Horror Char Ratein (Horror) (Completed)

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Char Ratein​

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Update 04	Update 05	Update 06
Update 07	Update 08	Update 09

Char Ratein​

 

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abhi read kar leta hoon HAKIM

 

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for new story

Wow Nice title

NICE UPDATE DEAR STORY MEIN AHMED KO KUCHH CHEMICAL LOCHA HUA LAG RAHA HAI

bro

 

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DARNA MNA HAI

Dara kon raha hai

YE BAAT AHMED BAKHOOBI BTA SAKTA HAI

Ahmad ki halat tight hai filhal

 

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ye kia hai be

 

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"Ahmad chahie bhool ja tu apne ghunaho ko
Par tere ghunaha tujhe kabhi nahi bhulenge
Tu chahie duniya ke kisi bhi kone mai chale ja Ahmad
Par tere ghunha tera piccha marte dam tak nahin chodenge
Tu chahie jese apne aage khada karde
Par apne gunaho ka lekha toh tujhe kaatna hi padega "​

Btw agar story ke update ke baare mai kahu toh scene kaafi acche se narrate kiye hai jo usse visualize karne mai aasani se pata chalta hai
Story ke har scene ki speed uttni hi hai jeetne jarurate hai
Na koe jayda tezz aur na hi koe jayada slow.
Fear aur thrill ka mila jhula mahol taiyar karne mai aap kamyab huve ho bro and for it you deserve .
Waiting for next updates with hike of thrill and fear.

for such a wonderful review

 

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Reader ke deemag me worning dekar ki jo bhi mai likh raha hai ye sirf aor sirf thught hai iske alva kuch aor nehi hai. Bahut hi lajavab tarikaa hai.

Congratulations for new. Story

bro, disclaimer dena zruri hai, islie ke koi ye na samjhe ke writer apni zindgi hi na bta rhaa ho

 

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Hunted

Read it

 

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Drissy badaa hi khufnak thaa sote huye ahmd ke nind me khalal dal koyi itna ghasita itnaa ghasitaa ki vichra chotil ho gaya.chikhe besumar nekla par na bibi ko pata chla na hi beti ko pata chla. Dono besud hokar aise sote rahe aaaagar koyi boom bhi fhod de to unhe fark bhi na pade.

Jab ahmad se do inshan takraya tab ahmad ko car rokar dekhna chaiye tha barhal us waqt sabhi ke jehan me ek hi baat aata hai ki mai kya si pachede me fhas na jau kyuki aise mamlo me bhid sahi galt nehi dekhte bas prthm dristya jo apradhi dikhta hai us par dana panee liye chad jate aur pit pit kar rahi ke fhakir bana dete.

Adbhut atulniya lekhan kaushal

for your review

 

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Ahmad be like - Abhi kuch dino se lag raha hai usko, badla badla sa wo hai....
Wo baitha baitha din mein sapne

Dekta neendein bhi kam hai......

Abhi kuch dino se Ahmad ne suna hai dil ka
Roj hi kuch naya hai,, Koi raaz kambakht hai chupaye, rab hi jaane ki kya hai uske dil mein, jispe ab shaq uska...... Kahi uske dil ko pyaar to nahi ho gaya....

Bhootni be like - ahmad bekhabar , Ya usko sab khabar....
Ek din liye sahi par zara bhootni ke masoom dil pe gaur kar....
Palko mein wo rakh le ahmad ko
Ki dil ahmad ka aa na jaaye kahin gair par

Ooo ma go turu lob

Ahmad bechara bhootni ko sasha samajh betha hai , aage dekhna aap

 

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bhai jese ki aapke 1st update se hi maloom pad gya ki dar kya hai wahi aapne 2nd update mein bhi usi dar ko kayam rakha hai mujhe sabse achhi baat ye lagi ki ismein kahi bhi or kuchh bhi befaltu jesa nahi baki bhai complete review baad mein dunga abhi ke liye to bas ye

, aur ye pata nhi kia likha hai ,