele mein kuch baat karna chahta hun…"

Uncle Mohan… "oh yes… why not!!!" Uncle wahan se jaane lage…

Disha ne aik dam unn kee taraf dekha… uss samay Disha kee aankhon mein ghabaraahat aur laaj ke rang the…

Suneel ne itane saare rang aik jagah ikahte kabhee naheen dekhe the… uss ne aaj janna tha ke stree saundary kaya hotee he…

Suneel ne achanak… jaate hue Uncle ko rok kar poochaa… "Uncle mein aaj hee shaadee karna chahta hun Disha se… "

Uncle uss kee baat sun kar hansne lage… "theek he… theek he… tum tayaar ho… magar Disha se to pooch lo… Disha bhee tum se shaadee karna chahtee he ya nahee…"

Suneel ko aesa laga jesse Uncle uss ko ched rahe hon… magar phir uss ko khayaal aaya ke uncle kee baat bhee theek he… ladkee kee sahamati bhee zarooree he… aur phir uss ne nivedan bharee nazron se Disha kee taraf dekha…

Disha ne aik pal ke liye Suneel kee anurodh bharee aankhon mein dekha… pehale to wo sharmayee phir muskurate hue… gardan neeche karlee…

Uncle to Disha ka jawaab samajh chuke the… phir bhee wo donon ko tang karte hue bole…

Uncle… "dekho Suneel… Disha jab tak apne munh se shadee ke liye haan na kehde tab tak tumharee shadee iss se naheen ho saktee…"

Suneel… "Disha please "haan" keh do naa…"

Disha jo ke sar neeche kiye hue… iss 6 feet lambe yuva kee aankhon mein apne liye bepanah payaar dekh chukee thee… badee koshish kee ke sar utha kar aik baar "haan" keh de… magar iss samay stree lajja uss par haavee ho chukkee thee… gala sukh chukka thaa… aur shabd the ke uss ke sukhe gale se bahar hee naheen nikal rahe the…

Udhar Suneel kee bekararee badhatee jaa rahee thee…

Uss ne bechaini aur asahajata ke chalte… table par dhare Disha ke haath apne haathon mein leliye… Disha ke munh se shabd to naa nikal sake magar uss ne itanee himmat zaroor kee ke apne hathon se Suneel ke haathon ko zor se daba diya… Uncle in do jawaan diloon kee athkeliyaan dekh rahe the… wo zor zor se hansne lage… aur kaha…

Uncle… "chalo Suneel ab jaldee se kuch meetha ho jaye… Disha ne 'haan' kardee he…"

Suneel bhee ab samajh gaya tha ke Disha raazi he shaadee ke liye… to wo bhee zor se cheekh pada… "hurray…" aur uncle ke gale lag gaya…

Aur yun 2 din mein hee shadee ho gayee… aur Disha… anath aashram se Kumar Villa mein aagayee Suneel kee patni ban kar…

Suneel suhaag raat ko jab kamre aaya to Disha kissi apsara kee tarah se phoolon kee sej par gardan jhuakye bethee huee thee…

Suneel ne bade payaar se us ke apiron mein payal pehnayee thee ke… jess eke wo chahta ho wo usse chod kar kaheen na jaye…

Suneel uss se bohat saare baten karna chhata thaa… mager wo keval muskura rahee thee… aankhen bhee naheen mila pa rahee thee… Suneel se…

Phir Suneel uss kee aankhon ko choomne laga… Disha kissi tarah kaa virodh na karte hue apne aap ko sonp diya… khud ko apne pati ke haathon mein… jo ke saari raat khojta raha…

Suneel jaan gaya tha key eh raaste naye hein… in raston par pehale kabhee koyee naheen gaya…

Phool masle jaate rahe sej ke saari raat…

Disha bhee achee navasikhua thee… wo bhee jald hee bohat saare raaz aur tareeke seekh rahee thee iss khel ke… jald hee wo poora saath dene lagee thee Suneel ka…

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Suneel ko yahee to dukh thaa jis tarah se who khaalee haath aayee thee Suneel kee zindagi mein… ussee tarah se khalee haath chalee gayee…

Wo payal tak chod gayee thee dressing table par jo suhaag raat ko Suneel ne uss ke paon mein pehnate hue bedee banayaa tha aur wo pal bhar mein un bediyon ko tod kar kaheen ghayab ho gayee thee…

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Suneel ko yaad aane laga ke aakhiri baar kab uss ne Disha ke saath haseen pal guzaare the…

Shaadee kiye hue 3 mahine ho chukke the… Disha kee zid thee ke iss shaandar Villa mein wo sara din akele bore ho jaatee he aur uss kee zid par Suneel uss ke saath shehar ke purane hisse mein aik purani haveli ko dekhne ke liye apnee bike "scout rogue" par aaye the… un tang galiyon mein car naheen jaa saktee thee…

Poore raaste Disha iak chote bache kee tarah se khush hotee rahee… aur Suneel ko tang kartee rahee… kabhee uss ko gudgudee kartee to kabhee uss kee jhangon par chutkiyan kaatatee… Suneel bhee enjoy kar raha tha…

Haveli aik avivaahit mahila… Shobha Devi… ki milkiyat thee…

Uss tang galee mein neeche shops aur oopar aik doosre se judee havelian… itanee nazdeek ke aik haveli kee balcony se doosree haveli ke balcony mein koyee bhee cheez lee ya dee ja sake… aik doosare se baat kee jaa sake…

Suneel ne kuch samay tak socha ke yahan wo kesse reh paye ga… magar phir uss ne sochaa ke yadi yeh Disha kee mansha he to wo yeh haveli khareed kar yahan zaroor rahe ga…

Suneel khud architect tha… iss liye wo ache tarah se jaanta tha ke yeh purani haveli bahut mazboot bannee huee he…

Haveli ke darwaaze par aik bell lagee huee thee… uss ko dabane se oopar se aik maid ne jhank kar dekha aur phir wo seedhiyan utar kar neeche aayee… darwaza khola haveli ka aur un ka swagat kiya…

Sedhiyaan chadate hue… Suneel to lakdiyon kee seedhion aur deewaron kee condition check karte hue oopar chadhne laga… jabke Disha ne uss thode samay mein hee uss maid ke saath dostee karlee aur hanste hue baat karte hue oopar jaane lagee…

Maid… ne donon ko aik bade se kamre laa kar bithaa diya aur chaye paani ka poochaa… Suneel ne to inkaar kardiya… magar… Disha ne aik cup chaye ke liye keh diya…

