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Thori deer ke lie jaise main apne dar ko bhool kar is dilkash chehre me apna sakoon talash karne laga tha.

Us ki kamar ke gird narmi se bazoo haa'il kar ke maine use apne qareeb kia tha , us ke wajood ki narmahat aaj bhi mere andar waisa hi sakoon utar rahi thi jaise hamesha se tha .

Maine use apne seene me sameeta tha, aur bazuoun ki grift mazboot kar li thi, main us se bahot mohabbat karta tha.

Dheere se us ke hath tham kar chehre se hata kar syed par kia , hamare beech se hawa ka guzar rok dia tha , jazab ke aalam me use seene se lagaye aankhein band kar li thien dheere se us ke garadan ke dayen taraf lab rakhe the aur meri naak us ki gardan ko choo rahi thi m main sab kuch bholne ki koshish me laga tha ,

Mere dil me har lamha kuch bura ho jane ke khayalat janam le rahe the , kitne hi lamhe main ek sehme hue bachee ki tarah us ke sath chipka raha tha..

Sasha mujh se alehda hui aur muskura di ,dil ko kuch dharas bandhi thi.

Wo muskura kar ek bar phir meri naak se riste khoon ke qatree saaf karne lagi
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Kam se kam us bhootni ko to baks deta ahmad...
upar aisi situation pe bhi apni harkaton se baaz nahi aata...
Kambakht prem chopra ban gaya :D
 
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Wo salah din baba tha jo serhiyoun par na jane achanak kahan se ludhakta hua aakar ahmad ke peeron se takraya tha.
lagta hai bhootni football khelna chahti hai :football3: ..Ab waha koi football na isliye us chaukidaar ko hi football bana ke ahmad taraf laath maarke ludka di hai taaki ahmad goal kar sake :roflol:
 
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Update 04
Dar aur khauf ke shadows se bhara yeh update… jis mein aik taraf to accident waalee jagah par jungle mein huee ghatanaaon ko shandar tareeke se likha… doosre lashon ke wahan hone se vaataavaran adhik daraane waala ho gya…
Lekhak ne bohat hee vivekapoorvak aur visheshagy roop se bhaavana srjan kiya lashon ke hone ka… un ke bolne ka… Ahmad aur Shayan kee pratikriya … yeh sab bilkul vaastavik laga…
Sasha kee pareshanee bhee padh rahee he… ab to watchman bhee shaamil ho gaya he… uss ka kaya pratikriya hotee he…
Chat pe ho rahe ghatanaa se Ahmad ke kahuf aavardhak ho raha he… who har aik ko sandeh kee nazar se dekh raha he…
Ahmad ke liye yeh jaan kar ke bathroom mein uss ke saath aatma thee… uss kee patni ki jagah… yeh bhee kaafi bhayanak saabit hua…
Shayan ka camera lagane ka sujhaav bahut ajeeb he…
Dekhte hein aage kaya hone waala he…
Lekhak ne kamal kar diay he… shandar plot… events ka flow bhee shandar… words… expressions… sab kuch kamal ka he… aik lagatar khauf ka maahol juda hua he kahanee ke saath…
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Update 5

Update ki suruwaat huyi us bhootni ke football khelne se... bas fark itna tha ki football ki jagah wo chaukidaar football bana...
Wo chaukidaar kya ludak kar ahmad takraya aham sidha shidhiyo pe jaa gira... Btw ye to First update se hi girta hi aa raha hai.... ismein kounsi badi baat hai...
ooo to wo luka chupi wala khel chhod ab wo dono ruh saamne se aake dara rahi hai sabko ...
Bich bich mein sasha jis tarah se bhayanak aawaaz mein ahmad ko bachane ki baat puchti hai isse to yahi lage ki ahmad ko darane ke liye bich bich mein sasha ke sarir pe bhi kabza kar leti hai wo ruh .
Udhar wo chaukidaar bhi bhag gaya ye hidayat deke ki ahmad aur uski family bhi us ghar ko chhod ke chale jaaye... Lekin ahmad kahi bhi jaaye wo dono ruh uske piche piche aayegi..
mamle ki gambhirta ko dekh ahmad ne sasha aur hamna ko mama ke ghar chhod shayan se milne chala gaya. ..
Lekin yahi pe wo galti kar baitha... Kyunki uska saamanya kisi insaan se nahi balki so taakatwar ruh se thi...
wo akele ya shayan ke sath kar bhi kya leta agar wo dono ruh saamne aa bhi jaaye to...
Isse to achha mama ke ghar ruk kar saari baatein sabko bata deta..shayad koi solution nikal aata isse...
Lekin honi ko koun taal sakta hai.. Jo hona hai wo to hoke hi rahega...
ab buri kismat ho ya niyati... ahmad wapas laut gaya.... sath mein shayan ko bhi pick kar liya...
Lagta hai jaise car accident mein us aurat aur us bachhi ki maut huyi thi.. Thik waise hi ab ahmad ka bhi accident hone wala hai...car ab un dono ruh ki control mein puri tarah...waise ahmad ke sath sath Shayan bhi muft mein marne wala hai..
Jo gunah usne kiya tha ahmad ne aaj shayad uski saza milne wali hai aaj ushe...
Shaandar update, shaandar lekhni shaandar shabdon ka chayan aur sath hi dilkash kirdaaro ki bhumika bhi...

Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills :yourock: :yourock:
 

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