Thode samay ke baad… aik mahila jo 35 saal se zayada kee naheen dikhatee thee… unhon ne kamre mein pravesh kiya… un kee khoobsurtee mein suruchipoorn thee… aik badhiya saade badhe hue… jo un ke aakarshak badan ko graceful banna rahee thee… chehara muskurata hua… dilkash… gale mein aik keematee mala… safed motiyon kee… kul milla kar wo aik shandar mahila lag rahee thee…

Suneel ko aik pal ke liye apnee aik gf yaad agayee jo ke uss se umr mein badee thee magar bohat kaamuk thee aur kaamvasna mein kaafi anubhav thee… Suneel ne apne aap par kaaboo rakhate hue nazar neeche karlee…

Uss mahila ne kamre me andar aakar namaskaar kiya… aur kaha… "mera naam Shobha he… mein iss haveli kee malkin hoon…"

Disha to uss ko dekhate hee uth khadee huee aur uss ke paas jakar haath milaya…

Disha… "aap to bahut sundar hein… I am Disha…"

Suneel bhee Shobha Devi kaa aadar karate hue khada ho gaya…

Shobha Devi… Disha kee oar dekh kar muskura rahee thee… "aap to mujh se bhee zayada sundar hein…"

Disha yeh sun kar sharma gayee… Suneel Disha ko sharmate hue dekh kar hansne laga…

Itanee dair mein Disha ke liye chaye aagayee… wo chaye peene lagee…

Shoba Devi… "ye meri pushtainee haveli he… mein apne parents kee aik hee santaan hun… mein ne kabhee shadee naheen kee aur naa hee shadee mein interest he… mein aazad rehana chahatee hun… iss haveli ko bechana ka maksad rupya naheen he… broker aap ko meri demand bata dega aur wo final hogee…" phir Disha kee oar dekh kar bolee… "aap chaye pee len to mein aap ko pooree haveli dikhaa doon gee…"

Disha chaye peete hue badee meethee nazron se kabhee Suneel ko dekhatee kabhee Shobha Devi ko dekhatee…

Uss ke iss tarah dekhane se Suneel jo pehale hee Shobha Devi ke husn ke kaaran kuch utejit sa thaa… us kaa mann adhik bayakal hone laga…

Disha ne chaye khatam kee to Shobha Devi aur Disha uth khadee hueen… magar Suneel bethaa raha…

Disha ne Suneel ko kaha…"aap naheen dekho ge ghar…"

Suneel… "aap dekh lo… yadi aap ko pasand aagaya to khareed lenge…"

Disha aur Shobha Devi ghar dekhane chaleen gayeen… Suneel ussi kamre mein betha raha…

Uss ko laga shayad Disha koyee shararat naa karde… uss kee aankhon mein aaj phir masti aur khumaar uthane laga tha… Suneel ko Disha kee aik shararat yaad aagayee…

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Suneel aur Disha shadee ke teesare din hee hill station honeymoon ke liye nikal pade the…

mausam kharab hone ke kaaran… airline kee service naheen thee… Suneel chahta tha ke apnee car mein chalen… magar Disha ne zid kee ke air-conditioned bus se chalen ge… 8 ghante ka safar tha…

Bus seats comfortable theen… un kee seats bus ke beech mein hee theen… 2-2 seats kee 2-rows theen… Disha bethee window kee side mien…

Raat ke 8 baje… un kee bus rawana huee…

Donon ne dheele aur comfortable kapde pehane hue the… bus ka maahol bhee acha tha… sab mussafir apnee moj mastion me lage hue the… Disha ne bus ke chalte hee bolna shuroo kiya to chup hee na huee… Suneel ko uss ke meethi meethi aawaz mein shararat bharee halkee phulkee baten sunnana achha lag raha tha… wo bohat enjoy kar raha tha… aesa lagta tha ke jesse Disha thakatee hee na ho baten karte hue…

Raat ke 11 baje bus ne aik jagah stop kiya… aur passengers ko kaha gaya ke jo bhee toilet waghera ya phir chaye nashte ke liye utarna chahe to 30 minute bus khadee rahe gee…

Disha ke kehane par donon utare aur fresh ho kar chaye pee aik dhabe se… bus ke chalane se pehale hee loat aaye wapis bus mein…

Disha bohat khush thee… Suneel bhee bohat khush thaa…

Bus chal padee aik baar phir se… ab ki baar khaamoshee thee bus mein… sab log sone kee koshish karne lage…

Dish ne bhee khamoshee se aankhen band karte hue… apna sar tikaa diya Suneel ke kandhe par… Suneel ne paas rakhe shoulder bag mein se aik chaadar nikal kar apne aur Disha ke oopar daal dee… donon ke shoulders tak uss chaader mein chhup gaye the… donon ne apnee apnee seats lever push karke peeche recline karleen…

Dsiha ne bhee apna sar Suneel ke shoulder se kuch neeche karte hue uss ke seene mein daba diya… aur apna left haath rakh diya Suneel kee jhangon par…

Aaj shaadee ke baad un ke vivahit zindagi kee teesaree raat thee…

Suneel ne apna right side wala baazoo Disha ke gird karte hue apna haath uss ke stan par rakhte hue khud bhee aankhen band karke sone kee koshish karne laga… Disha ne koyee aapati na dikhayee… aankhen mundde letee rahee… Suneel ke seene par…

Suneel ko apne haath par Disha ke komal stan ka sparsh aik jadoo ka sa kaam kar gaya… uss ne anaayaas dhang se stan ko kapde ke oopar se halke halke dabana aur sehlana shuroo kardiya…

Yeh jadoo aik ke badan se doosare ke badan mein kab sthaanaantaran huaa… yeh jaane binaa hee donon anand lene lage…

Aur Disha ke haath par… jo ke Suneel kee jaangh par rakha hua tha… Suneel ka jaagta hua ling choone laga… Disha bhee Suneel ke ling ho trouser ke oopar se sehlane lagee…

Suneel ne aankhen khol kar dekha sabhee so rahe the… koyee unn kee oar naheen dekh raha tha… light bhee dim thee… Disha kee aankhen bhee band theen…

Ab bina kissi darr ke Suneel au Disha apna apna kaam karne lage… donon hee bohat dheere se aik praakrtik gati se vyast the… koyee jaldee to thee nahee… abhee 4 ghante ka safar baaki tha…

Kuch samay ke baad Suneel ko aesa laga jesse Disha kuch josh mein aagayee ho… uss ne Suneel ke trouser ko neeche khiska kar uss ko anaavrt kar diay tha… Suneel ko achha laga…

Achanak… Disha ne chaadar hataa dee… iss baar Suneel ne aankhen khol kar phir se chaadar se khud ko aur Disha ko dhakna chahaa magar Disa ne aesa karne na diya… Suneel ne bhee zid naa kee…

Disha kee gatividhiyaan mein jesse aakraamakata badhtee ja arahee thee…

Suneel ne heraan ho kar Disha kee khulee huee aankhon mein dekha to wo saamne waalee seat kee oar dekh rahee thee… wahan par aik 20-22 saal kee ladkee bethee huee Suneel aur Disha ko hee dekh rahee thee…

Suneel ne phir se apne aap ko dhakna chaha… magar Disha ne aesa karne na diya… maano… Disha ko iss khel mein maza aaraha ho… uss ladkee ka un donon ko kaamuk roop mein dekhana jesse Disha ko acha lag raha ho…

Aaj aik naya roop tha Disha ka Suneel ke saamne… jaane kyun Suneel ko bhee burra na laga… wo bhee muskura uthaa… uss ladkee kee ankhon mein bhee bechainee thee… utsaah thee…

Disha aik jangleepan se vyast thee… aur phir jab seemaen naseeb hueen to Disha ne poora saaf kiya… Suneel kee jhango ko… tissue paper se… aur iss baar khud se Disha ne chaadar odhaa dee dono ke oopar aur so gayee… jesse kuch hua hee na ho… wo ladkee ab bhee bechain nazar aarahee thee… Suneel bhee thak chukka tha… wo bhee so gaya…

Hill station pohanch kar donon pohanche online booking kiye gaye cottage par… Cottage mein 2 kamre the… aik karma un ke liye reserve tha… iss samay raat ke 4 baj rahe the… un donon kee neend pooree na huee thee… iss liye phir se so gaye… aik doosare kee banhon mein…

subah 9 baje tak sote rahe… uthane ke baad donon fresh hue… chaye nashte ke baad… Disha kee baten phir se shuroo ho gayeen…

Suneel ke liye yahee asal zindagi thee… wo Disha ke saath guzare har pal ko jee raha tha…

Cottage ke kamre se bahar nikale to dekha ke saamne waala doosara kamra abhee bhee khalee the… wahan guests chek-in naheen hue the…

Donon kamre 6-6 feet door banne hue the aik doosare se… keval khidkee kholne se hee kamre mein dekha jaa sakta tha… warna… mukamal privacy thee sab ke liye…

Suneel Disha ko saath lekar chala gaya bahar ghoomane… bohat enjoy kiya donon ne… Disha bohat khush thee… aaj pehali baar Disha ne Suneel ko "I love you" kaha…

Yeh shabd Suneel kayee ladkiyon se sunn chukka tha aur unn se keh bhee chukka tha… keval in shabdon mein sachayee pehalee baar nazar aayee thee Suneel ko… aaj pehalee baar uss ko in shabdon par vishvaas hua tha…

Shaam ko 4 baje wapis aaye to saamne waale kamre mein aik couple check-in ho chukka tha… wo bhee newly-wed the… donon pati patni khoobsurat the… aur khoob enjoy kar rahe the…

Suneel aur Disha kee mulakaat un donon se paas mein hee aik restaurant mein huee dinner table par huee… mard ka naam Suresh aur patni ka naam Nisha tha… khana khaane ke baad Disha aur Nisha to alag se beth gayeen apas mein baten karne to Suneel aur Suresh ko bhee beth gaye alag… kuch samay ke baad… Suresh ne bataya ke yahan uss ke aik purane jannane waale rehate hein uss ko un se milne janna he aur uss ne request kee Suneel aur Dish se ke yadi tab tak Nisha ko company de den to wo aabhaaree hoga…

Suneel aur Disha ko iss baat se koyee aapati na thee iss liye Suresh ke jaane ke baad wo teenon: Suneel, Disha aur Nisha un ke kamre me aagaye… kamre mein wapis aaye to Dish ne change karliya bathroom mein jaa kar aur aik sexy nighty pehan kar bahar aagayee… Nighty uss ka badan chuppane ke bajaay sab kuch dikhaa rahee thee…

Dish ne kamre mein wapis aakar… Nisha ke saamne hee… Suneel ko kiss kar liya… Suneel ko atapata laga… Nisha garden neeche karke muskurane lagee…

Aur phir se teenon apas mein idhar udhar kee baten karne lage…

Baten karte karte Disha ne apna haath rakh diya… Suneel kee jaangh par… samne bethee Nisha ke chehare par muskaan aagayee…

Suneel ko bus wala manzar yaad aagaya… aur uss ke ang phir se jaagne lage…

Disha ka haath bhee kuch shararat saa karne laga…

Nisha ke chehra surkh hone laga… wo bhee seedhe dekh rahee thee Disha ke haath ko…

Suneel kee jaane kyun himmat na huee… naa hath hatane kee naa hee kuch bolne kee… wo wesse bhee kaafi liberal mind tha…

June ke mahine mein halkee thand thee hill station par… magar iss kamre mein jazbaat kee aanch dehekne lagee thee…

Nisha se shayad bardasht na hua… wo uthee aur kaha… "mein bhee apne kamre mein jaa kar aaram kartee hun…"

Disha… "yaar tum akelee hogee apne kamre kee khidkee khulee rakhna…"

Nisha koyee jawaab diye bina apne kamre mein chalee gayee…

Nish ke jaate hee… Dish ne kamre ka darwaza lock kar diya aur khidkee khol dee… saamne kamre mein Nisha ne bhee khidkee khol dee thee apne kamre kee…

Uss ne apne kamre mein night bulb on kar diya tha… Suneel ne kamre kee light band karnee chahee to Disha ne uss rok diya…

Disha ne apnee nighty aur uss ke kapde bohat tezee se utaar diye… na kuch sochne diya na samajhe diya Suneel ko…

Aur phir khud se Suneel par chad gayee… yeh sab itna achha laga Suneel ko ke wo virodh na kar saka…

Suneel ko aesa laga jesse saamne waale kamre mein Nisha bhee change kar rahee he…

Suneel adhik utejit ho uthaa…

Suneel aur Disha jaane kab tak aik doosare mein doobate aur ubharte rahe…

Nisha saamne khidkee mein khadee sab dekhatee rahee…

Aaj raat naa Suneel haar maan raha thaa… naa hee Disha peeche hatane ko tayaar thee…

Naye rang aur naye dhang the… tevar alag the… donon ke…

Jvalanasheel maahol… aag laga raha tha… aur yeh aag doosre kamre tak bhee aanch ko pooree tarah se phaila rahee thee…

Nisha bhee jalne lagee thee…

Disha aur Suneel sab jaan chuke the… Disha jesse nimantran de rahee thee Nisha ko magar Nisha na jutta payee himmat… aik kamre se doosre kamre kee yaatra aasaan na thee uss ke liye…

Aur kehate hein naa ke har achhe kaam kaa ant hona hee hota he… iss baar Suneel ne kamre kee light to off kardee magar donon itane thak chuke the ke bina kadon ke hee aik doosre mein gumm so gaye…

aur yun hee enjoy karte poore 5 din wahan reh kar Suneel aur Disha ghar ko laut aaye…

3 mahinon ke guzarne ka Suneel ko pata hee na chala… har din aur raat aik naya saahasik laata tha donon ke liye…

aur phir Disha ke zid karne par Suneel uss ke saath yeh haveli dekhane aa pohancha thaa…

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Kaafi samay ke baad… Disha aur Shobha Devi kamre mein wapis aayeen to Suneel bhee apnee yaadon ke bhanwar se bahar nikal aaya…

Disha ke chehare par alag hee rang the… uss ka chehra khile hue gulaab kee tarah se damak raha tha… Shobha Devi bhee muskura rahee thee…

Suneel ne sochaa ke Disha ko haveli pasand aayee he… wo bhee khush ho gaya… aur uth khada hua…

Haveli se nikalne ke baad donon poore shehar mein bike par hee ghoomate rahe… hansee mazaak karte rahe… aaj wesse bhee Sunday tha… raat ko donon ne Disha ke pasandeeda restaurant par dinner kiya… dair tak ghar pohanche to… kaafi thak chukke the…

Uss ne broker ko call lagayee… haveli kee keemat jaanane ke liye… Broker ne usse bataya ke… Shobha Devi… haveli sell naheen karna chahatee…

Iss bat par Suneel heraan hua aur socha ke Disha yeh baat jaan kar dukhi ho jaye gee… magar apratyaashit roop se Disha ne keval itana hee kaha… "koyee baat naheen… ham koyee aur haveli dekh lenge…"

Suneel khush hua ke Disha ka mood kharab naheen hua… aaj uss ka dil chah raha thaa Disha ke saath kuch masti karne ka… magar Disha ne kaha ke wo thakee huee he… iss liye uss ne socha ke agle din office jana he to zara jaldee sote hein… raat 12 baje tak donon so chuke the…

Subah… 7 baje… Suneel uthaa… roz kee tarah… uss ke saath bed par Disha naheen thee… us ne socha ke shayad bathroom mein ho… wahan bhee naa thee… kitchen mein bhee naheen thee… phir poore ghar mein dekha… Disha kaheen naa thee… Cook, Chowkidaar donon ne yahee kaha ke unhon ne madam ko ghar se bahar jaate naheen dekha…

Suneel pareshan ho gaya… police mein report kiya… CCTV footage se pata chala ke subah 4 baje wo ghar se khalee haath nikalee… aur paidal hee kaheen chalee gayee… ghar se kuch bhee lekar naheen gayee…

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1 saal se oopar ho gaya tha… kaheen se bhee Disha kee koyee jankaaree naheen milli thee… aisa lagta tha ke wo apnee marzee se kaheen gayee thee… magar kyun… aisa kyun kiya uss ne… aisa kya hua… ke uss ko ghar se jana pada… bina Suneel ko bataye…

Uncle Mohan bhee pareshan hue the… Disha ke ghayab hone ka sunn kar…

Aaj phir se Sunday tha… ab 2 baj rahe the… dopehar ke…

har Sunday ko uss ke saare purane dost uss ko phone karke zindagi ko phir se jeene ka kehate the… aaj uss ne nirnay liya ke wo raat ko bahar jaye ga… doston ke saath… bar aur disco… aur purani zindagi kee taraf laute ga… aur uss ne lunch karne ke baad socha ke aik baar uss jagah jaye ga… jahan aakhiri baar uss ne Disha ko khush dekha tha…

wo 3 baje apnee bike par nikala… aur 3.30 tak un tang galion mein pohanch chukka tha… aaj kaafi bheed thee… us ne haveli se kuch door hee bike park kee…

aur abhee aage jaane ka soch hee raha tha ke… uss ko saamne se haveli kee taraf se 2 mahilaen aatee dikheen… donon aapas mein baaten karne mein vyast theen… un ka dhayaan keval aik doosre mein hee tha…

aik ko to wo turant pehchan gaya… ao Shobha Devi thee… uss roz kee tarah dilkash aur graceful… aur doosaree ladkee… young… bob-cut ball… chote chote… brown color ke… jeans aur t-shirt mein… magar jesse hee uss ke saamne se wo guzree… wo usse bhee pehchaan gaya…

wo Disha thee… uss ke baal bhale hee chote the aaj… rang bhee black kee jagah brown thaa… magar uss ke chehre par wesee hee muskurahat thee… mann moh lene waalee…

Suneel kissi butt ki tarah se wahan khada tha…

uss ke saamne 1 saal pehale ke manzar ghommane lage the…

wo haveli ke kamre mein betha hua tha aur Disha aur Shobha ke kamre mein pravesh karne se pehale donon kaa haath aik doosre ke haath mein thaa aur kadam andar kee taraf rakhte hue haath chudaate hue andar aayeen theen… uss samay Suneel ne uss baat par dhayaan naa diya tha… magar aaj wo jaan chukka thaa ke "aisa kyun hua"…

wo kyun chod gayee thee usse…

Suneel ne socha ke aage jaa kara rok le Disha ko aur apne saath jaane ka kahe… uss ne apne vicharon ka khud hee virodh karte hue socha ke yadi Disha ne divorce maang lee to kaya hoga… wo samajh gaya ke wo zabardasti naheen kar sakta…

Halanki usse dukh hua tha iss baat se ke Disha usse yun bataye binaa hee ghayab hogayee thee… magar wo aaj bhee uss se payaar karta tha… aur yahee soch raha tha ke wo jahan rahe khush rahe… yadi wo apnee marzi se laut aaye gee to wo usse sveekar kar lega… tab tak apnee zindagi apnee marzee se jiye gaa…

Wesse bhee property Suneel ke naam transfer ho chukee thee… vasseeyat ke anusaar…

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"from the repertoire of rusty blade…"​

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Bahut badhiya kahani Jo dil ko chu jati hai aur last me aisa sawaal chhod jati hai jiska ans kisi tarah maine dhundha hai bahut mehnat ke baad..ek ladka hai jisko uski property shadi ke baad milni hai.. condition hai ladki anath ho aur ladki mil gayi shadi hui pyaar hua dono me fir us ladki ke liye ek Ghar lene gaye uski pasand ka aur jish ghar gaye uski malkin jadu tona wali jiske Karan uski biwi usko bina bataye usko chodkar gayi story ho gayi khatam yahi raaz hai story ka.. nice story friend

 

[Destiny]

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Story Title: Internet ki Dunia
Writer : Suman Choudhary (NK)
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Pyar, Ishk or Mohbbt… yahan jo aksar sunne ko milte hain wo yahi shabad hai na…. hmmm..? sahi kah rahi hu na… to theek hai sabhi kuch na kuch likhte hain.. batate hain… apne bare mein.. Pyar k bare mein..ya fir apne pyar k bare mein… hai na.. to jab sabhi kuch na kuch farmate hain to main pichhe kyu rahu bhyi…. Theek hai na… aaj humne b socha hai kuch kahenge aap sab se…. waise main aati rahti hu aksar yahan pe… cmmts, batein sab kuch share karti hu …. Aap hi mein se ek hu main b…… jo baat aaj main aap sab se share karna chahti hu aap sab ki tarah meri life ka ek kissa hai… aap story b kah sakte ho lakin mere liye ye sirf ek "Kissa" hai….isse badhke or kuch b nahi…

To chaliye shuru karti hu…

Baat hai Jan-5,2018 ki time subah 8:30 kareeb….. main Institute jane k liye taiyaar ho rahi thi.. (actually main us waqt apni study k sath sath as a Faculty usi institute mein job b kr rahi thi)… Didi ne thora gusse se mujhe jaise chaitawni dete huye bola… Tu us Dj se baat karni band karde.. dimag kharab kr rakkha hai usne tera.. padhai pe dhayan de..eaxm aane wale hain tere… or b 2-4 chaar suna dali didi ne mujhe…(B'coz main usey isi naam se bulati thi..Dj…nd yahan b main uska or apna full name nahi bata sakti..aap samajh sakte hain..kyu).. mera subah-2 mood kharaab ho gya.. main rone lagi.. jaise taise tayaar hui..or Insitute k liye ravana hogi.. sare raaste najane kaise khud ko sambhala.. or institute pahunchi… pahunchte hi Dj ko msg kiya.. ek tarh se Shikayat kr dali usse ki aaj tuamari wajah se najane didi ne mujhe kya kya suna dala… Dupahar tak classes attend karne ki wajah se usse baat na ho pai..or jab hui to gusse mein usne b ye bol dala k paglon se baat karne ka usey b shok ni hai…"Paagal"…. shayad sahi naam diya tha usne mujhe us waqt..

Khair .. Akhir ye Dj hai kon..? kya rishta tha mera isse ki meri didi ne aisa sab bola… yahi soch rahe ho na aap sabh….. chaliye bataye deti hu…. Dj mera FB frnd tha.. Basically main Punjab se hu .. baat hai July 2018 ki jab main or Dj Fb pe frnds bane the.. Aapko to pata hai na ye "Internet ki Dunia..Bilkul Sapno ki Dunia jaisi…" Hum j bhool jate hain ki humare saamne wala real life mein kaisa hai.. bas uske sath text k zariye badhne wale rishte ko nibhana shuru kr dete hain.. aisa hi maine b kiya.. or b frnds the mere Dj k ilawa.. lakin usne jitne mazedaar pal mujhe diye hain.. utne shayad kisi or ne na diye ho.. Khas frnd..kamli ..kamlo.. aise bol bol k najane konsa rishta bana rakha tha usne mere sath… jitni der sath mein raha kabhi mahsus hi ni hui uski Ehmiyat.. insitute mein jab time mile usse chat karna.. ghar jakar bas unhi baton or khayalon mein jeena..bas yahi kaam rah gya tha mere paas..kabhi kabaar didi se koi baat share karti to wo jyada Fb use na karne ki salaah dekar tok deti..shayad wo sahi thi apni jagah.. or iska asar didi ko dikhne b laga tha.. main khoi-khoi rahti..akele khudse batein karna or muskurana.. koi awaaz lagae to sunai na dena.. ye sab didi notice karne lagi thi… baat tab bigdi jab didi ne Fb join kr liya or Dj se baat ki..j baat Dj se unhone Chhupai k wo meri sis hain.. Dj b muh fatt tha.. wo sab bol dala jo shayad mere se b na kah pata kabhi.. kya karta miane apni image hi strict bana rakhi thi uske saamne ki wo shayad kabhi kah hi na pata..mujhe un dono k beech mein hui baton ka pata chala.. yahi baat didi ko shayad dra rahi thi ki unki chhoti bahan kahin aisi baton se behak na jaye.. unhone aisa farmaan suna dala.. Dj se baat na karne wala.. Isi wajah se us din (5Jan'18) se maine Dj se baat karni band kr di… lakin baat hi band ki.. apne khayalo ko kaise rokti.. bimari meri continue rahi.. balki badhne lagi..wahi.. gum-sum rahna.. muskurana..akele batein karna.. Agar in short j kahun k main agar muskura rahi hu to wajah wo tha..or agar kabh akele mein ro rahi hu to b…wajah wo hi tha.. tha kya wo.. na use dekha tha kabhi..or na hi suna.. bas uske or mere beech mein huye wohi "text msgs".. bas wohi sab se itna sab…. main apni us halat.. un feelings ko naam na de paai.. aajtak…. pata hai kyu.. Kyunki.. "Pyaar"..is shabd ko main bohat izzt deti hu.. maine socha bas attraction hai.. kuch din lagenge inme se bahar aane mein..fir sab ok ho jayega… "Pyaar" to bas aata hai Zindgi mein..or aane k baad sab darwaze band… uske baad jo meri haalat thi.. itna rona.. kisi ko itna yaad karna k dil mein ye soch kr muskura uthti ki "itna yaad khuda ko karti agar.. to wo b mil jata… bas jo nahi mil sakta wo hai tu……"

Yahan tak sath dene k liye shukriya dosto…. magar Abhi ye kissa adhura hai…. main pura karungi next part mein.. sath zarur dena taki main ise pura kr saku…
Dj se baat band kr dene k kuch din baad maine apna wo wala Fb id Deactivate kr dala… to ab kya tha…. Dj se kabhi bat na ho pani thi meri.. main bohat roi us din.. bohat jyada…. Aisi kisi k liye feelings mere zahan mein pahli bar aayi thin… na usse pahle or na uske baad aajtak ….kisi or k liye waisi bhawnayen ya fir tootna.. ye sabh nahi hua frnds… na-chahte huye b duyanein karne lagi… ki ek bar bas ek bar dekhna hai us insane ko jisne aisi haalat ki hai meri.. kaise b karte.. chahe khud saamne aa jaye ya fir tasvir k zariye ..bas mujhe dekhna hai usey..

Ab main kaise kahun frnds ki bhagwan humari dil se ki hui dua.. fariyaad … binti.. nahi sunte.. wo sunte hain lakin apne tarike se.. meri b suni gyi uske darbar mein… pahla id deactivate kr dene k baad.. mere kuch frnds or didi k kahne par (b'coz maine didi ko bata rakkha tha ki maine Fb id band kr diya hai to unhone kaha tha ki mujhe tere Fb chalane se prob. Ni hai.. bas in sab faltu baton se door rah..bach k rah..or kuch nahi).. maine naya id create kiya.. apne frnds jo real lyf se related the unko add kiya.. lakin wo maza ni tha ab Fb pe.. jo pahle aata tha… ab boring sa lagta tha Fb use karna.. khair.. age badhti hu.. to frnds Bhagwan g ne meri duyaein suni or Dj ka chehra la kr mere saamne rakkh diya.. Asli wala.. g haan asli wala chehra.. ab asli wale se kya mtlb..? wo b batati hu.. actually naya Fb use karne k kuch din baad hi kaise b karke mujhe ye pata chal gya ki Dj ka ek or Fb I'd hai.. aap sochoge fake wala hoga… arey na g.. wo to asli wala Nikla… hmmm.. meri hi ik student ki I'd mein wo add tha.. or uska real name se wo A/C tha.. hai na hairani ki bat.. wahan par mujhe uski pic dekhne ko mili.. means maine uska chehra dekh liya.. jo main chahti thi.. chehre ke sath sath asli chehra b dekh liya jo maine kabhi chaha hi na tha… mtlb jiski maine kabhi umeed b na ki thi… Isi liye maine kaha tha.. ki bhagwan humari duayein sunte hain…. lakin tarika uska apna hota hai.. kyi bar surprises k sath sath kuch shocks b milte hain.. hai na.. maine uska pic dekha .. or uski ye asliyat saamne aate hi ki ye uska asli profile hai n jis profile se wo mere sath juda tha wo sab FAKE tha…. mujhse raha na gya or maine usey msg kr dala.. ye likh kr ki or kitne naam hain aapke iske ilawa, jo main jaan payi hu aaj tak … msg karne ke baad main uske rply ka wait karne lagi… lakin agle din.. fir usse agle din… pura hafta guzar gya.. lakin koi reply na aya uska… mujhe laga ki shayad thora ghabra gya hoga mera msg milne par.. isi liye ignore kr diya hoga.. so maine wait karna band kr diya.. lakin aprox dedh mahine se jyada time guzr jane k baad uska reply mila.. m shocked.. ! actually Fb mein kya hota hai na frnds.. ki jo log humari frnd list ein add hain unke msgs humein sidhe hi Inbox mein milte hain.. n jo add nahi hain..unke "Other Box" me jiske bare me most of the people nahi jaante hote.. ya fir ignore kr dete hain.. shayad Dj k sath b aisa hi kuch hua,… isi liye usne der se reply diya.. to usne apne reply mein puri koshish ki mere saamne anjaan banne ki.. or meri baton ko nonsence tak bol dala.. mujhe bada gussa aya.. mene b aise hi reply diya.. meri didi ne mere inbox mein uske msgs check kr dale …

or didi boli ki tu aise batmiz bande se baat kr hi kyu rahi hai.. mujhe laga didi sahi kh rhi hai. Mene uske next msg ka reply hi nahi diya… lakin frnds kuch batein khatam hone ka naam hi nahi leti.. us baat k baad Dj ne apni fake asli wali I'd se na jane kitni bar ujhe Addfrnd ki req. bheji… maine to ye baat pahli I'd band karne k baad hi thaan li thi k ab usse dubara frnd ni banaungi kabhi b.. usi ki wajah se te pahli wali I'd chhori thi.. to maine har bar uski req. refused kr d.. n frnds pure dedh sal baad means may-june'2018 mein usne firse msg karna shuru kr diya j bol k ki o wahi jo main sochti hu.. is bar to mere gusse ne haden par kr d… maine gusse mein bahut kuch bola usey… lakin frnds usne j samjhne ki wajaye ki mere gusse ki wjah kya hai..ulta mere baton ka reply khud b betuke lahze me deta.. ab mujhe uske asli character se nafrat hone lagi.. lakin Dj se nafrat na kr payi.. akhir karti b kaise.. meri bhaawnaye uske usi fake roop se hi to judi hui thi.. mere liye to us wqt wohi asli tha.. maine firse usse baat karna band kr diya.. jan 2019 se usne firse mujhe msg kiya.. mera behave firse wahi.. gusse k sath.. j sab june 2019 tak chala.. lagataar nahi.. bas kabhi kabaar jab b usk msg aata.. june-2019 k baad uski or se last msg aaya ..mene koi reply ni diya.. aajtak… waise 2018 k chalte-chalte main Dj ke sath apni feelings ko b bhulane lagi thi.. or aaj main yah kah sakti hu ki main un feelings ko apne aap se bahut door kr chuki hu… shayad iski wajah uska asli roop jo usne muje aaj tak dikhaya hai.. wohi raha hoga.. wo kya hai na frnds bhawnayein ek Paude (Plant) ki tarah hoti hain.. jinhe Pyar ka pani milta rahe to zinda warna.. sukha Pauda kis kaam ka.. hai na… maine jo Dj se sunna chaha wo to usne shayad kabhi samjha b na hoga.. or jo wo bolta gya.. usne meri sari feelings ko dafan kr diya … to main kya sunna chahti thi usse…? aap sochoge shayad yahi ki wo mujhse waisi hi feelings ka izhaar karta jaisi maine paal rakkhi thi uske liya…. Hmmmm kuchh had tak sahi hai ye baat.. lakin puri tarah se nahi.. kyunki agar wo aisa sab bol deta to shayad main inkaar kr deti.. par maine jo usse umeed laga rakkhi thi wo ye thi ki jab mere saamne uska asli chehra saamne aa hi chukka tha tab usne jhooth kyu bola.. n maanne se inkaar kyu kiya.. agar inkaar kr hi chukka tha.. to fir itna time guzr jane k bad kabool kr kya sabit karna chahta tha…

Kyi baar sochti hu meri ye story adhuri hai.. shayad is liye ki mere or Dj k beech mein jo ye Feelings wala rishta tha ..usey hum dono hi ek dusre k sath baant hi na sake… na usne koshish ki jaanne ki or na maine himmt ki usey batane ki…maine himmt is liye na ki b'coz mujhe itni baat to samjh mein aa chuki thi ki ye banda iske layak hai hi nahi k iske liye apne valuable imotions n feelings barbaad ki jayein.. to maine un feelings ko apne tak seemat rakhna hi uchit samjha… aaj jab Dj ki asliyat k bare mein sochti hu to apne aap par sharminda b hoti hu ki sochti hu ki agar didi us waqt mujhe na rokti to … lakin aisa hua nahi… Bhagwaan ne mujhe bahut hi pyara gift diya hai mujhe meri didi k roop mein… maine aisa krke kitna sahi kiya or kitna galat.. batana zarur frnds…

Internet k sath to aaj b main judi hui hu.. shayad aane wale samay mein b judi rahu … bahut sare logon se milna hua hai iske zariye.. bahut sare dost mile hain isi Iternet ki wajah se.. to main ise galat nahi kahungi… or ek baat main aap sabko kahna chahungi ki Payaar ki Jagah nahi Pyaar ki Wajah dekho.. mtlb ye ki Pyaar kis jagah pe hua hai internet pe ya fir real lyf mein ye mat dekho.. Pyaar hone ki jo wajah hai bas usey dekhiye.. baki aaapke suggesions n batein dono hi Keemti hain mere liye..

Aap sabka Shukriya apna keemti waqt dene k liye..

Iss story ka men motiv tha feelings.

Banda koyi bhi ho use ham kisi bhi maddhym se jude ho real ya virtual ek feeling ke taht ham usse judkar rahte hai jab vo feeling kisi wajah se tut jaye to vo banda hamare najro me gir jata hai. Isliye kisi se koyi bhi rista rakho feelings ko tutne na do.

Bahut acha likha ummid karta hoon aage bhi aapke jariy likhi aisi story read karne ka mauka milega.

 

[rusty blade]

Story: Veerakshi ki Love Story
Writer: Aakesh.

Total word Count ~ 2900 approx.

Pehale to dost mein aap ko badhaee doonga ke aap ne bhaag liya iss contest mein… best of luck!!
Kahanee likahana koyee aasan kaam nahee he… yeh aik creative kaam he… jis ko writer apne khoon aur bhaavanaon se seench kar likhata hai…

kahanee ka theme "love" tha… Veer aur Sakshi kee love story… donon ko apnaa payaar mil gya… yeh sab se achhee baat huee… jaane kyun do chahane walon kee mohabbat ko nakaam hote dekh kar dil dukhee ho jata he sab readers kaa…
aik freshnees thee story mein… phoolon jesee taazagee… shayad iss ka kaaran college kaa maahol… jahan ummeded hoten hein… rang hote hein… dil mil jayen aik doosare se to phir saath saath hee dhadakte hein… jese Veer aur Sakshi ke saath hua… donon kee dostee… aur phir payaar… mere khayaal se to donon ne intezaar kiya lamba… magar ye bhee theek thaa… pehal to ladke ki hee karnee thee… aur hamara hero Veer ko samay laga himmat juttane mein… 20th​ November tak ka wait kiya… aur phir achhe dhang se Sakshi ko apne dil ka haal sunaya… Veer tha to nervous… janta hee kahan tha ke Sakshi ke dil kee dhadakanen bhee uss kee hee tarah se badhee hueen hein…
aik aanch thee jo dehek rahee thee donon ke beech aur phir jesse iak jawaala kee tarah se Veer ko hosh aahee gaya… aur uss ne himmat karke bata hee diya Sakshi ko… jis tarah se Lekhak ne ye iss ka varnan kiya wo adhbut tha… darte… jhijhakte… Veer ne Sakshi ko bataya apnee feelings ke baare emin aur phir Sakshi bhee kam na thee… khud khamosh reh kar aur phir yeh keh kar ke ab wo dost nahee rahe… aik suspense sa create kardiya… aur phir khud hee bade romaanchak andaaz mein uss ke paas aate hue na keval ikraar kiya balke yeh bhee kaha ke gale nahee lagaoge… "kitna cute thaa naa yeh sab…"

Writer ke andar aik achhee kahanee likhane ke saare keede moujood hein… ham umeed karte hein ke hamein jald hee aik aur achhee story padhahne ko mile gee apne payare lekhak kee taraf se…

Aap ke bhavishy ke prayaason ke lie shubhakaamanaen...

 

[Riya]

एक प्यारा सा वादा by DREAMBOY40

Ek pyar ki jeet ki dastan jo thodi alag lagi, magar asal zindagi mein bhi eisa hota hai ye baat mai maanti hu. mujhko kahani behad passand aayi.
Is kahani me kahi kahi par istemal ki gai baate mujhe bahut ache lagi .... Misaal ke taur par chand shabdo ko quote karti hu kahani se jo bakhubi istemal ki gayi hai. Jese
प्रकाश - देखो जानू ,,ये बहुत ही गम्भिर मसला है इसके लिए तुमको दिल और भावनतम्क रूप से बहुत ही मजबूत बनना पडेगा । हो सकता है जब तुम ये बात घर मे बताओ तो वो लोग पहले तुम्हे एमोशनली बहलाए और फिर मारे पीटे भी ।


प्रकाश - तुम वादा करो कि किसी भी दशा मे हमारे प्यार को झुकने नही दोगी । मै मानता हू ये आसान नही है मगर बिना इसके अलावा हमारा कोई भविष्य नही है । हो सकता है इसके बाद हमारी कोई बात नही हो ,वो तुमको कसम देके या जबरदस्ती मुझसे बाते करने के लिए रोके । मगर मेरा वादा है अब से एक महीने मे मै तुम्हारे यहा जरुर आऊंगा ।


सुधा सुबकते हुए - तुम चिंता ना करो बाबू , मै मैनेज कर लूंगी । तुम अपना ख्याल रखना बस । तुम्हारा प्यार मुझे हारने नही देगा ।
Prakas ne jo kaha sach kar dikhaya.
isske ilawa kahani in general satisfactory hai, lekhak ki effort nazar arahe hei.
kahani me ma baap ki gayi ek galti ki wajah sudha ke pita kamchor ban gaye aur magrur bhi. lekin kamla bhi unke tarah kyu ban gayi. sayad sangat ka asar ho. apni beti sudha ke pyar ki kahani sun dono jaise sudha apni dusman hi maan baithe. uske par julm bhi dhane lage. prakas jab unlogo ko manane aya toh sudha ke magrur pita ne jaat paat ko leke kitna kuch nahi sunaya. lekin sache pyar ke takat ke bare me abhi tak sudha ke mom dad anbhigya the, jab rubaru huye to ghutne tek diye.
jhuthi sawbhiman , jaat paat aur ant me pyar ki jeet ke base par likhi gai yeh kahani jaha insaan do premi ko ek hone nahi dete sirf is liye dono ke jaat same nahi the.par ant me pyar ki jeet hoti hai.
suru se end tak kahani ki treatment sahi dhang se kiya gaya hai aur mujhe passand aayi.
lekhak ne apni puri zor daal kar likha hai wo baat dikhti hai. love stories me kayi bar eise muskile ati haii do premi ke ek hone se pehle.lekin is kahani me topic kafi alag thi aur emotional bhi.
nice little love story with happy end.

 

[Rapchik Rishi]

Kahani एक प्यारा सा वादा
lekhak - DREAMBOY40

kayi bar aisa hota hai, Insaan ko muft me ya asani kuch mil jaye to uska mulya nahi samajhte hai insaan.. non erotica prefix based ye kahani isi baat ko darshata hai.muft me mile jameen zaydaad ke kaaran sudha ke pita ki soch badal gayi thi. Wo kuch jyada hi ghamandi ho gaye the.apne ego aur khokhli maan maryaada ke chalte sudha ke papa apni beti ki sachi mohabbat ko samaajh nahi paye.. sudha ke baap ke sath rehte rehte sudha ki ma bhi unhi ki tarah ho gayi thi. apni hi sagi beti aisi badasluki karti hai kya. lekin prakas ne bhi sudha se sachi mohabbat ki hai aur wada bhi kiya tha. aur us wada ko nibhaya bhi. na kewal soch badle balki dono ki sachi mohabbat ka ahsaas bhi ho gaya kamla aur uske pati ko. wese agar sudha behosh nahi hoti , wo dekh kamla agar khadi khoti nahi sunati sudha ke dad ko to sayad un dono ki soch badalne me aur waqt lagta.
dreamboy bhai apki story bahut hi achi thi aur ek achche plot par banai gayi thi,aapki mehnat ke liye aapko badhai…

 

[Avni]

DREAMBOY40
एक प्यारा सा वादा.

romantic aur family drama hamesha se hi kayi writers ki favourite theme rhi hai , thi hai,.ispar aapko dhero sari stories aur movies padne dekhne ko mil jaayegi ,weise meri favorite theme thriller hai. Par mujhe romantic theme stories bhi padhna behad pasand hai .
sirf ek anchahi ghatana aur ek bhool puri life change kar sakti hai. sudha ke dada dadi ne bhool ki isliye uske pita ek nikkama arrogant admi ban gaya. usko dekha dekhi uski family ke sadsya bhi waise hi ban gaye. iske parinaam yeh hua k target bani sudha. kyonki usne ek alag biradari ke ladke se sacha pyar kiya. lekin ek ghatana ne phir se insab ki life aur man ki dhaarna ko sahi jagah par laa khada kar diya. prakash ka binamra vyavahar, uski sahan shakti aur sudha ka achanak behosh ho jana aur dono ki sache pyar ne sabhi ke mind change kar diya. sabse achi baat ye hui ki sudha aur prakas ki shadi ke haan keh di sabhi ne. sabhi pata chal gaya ke prakas se acha lakda nahi milega sudha ke liye.
Kahani behad achi thi. aur mujhe ummid hai ki aapki aur bhi achchi story hame bhawisy me padhne ko milegi.

 

[Avni]

TheBlackBlood
Dark Matter

Plot bahutt badhiya tha. Suruaat me jiss tarah se do dosto ki kahani ko varnaan kiya gaya, aur us mysterious ladki ke bare me dikhaya gaya , us samaye umid thi ki aague chal kar prashant dono ko milake hi rahega...par me galt thi .
mere khayaal se har ek paathak kahani ke pehle hisse ko padhte waqt yehi dua kar rahe honge ke dono ek ho jaye. lekin apne to pure plot ko hi palat diya . thrill aur horror ka ek alag combination leke aye kahani me. kahani ka rukh badla par the black blood sir ka pakad bahot hi mazbut raha iss kahani par. wo ladki koi insan thi hi nahi. sayad koi bhatakti atma thi jo nitin ke sath prasant ko bhi apne jaal me fasane ki kosis ki. wo to bhala ho us bhikhari baba ka jinhone un logo wo tabij deke suraksha ka intejam kar diya tha. prashant sirf isliye bach paya kyuki uska dar aur samajhdari ne uska sath diya . par nitin ne to jaise deewangi ki hade par kar di thi. itna samjhaya prashant ne par uske dimag me to jaise us ladki ka bhut savar tha.uske deewangi aur pagal pan ka faida uthake us atma ne uski ruh ko hi chin ke le gayi. Us ladki ke liye deewana hone pehle ek bar apne budhe ma baap ke bare soch leta. rahat ki baat ye hai ki prashant ne nitin ke ma baap ki jimmedari apne kandho pe le liya

shabd ko, varnaan ko, har ek character ko itni sanjidgi se liya gaya hai ke ek chhoti si bhi kami nahi dikhayi di. kahani ke us ladki ki mystery , thrill, horror ke part ko lekhak ne bakhubi present kiya hai. magar ek afsos hai. kas us ladki sachai saamne a jati to behtar hota asal me wo thi kya . insaan ya koi atma.
ending shocking aur tragic ho gaya
Kudrat me sayad aesi kayi cheeje chupi rehti hai jisse muthbhed ho gya tha dono dosto ka. Jisne nitin ka shikar kiya.
This is just an amazing and fantastic story. The descriptive narration is just fabulous and the story deserves a high rank in the competition.